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Greeneyes
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In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2000-11-05 10:14 PM


    Evenings there upon the cliffs,
    just at sunset, the pelicans play,
    the ocean stirs the flow of waves
    in darkness, running over wet soft earth

    The soul can be heard,
    sounds of sea swelling,
    falling, breathing

    Rising up on it's haunt against
    the mouth of the caves,
    splitting the flowers against
    the sea colliding with the mountain

    Gently arousing the flow for the
    mountain, for the sea to chant your
    name to the night sky,

    Your aroma still lingers
    when I stand there,
    still on soft ground,
    still lingers as the ocean mist
    spreads you over the earth

    Spreads you over me,
    I find peace again

    In memory

© Copyright 2000 Lauren~ - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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1 posted 2000-11-05 10:39 PM


for the sea to chant your
    name to the night sky,

    Your aroma still lingers
    when I stand there,
    still on soft ground,
    still lingers as the ocean mist
    spreads you over the earth

    Spreads you over me,
    I find peace again

    In memory

=================
once again...in your words ... I read me...
this is so beautiful and serene ...
written like a whispered secret...
so nice to see you back and posting again
take care
jm

There are places inside our souls -
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts -
that need to be loved this much.
~jm~


inot2B
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2 posted 2000-11-05 10:47 PM


This is beautiful. I love the image you have put forth in my mind. Thank you
Ron K. Fox
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3 posted 2000-11-05 10:47 PM


a haunting beautiful image, almost a secret you have shared. Thank you. Ron

Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox


kelly bo bottoms
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4 posted 2000-11-05 10:48 PM


makes you feel like you are right there...loved it.
Butterflies_dont_cry
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5 posted 2000-11-06 11:21 AM


Such tenderly woven memories and
emotions...this is so beautiful~


Sunnyone
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6 posted 2000-11-06 11:31 AM


Greeneyes....
   Thank you for writing this!! It is so peaceful and beautiful, and written with love. It touched my heart....


Follow your dream!


Sven
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7 posted 2000-11-06 12:27 PM


the comfort that we can find in memory. . .

Wonderful Greeneyes. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Martie
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8 posted 2000-11-06 01:08 PM


Green eyes...The imagery in this is so beautiful and your memories make the poem dear.
Irish Rose
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9 posted 2000-11-06 03:08 PM


This is beautiful, love the theme and the way it flowed.

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses
over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey.""
Laurie Lee

Kathleen



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10 posted 2000-11-06 03:11 PM


very lovely images..enjoyed..

                ~Victoria~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


Mark Bohannan
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11 posted 2000-11-06 04:25 PM


You do paint it so lovely you know.  I really loved this one much and it is so nice to read your works again.
ethome
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12 posted 2000-11-06 04:32 PM


Very very pretty scenes....takes the reader right there for a relaxing trip...love those ocean sunsets they are magnificent...good work here!!
Aimster
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13 posted 2000-11-06 04:33 PM


quite beautiful indeed. a wonderful
whispered secret you have shared. glad
to see you posting again. your work and
you have been missed. lovely writing!

take care.
amy  

Paula Finn
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14 posted 2000-11-07 12:27 PM


This was so sweetly done...just a breath of a memory..lovely
Wilfred Yeats
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15 posted 2000-11-07 12:45 PM


returns to old haunts and memories - remind us that some memories deserve to ber retained
Beautiful as always - old friend. ~S~

Greeneyes
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16 posted 2000-11-07 01:13 PM


Thank You all for the warm responses, and please forgive my not being personal with each of you in my response....I do really appreciate a place of poets such as this...

Again my sincere thanks


Greeneyes

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"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."
-Unknown


CocoBaci
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17 posted 2000-11-07 01:17 PM


Greeneyes, this is a seamless write
My compliments to you absolutely beautiful

Coco

Greeneyes
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18 posted 2000-11-08 05:29 PM


CocoBaci~


I appreciate that thank you for your words of kindness...*S*


Greeneyes

"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."
-Unknown


Janet Marie
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19 posted 2004-10-09 11:20 AM



Mysteria
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20 posted 2005-08-20 01:13 PM


You know I think you have grown so much in your writing, but this particular one I love, as it feels written for me, Jan, Karen, or anyone that suffered a loss, and yet...I know it was yours.  Digging around, and dusting shelves, don't mind me.
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