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CocoBaci
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0 posted 2000-11-05 06:57 PM



There upon a satin pillow case
Resides an abandoned tear
Of memories held from times ago
Reflecting hearts once embraced in forevermore's

With one toss in the rinse cycle removes away the tear
Hang it out on clothesline in summer's air to breathe
Iron out the crinkles and static energy
Slip on the brushed cotton it comforts you in dreams
And forget about two pillows treat yourself to three


Coco



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inot2B
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1 posted 2000-11-05 07:01 PM


You had me till you got to the part
Iron out the crinkles and static energy
I love the poem but no ironing for me

Sven
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2 posted 2000-11-05 09:16 PM


I'll always take another pillow Coco. . .

Wonderful poem from you my friend. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Ron K. Fox
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3 posted 2000-11-05 10:50 PM


That's all...just wash em right out. way to go coco..Ron

Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox


Janet Marie
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4 posted 2000-11-05 10:56 PM


There upon a satin pillow case
Resides an abandoned tear
Of memories held from times ago
Reflecting hearts once embraced in forevermore's
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beautiful coco...
you covered a whole gambit of emtions in
a few unique well written words.
if only we could wash away pain as easliy as the tears...
well done girlie  
take care
jm

Marge Tindal
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5 posted 2000-11-09 09:36 PM


Dani~
I found this hiding on the laundry shelf.
You know me ... leave a tear of remember around ...
and I'll find it.

It's just wonderfully nostalgic with remembering.
~*Marge*~




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Paula Finn
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6 posted 2000-11-10 02:03 AM


Coco...three pillows and four dogs later there is no more room for tears in my bed...thanks for reminding me...
Dee
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7 posted 2000-11-10 02:19 AM


Well said, Coco. I like the third pillow idea, too. If it makes you uncomfortable you can punch it into shape or just throw it on the floor!
Dee


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tracie66
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8 posted 2000-11-10 03:46 AM


Coco~
Wonderful read...well penned my friend  
Tracie~


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It is the harmony of the universe



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9 posted 2000-11-10 04:02 AM


When a tear is left on a pillow case, and only one...it is hard to concentrate on the tear, hard to follow it through the rest of its life.  I myself want to concentrate on the larger picture, the person who shed that single tear.  I want to know why, to explore the emotions that led to shedding only one tear.  But you....you now.  You've gone and got all focused on me.  You followed that tear all the way through the rinse cycle and the ironing board and the clothesline and everything.  You have got some serious concentration going on there.  Excellently accomplished.  
Gentle Spirit
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10 posted 2000-11-10 05:48 AM


One tear, washed away.  Lovely Coco.  *s*
CocoBaci
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11 posted 2000-11-10 02:46 PM


I apologize for not rendering a reply earlier as I've been busy reading as you probably know and at times I kinda shy back in responses.  But, I must say that your replies to this ONE poem has touched my heart.

~ONE tear indeed you read it rite...
~ONE thought of a time resides in her mind...

Hugs2AllOfU
Dani

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