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Poetboy96
Junior Member
since 2000-11-05
Posts 12


0 posted 2000-11-05 01:36 PM


"The fruit of Temptation"

Looking from a distance,
hesitant to act upon,
an instant reaction.
You know you should,
but you do not know,
how this story unfolds.
You seek wisdom and answers,
from the magic man.
No telling says the crystalball.
So the fruit of temptation,
blows in the breeze.
It's within your grasp,
will you have a taste?
You give in,
there was no choice.
I always knew temptation would win,
as you take a bite.
One leads to two,
then to three.
What an incredible fruit,
you have picked from the tree.
-John W. Hedglin- www.johnspoetry.com

I'm new to this place and what a place it is.  I am glad to have been given a link to it.

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jonmcm
Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 222
England
1 posted 2000-11-05 01:46 PM


Hi John,

A nice opener for a first post. I agree temptation is quite a powerful agent.

Had a look at your website too, and notice your a Black Sabbath fan: a man of taste  

Cheers
Jon

Victoria
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Member Ascendant
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869

2 posted 2000-11-05 02:04 PM


Welcome to Passions..im sure you will love it..looking forward to reading more of your poems..

                     ~Victoria~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
3 posted 2000-11-05 02:12 PM


John,

I like this one . . . a poem with a lesson in it.  Very well done and a nice entrance into our little circle of friends.  Welcome to Passions!!  

Lone Wolf


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

Corinne
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since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167
state of confusion
4 posted 2000-11-05 02:16 PM


Welcome to passions! A lovely message you've penned here!

Corinne

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
5 posted 2000-11-05 02:41 PM


Welcome to Passions
I hope you enjoy it here!  This poem is really good, it's a great entrance piece


"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

6 posted 2000-11-05 03:36 PM


HI John and add my welcome to the list
its so nice to have you here...
you've made a poetic first impression with this poem...
very cool writing..
I gave your page a peek and will go back as time allows...
thank you for the kind reply to my work.
i look forward to more of yours
take care
jm

There are places inside our souls -
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts -
that need to be loved this much.
~jm~


Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

7 posted 2000-11-05 03:39 PM


Welcome to Passions, Poetboy! Great poem! Please check your email for a special welcome from Passions!

Denise

Rainydays
Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324

8 posted 2000-11-05 03:46 PM


Hi New Guy, I'm the new girl! (smiling) Brace yourself, I think you're going to like it here! These folks are so nice and the poetry sharing is remarkable.

I enjoyed your poem ~ thanks!

Rainydays

Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
9 posted 2000-11-05 05:00 PM


PB96, welcome,welcome to Passions. This is a grand entrace, and we will all delight as you find more of yourself through your work to share with us...

it will become a most delightful experience...


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ



Marge Tindal
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since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores
10 posted 2000-11-05 05:09 PM


PoetBoy~
Welcome to the family of Passions.
Nice entrance you've made.
You will find some of the nicest people
on the Internet
and the most remarkable talent too !

You're gonna like it here !
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Ron K. Fox
Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925

11 posted 2000-11-05 05:15 PM


Now that you've put your foot in the door...Welcome...enjoy the ride

Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox


Rhiannon
Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 95
Fayetteville, TN USA
12 posted 2000-11-05 05:33 PM


I'm glad I gave you the link here....and i'm glad you got such a good response!  Very good poem.  
love,
leslie

snowpants
Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061
KS
13 posted 2000-11-05 05:50 PM


'You give in,
there was no choice.
I always knew temptation would win,
as you take a bite.
One leads to two,
then to three.
What an incredible fruit,
you have picked from the tree.'

Fantastic lines here!  Welcome to Passions!  I'm sure you will enjoy your stay here, as everyone is absolutely great!!

sp  

I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me...

Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
14 posted 2000-11-06 05:52 PM


poetboy,
welcome to passions. I hope you enjoy your stay.
Be well
Kethry


Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy

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