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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396
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Sometimes, When You're In Your Bathrobe Sometimes, when you're in your bathrobe and it's raining, and the minutes trickle, they trickle, in droplets, on panes salt stained and bare, you notice the air twisting, breathing, in the space around your state, you notice things that feel alive that reach for you in your time, your weaknesses swimming, you realize the kind of energies involved, the kind of things that pass through you, they're alive, and sometimes stopping them swiftly, grasping, feeling, can waken you to the realities once buried, swarming now, it's incredible the way the sky can cry at the most fitting time, as if it knows, and on days like this when you're in your bathrobe and it's raining, you just notice things. [This message has been edited by SpitFire (edited 11-05-2000).] |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I love the way you describe those moments in this. Too hard to pick a favourite line, it's all great. "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Gosh spitfire, of ALL my favorites from you, this is now top of the heap. So much in here and so succiently and wonderfully put...my friend you're amazing. jwesley |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Gosh spitfire, of ALL my favorites from you, this is now top of the heap. So much in here and so succiently and wonderfully put...my friend you're amazing. jwesley |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Gosh spitfire, of ALL my favorites from you, this is now top of the heap. So much in here and so succiently and wonderfully put...my friend you're amazing. jwesley |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Eagle,...thanks so much for stopping in...I appreciate your comments. ~Jwesley, thank you thank you thank you! Amazing? nooo. but thank you much. *Peace guys.  . |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
sometimes when we wear our bathrobes, we feel things with such intensity...as you have very well related... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
mines frilly notice me...i likes this yuh |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
kind of energies involved, the kind of things that pass through you, they're alive, and sometimes stopping them swiftly, grasping, feeling, can waken you to the realities once buried, swarming now, it's incredible the way the sky can cry at the most fitting time, as if it knows, ================== yes....EXACTLY ... this is JUST how it happens.. this is awesome writing you have defined the moment and the intensity with poetic perfection. this is a very cool poem my friend .. very cool indeed later-looking-good-in-your-bathrobe-gator  jm |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SpitFire~ Yes ... it is just the way you describe it ... 'it's incredible the way the sky can cry at the most fitting time, as if it knows, and on days like this when you're in your bathrobe and it's raining, you just notice things.' Yes. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Ahh - a diamond here A... kind of a deluge of heavy thinking - dig this, smiles from a frown. hugz C |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
SpitFire, Hi you. Isn't it amazing what we can see in the quiet of the morning when we least expect it? Things just seem to be so clear. Perhaps all we needed was a little time for reflection. Nice you my friend. **HUGS** Hope all is well. Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'and on days like this when you're in your bathrobe and it's raining, you just notice things.' Wow. My favorite lines here, though the entire poem is fantastic!! Such a cozy feeling. You've got me with this one because the rain is my weakness!! I absolutely love this one!! Great writing! sp  I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Sunshine, thank you ever so much for coming by and for leaving me your words. ~Walt, I noticed ya a long time ago . Thanx you, for stopping in.~Janet Marie, I'm so glad you visited, thank you for such a wonderful reply. ~Marge, Hello, thank you, thank you for seeing it. ~Chris, thanks. Mmm, exactly what it was. *000Back*. ~LW, hey you, thanks for all you left me...and for reading me always. Hugs hun. ~Snowpants, first, love that name...and thank you for all that you said, I appreciate your comments. *Peace Everyone. |
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