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Mike
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since 1999-06-19
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0 posted 2000-11-04 04:08 PM


Leave not a stone
to mark this site,
for I have felt,
yes, I have felt of sorrow's bite.
Witness not pain's pantomime,
unwanted pallor
lost in sands of shifting time,
for I have felt,
yes, I have felt.
Trailing brambles, cormorants,
as starving beggar, mendicants,
who stand before
all that I covet,
never looking, never seeing,
no light from forth heaven's sky
illuminates,
for I have felt,
yes, I have felt of sorrow's bite.
Upon hot breathless wind,
beyond a dying sun,
knowing not if day is done,
pillared forest aisles
devoid of burning beakers
pouring forth of Sol,
heeding not of sorrow's call,
for I have felt,
yes, I have felt.
Spanning breadth
of river's depth,
bridging not
words yet unwritten,
unknown sounds of sorrow bitten,
for I have felt,
yes, I have felt of sorrow's bite.
Alone I stand
with outstretched limb,
whorling leaves and fragile stem,
no hawk nor dove,
may haunt my breast,
amid deep roots in mystic quest,
for I have felt,
yes, I have felt.
I now wait
for night's cruel fate,
fingers bleeding,
in pain pleading,
sorrow's call
in final fall,
fearing not honed axes thrust,
mourn no more from dust to dust,
for I have felt,
yes, I have felt of sorrow's bite.
Unbroken silence of the night,
waveless, tideless,
Luna's light,
brooding over all living things,
hushing even,
cicada's wings,
ensconced in chill as stillness wanes,
deserted chasm, darkness reigns
in echo of night's silent spasm,
staring blankly,
sterile features of uninhabited lair,
carried lower, lower,
to numb's despair,
for I have felt,
yes, I have felt.
Confronted by no mortal being,
consciousness of death unseeing,
whilst sneak away
on noisless feet,
Mesistopheles, in life's defeat.
I stand above
cold pauper's grave
as darkness calls to soul enslave,
Shrouded chambers, fingers bleed,
dark spirits stalk,
hell hath decreed,
for I have felt,
yes, for I have felt.
Man's unperverted ethereal mask,
erected by death's loathesome lust,
mournful soul,
by evil crushed,
touched upon by lifeless breath,
stand face to face
with sin and death,
in the darkness of the night,
for I have felt,                    
yes, I have felt of sorrow's bite.
Dark shadow's rest,
on bier and vault,
ceding not to pain's exalt,
adrift on sea of trust betrayed,
attempt not seige nor escalade,
scourged by scorpions,
midst gulfs of space,
For I know thee
as know my face,
eschew the sufferers to borrow,
as feel the sting of endless sorrow,
for I have felt,
yes, I have felt of sorrow's bite,
sorrow of my sorrow,
yes, I have felt of sorrow's bite.

yes, I have felt.



[This message has been edited by Mike (edited 11-04-2000).]

© Copyright 2000 Mike - All Rights Reserved
Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
1 posted 2000-11-04 04:52 PM


Mike,
Wow! It didn't seem to be too long and it left me reading to the end and wanting more. Heady poetry and the images it created ... Wow!
Be well
Kethry


Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2000-11-04 05:59 PM


I now wait
for night's cruel fate,
fingers bleeding,
in pain pleading,
sorrow's call
in final fall,
fearing not honed axes thrust,
mourn no more from dust to dust,
for I have felt,
yes, I have felt of sorrow's bite.
Unbroken silence of the night,
waveless, tideless,
Luna's light,
brooding over all living things,
hushing even,
cicada's wings,
ensconced in chill as stillness wanes,
deserted chasm, darkness reigns
in echo of night's silent spasm,
staring blankly,
sterile features of uninhabited lair,
carried lower, lower,
to numb's despair,
for I have felt,
yes, I have felt.
Confronted by no mortal being,
consciousness of death unseeing,
whilst sneak away
on noisless feet,
Mesistopheles, in life's defeat.
===========
why in the name of poetry would you apologize for this...
my goodness this is exceptional ..
astonishing poetry Mike..
the cadence...the vocabulary-which by the way is SO COOL!!!!
the repetion of those lines made it even more cool...
the vivid imagery, the constant flow of verbage...
the poetic cliches' penned  so perfectly that the were no longer cliche'
I could go on and on ...
this one goes in my file to read many more times to take it all in and do it justice...
you are a poet sir...
take care
jm

Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

3 posted 2000-11-04 09:34 PM


Excellent expression, Mike. Fabulous writing.

Denise

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
4 posted 2000-11-04 09:37 PM


Never apologize for writing this spectacular
Mike...the feelings were honest and so raw...
the length was un-noticed, once I dove in
there was no coming to the surface for air
until the last word had been
read...excellent work~

Martie
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since 1999-09-21
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California
5 posted 2000-11-04 10:01 PM


Mike--You know how much I admire your writing...no??? Well, I do.  
Mike
Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462

6 posted 2000-11-05 12:17 PM


Kethry... appreciate the wow... thanks for the reply.
Janet Marie...  I have been accused of a constant flow of verbage before..*smile*
seriously, thank you so much for the extemely gracious reply.
Denise...danke for my favorite legal assistant type person..
Butterflies... thank you for the very kind reply...
Martie... you are indeed a jewel...

shadow of poetry
Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 76
midwest usa
7 posted 2000-11-05 02:17 PM


holycow!!!
this is an unbelievable poem
my sis (JM)told me to make sure i read this one and i am so glad she did.
i dont think ive ever read such a cool and well written poem before
i will read it several times before my blonde mind can absorb it all but it will be my pleasure
thanks to jan for pointing it out to me
trisha

my sister is the poet
I am but a shadow.
by the light of poetry
I read then dream

Rainydays
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since 2000-10-21
Posts 324

8 posted 2000-11-05 02:58 PM


You have an acceptional piece of poetry here. I must apologize to YOU for not reading it sooner. Wonderful writing.

Take care,
Rainydays

Rainydays
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since 2000-10-21
Posts 324

9 posted 2000-11-05 02:59 PM


You have an acceptional piece of poetry here. I must apologize to YOU for not reading it sooner. Wonderful writing.

Take care,
Rainydays

Rainydays
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since 2000-10-21
Posts 324

10 posted 2000-11-05 03:16 PM


You have an acceptional piece of poetry here. I must apologize to YOU for not reading it sooner. Wonderful writing.

Take care,
Rainydays

Rainydays
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since 2000-10-21
Posts 324

11 posted 2000-11-05 03:18 PM


Gee, I must have REALLY liked it!! LOL!

(I did, actually, but don't know how I said it three times)  

Rainy

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12 posted 2000-11-05 06:07 PM


Mike~
You set the hook and slowly reeled me in.
This one's a keeper !
~*Marge*~


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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
13 posted 2000-11-05 06:16 PM


"Man's unperverted ethereal mask,
erected by death's loathesome lust,
mournful soul,
by evil crushed,
touched upon by lifeless breath,
stand face to face
with sin and death,
in the darkness of the night,
for I have felt,
yes, I have felt of sorrow's bite."

Wonderful Mike! This had me absorbed in totality from beginning to end. Do not apologize for the length ... for I wish it had continued further! An excellent, thought-provoking read, loved it!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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