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A Whisper's Caress
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on the horizon of a fairytale

0 posted 2000-11-04 01:27 PM


In The Heart Of Loneliness

Following the beckoning of your soul
I discover I am lost
in the heart of loneliness

Your façade of valor has drawn me in
and I find I am all alone

Believing the wealth of your spirit
would be abundant in the riches
a gallant knight, I hurried to revel
in it’s warmth

Now seemingly a prisoner
all that I know is a cold dark
dungeon of isolation.



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Elizabeth
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1 posted 2000-11-04 02:36 PM


Whisper's Caress (I love that name)~first of all, welcome to Passions.   This poem gave me a sense of being in a dank, gloomy dungeon. Very sad, but well done.

Elizabeth


You cling to your ways and leave mine to me.
Suum cuique.
~Elizabeth



Marsha
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2 posted 2000-11-04 02:52 PM


Whisper Caress, this is very well written, I really like this poem. Very visual, well done.
Oh and welcome to Passions
Take care
                 Marsha
                        


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning

Irish Rose
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3 posted 2000-11-04 03:00 PM


Welcome (if I haven't already done so) to Passions!  This is captivating and very well written.  I enjoyed the intense emotion and I'm drawn to poems that seem to leave nothing out.  This didn't.  Hope to read more.

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses
over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey.""
Laurie Lee

Kathleen



A Whisper's Caress
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on the horizon of a fairytale
4 posted 2000-11-04 03:49 PM


Thank you for the very kind replies.
I am just getting to know everybody here, and am really enjoying the different styles of the many writers.

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
5 posted 2000-11-04 05:41 PM


...and we are certainly glad you found us, and hope that you make this your second home...

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ



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6 posted 2000-11-04 05:43 PM


Welcome to Passions.  I loved this.  I'm looking forward to many more.
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