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How Can You Walk Away?

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Balladeer
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0 posted 11-03-2000 08:24 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer


I never knew that passion was
A doorway meant for me.
You opened up my eyes to show me
All there was to see.
So here I am - a brand new man
With just one thing to say.
Now that you made me what I am
How can you walk away?

We danced together in the rain,
Laughing at the storm.
You kissed my cheek to show me there
Was no cause for alarm.
You made my life a brand new game
And taught me how to play
So, now that you made me what I am
How can you walk away?

Now here I am, bewildered by
The questions I don't know.
I'm revved up with a tank of gas
But got nowhere to go.
Please tell the man that you created
How to live this way.
Now that you made me what I am
How can you walk away?
© Copyright 2000 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
peppermint35
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1 posted 11-03-2000 08:40 PM       View Profile for peppermint35   Email peppermint35   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for peppermint35

This is so poignant; there's the question of the hour......how can you walk away?

Pepper
"I honor the place in you, that when you are in that place, and I am in that place in me, we are in the same place"
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2 posted 11-03-2000 08:41 PM       View Profile for inot2B   Email inot2B   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for inot2B

Balladeer you seem so sad. A man who writes as sweet as you should be able to find a woman who will appreciate him for who he is.


[This message has been edited by inot2B (edited 11-03-2000).]
Jamie
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3 posted 11-03-2000 09:03 PM       View Profile for Jamie   Email Jamie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Jamie's Home Page   View IP for Jamie

Very well done.


Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".

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4 posted 11-03-2000 09:33 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Balladeer~
Need a great big hug ?
You got it !

You've sure got a way with these tender touches.
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~


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5 posted 11-03-2000 09:37 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

You gave her all you have
you touched her with delight
you stoked the fires there within
what is wrong with this night?
where is the loving song
where is the fire within?
Oh my most tender heart
where did the story begin?


Karilea
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I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound.
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6 posted 11-03-2000 09:46 PM       View Profile for lucky   Email lucky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lucky

Michael,

I like this a LOT... nice work as usual.

dale



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To write of feelings that touch all hearts in some manner is my delight.
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7 posted 11-03-2000 09:47 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Peppermint...beats me! Thank you...

inot2B...maybe knowing me for what I am makes them walk away!  

Jamie.....3 very kind words...thank you

Marge.....2 hours@90!

sunshine... it began at the beginning
            it ended at the end
            from friend to lover then once again
            from lover back to friend.

Thank you, Karilea..  

lucky....my thanks...I'm glad you like it.

[This message has been edited by Balladeer (edited 11-03-2000).]
Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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8 posted 11-03-2000 09:50 PM       View Profile for Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Email Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rosemary J. Gwaltney's Home Page   View IP for Rosemary J. Gwaltney

Oh, man!  Another tear-jerker!  Beautifully worded.  My heart goes out to you!

Janet Marie
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9 posted 11-03-2000 10:22 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

your breaking my heart tonite sweets ...
this is two sad ones in a row ...

she was a fool to walk away
a man man like you deserves a woman that'll stay.
maybe she thought you were too sweet for her
and these other thoughts do occur ...
perhaps she knew you were just too much
that she couldnt handle your gentle touch
maybe she knew you were just too special and rare
you were more man than she would dare
I guess we shouldnt judge her till we've walked in her shoes...
I bet shes singing her share of the blues
it cant be easy knowing she lost her chance with the BEST ...
now she will have to settle for all the rest.
-----------
TRUST ME WHEN I SAY.....
her loss sweet cheeks....HER LOSS ...
(ohhowilovewhenyouwritelikethisevenifitssad)
*kisskiss*
jm

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10 posted 11-03-2000 10:34 PM       View Profile for Gentle Spirit   Email Gentle Spirit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Spirit

Balladeer, Your poem touched on some very vivid realities of life that even now I am still learning.  Your sadness is felt in the flowing of words from your heart.  Thank you kind sir this night for sharing what is truly a very touching piece.  
D    

On the wings of words our spirits fly, and our souls are free.


Seymour Tabin
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11 posted 11-03-2000 10:40 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Balladeer,
Well your in my ballywick but you got your wish from JM. Good job on the poem.
Alle'cram
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12 posted 11-03-2000 11:01 PM       View Profile for Alle'cram   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alle'cram

Ball,  this is Class!! Heartmelting, sighing & soo romantic!  Enjoyed. Marcy
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13 posted 11-03-2000 11:01 PM       View Profile for Ron K. Fox   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ron K. Fox

you are rockin tonight. one great one after another. Though a couple of sad ones in there. just to lighten things up.....
how could you walk away?...remember what happened the last time...soon as you turned your back?...your rhyme was missing! so stay there and keep your eyes open...I ain't chasing that ryhme again!

Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox

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14 posted 11-03-2000 11:17 PM       View Profile for Wilfred Yeats   Email Wilfred Yeats   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Wilfred Yeats's Home Page   View IP for Wilfred Yeats

a veritible flood of great writing from you of a sudden - - I'll not question - just say hurrah!
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15 posted 11-03-2000 11:54 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Rosemary...thank you. One of those tear-jerkin' nights, I guess...

JanetMarie..no, no one should be judged for doing what they feel is best for their life...and you did it all without mentioning SPAM!!!  

Gentle Spirit....your comment matches your name. I thank you for such wonderful words...

Sy...your ballywick ain't a bad place to be!

Marcy....you romantic little devil!!!  

Ron...that's what I'm complaining about! Sh walked away and I didn't even get a chance to frisk her!!!!

Wilfred...not my normal style...just one of them nights. Thank you for your approval...

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Balladeer,   a tender write yet somehow it tugs  

Great read for me tonite thank you
Coco
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I can only hope it's not applicable to your own personal Balladeer...other than that it sure is a good summation of what happens to many, men or women. Beautiful rhyme scheme and flow very enjoyable read....chin up write on!!
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18 posted 11-04-2000 09:42 AM       View Profile for catalinamoon   Email catalinamoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit catalinamoon's Home Page   View IP for catalinamoon

How, indeed? She is a fool. And I know a man just like her.
Incredible writing, thanks.
Sandra
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And here, I simply sit and cry,
My vocabulary reduced to "WHY?"

Your vocabulary is obviously not as sparce. *S* Great poem, Deer One!
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Sigh ... I haven't had much of a chance to read the last while, but I simply cannot resist the charm that draws me in through your name on a post. If this be true to life Michael, she is a sorry woman indeed. Beautifully written, with such tender and sorrowful thoughts. Hugs to you for this lovely verse ...  

Best wishes,
/Kit
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21 posted 11-04-2000 12:55 PM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irish Rose

She's going in the wrong direction. This is indeed, poignant, don't cry!!

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses
over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey.""
Laurie Lee

Kathleen


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22 posted 11-04-2000 02:01 PM       View Profile for Charisma   Email Charisma   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Charisma's Home Page   View IP for Charisma

(((warm huge hug))), sometimes we can only ask.....why...and wonder how they can walk away....Hope that you feel better soon.

((hugs)))
Charisma....

ooops forgot to tell you, that this was wonderful written....as always....
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23 posted 11-05-2000 05:24 AM       View Profile for Kethry   Email Kethry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kethry

'Deer,
how could she leave, did she not know
your heart is the best,alone or on show
did she not see the love that began
did not want the sensitive man
was she blind, did friendship call
her, away from you did she lose all
I understand it brings you pain
If she could, she would always remain
but maybe she can't and there's no blame
just keep writing on to help bear the strain

HuGS



Kethry



Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy
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24 posted 11-06-2000 03:51 PM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

No-one could walk away from bliss
if ecstasy took hold.
Nobody could just up and leave
and be so very cold.
If there were dreams to hold so true,
if futures were in sight,
there is no person on this earth,
who'd walk away from light.
I do not see how anyone
could walk away from you -
if you were standing, opened arms,
within that someone's view.
It's truly inconceivable
that anyone could leave --
even satellites stay put
when waiting to receive.
How could this happen, Poet 'deer?
How could one walk away?
Perhaps the disappearing comes
within a shadow play.
It's hard to see when shadows dance
upon the walls, unclear -
and how can someone walk away
from far instead of near?
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

*wink* - this was one touching piece, Michael. "Passion" looks good on you!- i hope this isn't a "true" story... (i always thought that was sort of a funny saying -"true story" - almost sounds like an oxymoron, huh?) anyway... i'd say thanks for the inspiration but i came up with sort of a  sad repartee, so i'll just send my ((((hugs))) your way and maybe if she doesn't come back, you and i can meet somewhere and go out to eat chicken wings or maybe peel-n-eat jumbo shrimp or something! *grin...(geez, another oxymoron "jumbo shrimp")

- all you can ever really ask out of life is a sincere apology and some decent poetry -
 
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