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How Can You Walk Away?
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How Can You Walk Away? |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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I never knew that passion was A doorway meant for me. You opened up my eyes to show me All there was to see. So here I am - a brand new man With just one thing to say. Now that you made me what I am How can you walk away? We danced together in the rain, Laughing at the storm. You kissed my cheek to show me there Was no cause for alarm. You made my life a brand new game And taught me how to play So, now that you made me what I am How can you walk away? Now here I am, bewildered by The questions I don't know. I'm revved up with a tank of gas But got nowhere to go. Please tell the man that you created How to live this way. Now that you made me what I am How can you walk away? |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
This is so poignant; there's the question of the hour......how can you walk away? Pepper "I honor the place in you, that when you are in that place, and I am in that place in me, we are in the same place" Ram Dass |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Balladeer you seem so sad. A man who writes as sweet as you should be able to find a woman who will appreciate him for who he is. [This message has been edited by inot2B (edited 11-03-2000).] |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Very well done. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer~ Need a great big hug ? You got it ! You've sure got a way with these tender touches. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You gave her all you have you touched her with delight you stoked the fires there within what is wrong with this night? where is the loving song where is the fire within? Oh my most tender heart where did the story begin? Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Michael, I like this a LOT... nice work as usual. dale Writing isn't just something I do, it's something I am. To write of feelings that touch all hearts in some manner is my delight. -Marge Tindal |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Peppermint...beats me! Thank you... inot2B...maybe knowing me for what I am makes them walk away!  Jamie.....3 very kind words...thank you Marge.....2 hours@90! sunshine... it began at the beginning it ended at the end from friend to lover then once again from lover back to friend. Thank you, Karilea..  lucky....my thanks...I'm glad you like it. [This message has been edited by Balladeer (edited 11-03-2000).] |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Oh, man! Another tear-jerker! Beautifully worded. My heart goes out to you! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
your breaking my heart tonite sweets ... this is two sad ones in a row ...  she was a fool to walk away a man man like you deserves a woman that'll stay. maybe she thought you were too sweet for her and these other thoughts do occur ... perhaps she knew you were just too much that she couldnt handle your gentle touch maybe she knew you were just too special and rare you were more man than she would dare I guess we shouldnt judge her till we've walked in her shoes... I bet shes singing her share of the blues it cant be easy knowing she lost her chance with the BEST ... now she will have to settle for all the rest. ----------- TRUST ME WHEN I SAY..... her loss sweet cheeks....HER LOSS ... (ohhowilovewhenyouwritelikethisevenifitssad) *kisskiss* jm |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Balladeer, Your poem touched on some very vivid realities of life that even now I am still learning. Your sadness is felt in the flowing of words from your heart. Thank you kind sir this night for sharing what is truly a very touching piece. D  On the wings of words our spirits fly, and our souls are free. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer, Well your in my ballywick but you got your wish from JM. Good job on the poem. |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Ball, this is Class!! Heartmelting, sighing & soo romantic! Enjoyed. Marcy |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
you are rockin tonight. one great one after another. Though a couple of sad ones in there. just to lighten things up..... how could you walk away?...remember what happened the last time...soon as you turned your back?...your rhyme was missing! so stay there and keep your eyes open...I ain't chasing that ryhme again! Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
a veritible flood of great writing from you of a sudden - - I'll not question - just say hurrah! |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Rosemary...thank you. One of those tear-jerkin' nights, I guess... JanetMarie..no, no one should be judged for doing what they feel is best for their life...and you did it all without mentioning SPAM!!! Gentle Spirit....your comment matches your name. I thank you for such wonderful words... Sy...your ballywick ain't a bad place to be! Marcy....you romantic little devil!!! Ron...that's what I'm complaining about! Sh walked away and I didn't even get a chance to frisk her!!!! Wilfred...not my normal style...just one of them nights. Thank you for your approval... |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Balladeer, a tender write yet somehow it tugs Great read for me tonite thank you Coco |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I can only hope it's not applicable to your own personal Balladeer...other than that it sure is a good summation of what happens to many, men or women. Beautiful rhyme scheme and flow very enjoyable read....chin up write on!! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
How, indeed? She is a fool. And I know a man just like her. Incredible writing, thanks. Sandra |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
And here, I simply sit and cry, My vocabulary reduced to "WHY?" Your vocabulary is obviously not as sparce. *S* Great poem, Deer One! |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Sigh ... I haven't had much of a chance to read the last while, but I simply cannot resist the charm that draws me in through your name on a post. If this be true to life Michael, she is a sorry woman indeed. Beautifully written, with such tender and sorrowful thoughts. Hugs to you for this lovely verse ... Best wishes, /Kit |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
She's going in the wrong direction. This is indeed, poignant, don't cry!! "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
(((warm huge hug))), sometimes we can only ask.....why...and wonder how they can walk away....Hope that you feel better soon. ((hugs))) Charisma.... ooops forgot to tell you, that this was wonderful written....as always.... |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
'Deer, how could she leave, did she not know your heart is the best,alone or on show did she not see the love that began did not want the sensitive man was she blind, did friendship call her, away from you did she lose all I understand it brings you pain If she could, she would always remain but maybe she can't and there's no blame just keep writing on to help bear the strain HuGSKethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
No-one could walk away from bliss if ecstasy took hold. Nobody could just up and leave and be so very cold. If there were dreams to hold so true, if futures were in sight, there is no person on this earth, who'd walk away from light. I do not see how anyone could walk away from you - if you were standing, opened arms, within that someone's view. It's truly inconceivable that anyone could leave -- even satellites stay put when waiting to receive. How could this happen, Poet 'deer? How could one walk away? Perhaps the disappearing comes within a shadow play. It's hard to see when shadows dance upon the walls, unclear - and how can someone walk away from far instead of near? ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ *wink* - this was one touching piece, Michael. "Passion" looks good on you!- i hope this isn't a "true" story... (i always thought that was sort of a funny saying -"true story" - almost sounds like an oxymoron, huh?) anyway... i'd say thanks for the inspiration but i came up with sort of a sad repartee, so i'll just send my ((((hugs))) your way and maybe if she doesn't come back, you and i can meet somewhere and go out to eat chicken wings or maybe peel-n-eat jumbo shrimp or something! *grin...(geez, another oxymoron "jumbo shrimp") - all you can ever really ask out of life is a sincere apology and some decent poetry - |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Well there's the problem... You weren't sposed to frisk'er.. It was sposed to be a kissfer'er....  |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Oh..gosh..this was sad but written in the true Balladeer fashion. Another classic.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what a treasure to find here today |
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