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Martie
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0 posted 2000-11-03 07:04 PM


   That Sapphire Wind

The sky is alert with a sapphire wind
that has cleaned the ridge
and torn the yellow leaves
and all the waters fluff up
and slap the air with surprise

a whisper storms across my skin
and nudges my dormant with ions
spreading down the canyon
in a golden dusting of passion
that lifts like spirit water
and fills my empty

and I see from the window a dance
that pirouettes across the garden
and I walk into it with my eyes shut
and feel the wings of exuberance
blow across my mind

and carry me across the meadow
where the earth has scattered seed
skipping with delight my hands holding revelry
across such miles as we are bound
the wind the wind takes me

and twirls my dazzled eyes to you
and opens my gown around me
so you can see my blushed significance
for I can climb the sky
filled with the sap of spring still
not folded or crunched in lack
but displayed and colored with chameleon

Will you come with me across the narrows
down the path into the glen
and pull my dainty dancing slippers off
and touch my soul with your wonder yes
for I would be your soft air
in mold around your swift rising breath
until the night clothes me in chill
and you cover me with feathers.  






[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 11-03-2000).]

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Balladeer
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1 posted 2000-11-03 07:10 PM


Oh, Martie! Your blushed significance would be a wonderful sight!! This poem flows like tht wind....
Dark Angel
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2 posted 2000-11-03 07:26 PM


a whisper storms across my skin
and nudges my dormant with ions
spreading down the canyon
in a golden dusting of passion
that lifts like spirit water
and fills my empty

and

Will you come with me across the narrows
down the path into the glen
and pull my dainty dancing slippers off     and touch my soul with your wonder yes
for I would be your soft air
in mold around your swift rising breath
until the night cloths me in chill
and you cover me with feathers.  

sighhh Martie, you hipnotize me with your words hon   I adore this!
Excellent!

Maree

"If my words could blanket the skies
and fill every corner and crevice of
this earth, still this won't be enough"
"Maree Russo"

Sunshine
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3 posted 2000-11-03 07:35 PM


MARTIE! Wow!  Every word, nuance, inflection...perfection!  I want to write like YOU!

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ



Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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4 posted 2000-11-03 07:43 PM


Oh, Martie, you took me there - I felt it - I saw it - how can you paint my feelings so much better than I can!!!  Your meticulous imagery holds me captive, and your visions of nature and the ocean and the wind and everything ... holds me in rapture.  You have a wonderful way of appealing to all the senses.  I just had to tell you.  Thank you for sharing your beautiful talent!

A Whisper's Caress
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5 posted 2000-11-03 08:10 PM


and pull my dainty dancing slippers off
and touch my soul with your wonder yes
for I would be your soft air
in mold around your swift rising breath
until the night clothes me in chill
and you cover me with feathers.  

This is very pretty



Wilfred Yeats
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6 posted 2000-11-03 09:05 PM


"twirls my dazzled eyes to you
and opens my gown around me
so you can see my blushed significance
for I can climb the sky
filled with the sap of spring still
not folded or crunched in lack
but displayed and colored"

and

"touch my soul with your wonder yes
for I would be your soft air
in mold around your swift rising breath
until the night clothes me in chill
and you cover me with feathers."

These are some of the most beautiful lines I have EVER read and I truly envy the one they were written for.

Marge Tindal
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7 posted 2000-11-03 09:16 PM


Martie~
Girl ... that was SOME mini-vacation !

Hellooooooo ... Taylor !  
How's the old ticker now ?

Sister ... you are steaming up the entire California Coast ...
not to mention the rest of the world !

What a breathless write !

(and she said -
"Maybe I can build a poem from it...you think???")


Well ..... maybe !
Love ya' ...
~*Marge*~





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Sunshine
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8 posted 2000-11-03 09:33 PM


I am not sorry to come back for a second visit...to see the responses...to rejoice in this most wondrous piece...

Martie, can we crown you Queen now...? for awesome this is...


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ



lucky
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9 posted 2000-11-03 10:07 PM


I always did love a bleu wind... nice imagery as usual. You already knew that, right..? nice Sis.

Love & Prayers, dale


Martie
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10 posted 2000-11-04 12:40 PM


Balladeer--You are making me blush.

Maree--Thanks hon, I'm glad you liked this.

Karilea--One of the best compliments I could receive...thank you..but you write wonderful just the way you do.

Rosemary--Thank you for telling me..it is important to me...just like you are.

Whisper's --I'm glad you found these words pretty...thank you.

Bill--EVER..a high compliment from you, my friend...thank you.

Marge---Thanks for your loving words...and it was a sweet mini...for sure!!

Karilea--Some one gave me a tee shirt once..that read "Its not easy being queen"...I'm not, but thank you so much for coming back..I feel very honored!

Dale--hugs to you, my friend...I knew you would know about blue.

Janet Marie
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11 posted 2000-11-04 12:58 PM


a whisper storms across my skin
spreading down the canyon
and nudges my dormant with ions
in a golden dusting of passion
that lifts like spirit water
and fills my empty

and I see from the window a dance
that pirouettes across the garden
and I walk into it with my eyes shut
and feel the wings of exuberance
blow across my mind

and carry me across the meadow
where the earth has scattered seed
skipping with delight my hands holding revelry
across such miles as we are bound
the wind the wind takes me

and twirls my dazzled eyes to you
and opens my gown around me
so you can see my blushed significance
for I can climb the sky
filled with the sap of spring still
not folded or crunched in lack
but displayed and colored with chameleon

Will you come with me across the narrows
down the path into the glen
and pull my dainty dancing slippers off
and touch my soul with your wonder yes
for I would be your soft air
in mold around your swift rising breath
until the night clothes me in chill
and you cover me with feathers.
===================
OH MY!!!!!!!
Ditto Wils comment ...
and again I say OH MY!!!!!!

"and nudges my dormant with ions"

OH here we go again...
I dont know where my dormant is either..
(is it near my vestibule?)  


"and feel the wings of exuberance
blow across my mind"

YOU BLOW MY MIND ...
this poem blows my mind ...
damn ... its gonna be REAL hard to sleep on my pillow of poet envy of this one ...
Where did you say you went on a trip to??
Ya took me to Disneyland dear poet ...
to the Kingdom of Free Verse...
and tho art my Queen ...
love ya for this one ...
MY OH MY!!!!!!!  
me



Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
12 posted 2000-11-04 01:07 AM


This my friend is one of the reasons that I have missed being here so much and I will take this with me in my dreams many a night to come.  And btw, yes, I will be more than happy to come take off your slippers and show you all the wonders that come to mind, especially in your blushed significance...   Have you any doubt of this ever?  No, I think not.  Loved it and love you my friend.
Martie
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13 posted 2000-11-04 10:20 AM


Janet--My Oh my...you are so good at reply!

Mark--Hi, how are you my friend...thanks so much for the smile and friendship.

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
14 posted 2000-11-04 10:34 AM


and I see from the window a dance
that pirouettes across the garden
and I walk into it with my eyes shut
and feel the wings of exuberance
blow across my mind

wow..such beautiful visions...one of your best I think or at least of those I have read *s

~Wynter Bliss




"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



BSC
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15 posted 2000-11-04 11:21 AM


A "Sapphire Wind" oh Martie, your imagery never ceases to amaze me.  This is simply breathtaking.... Bonnie
brian madden
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16 posted 2000-11-04 12:20 PM


Standing ovation this one blew me away... wow.

"an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree
the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women".
Patti Smith

Poertree
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17 posted 2000-11-04 12:31 PM


lol @ marge  

martie, yet another quality piece - really, what are you on?? ...lol

i need a bit of time to give this a better read, perhaps later tonight.  First reading, very enjoyable though.  

philip

Martie
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18 posted 2000-11-04 12:59 PM


Wynter--thank you...I'm glad you found it so.

Bonnie--thank you for the breathtaking..I'm glad you enjoyed the imagery..cause I sure enjoy your replies.

Brian--thanks for the ovation...a curtsy for you.

Philip--When the Santa Ana winds blow here in California...they clean the air and charge everything up with a clear beauty that you don't see at other times...and the wind just always makes me feel high!  I'll see you later..

Denise
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19 posted 2000-11-04 09:42 PM


This is breathtakingly beautiful, Martie!

Denise

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20 posted 2000-11-04 09:49 PM


I know I will never have to look far to read
the most beautiful poetry my eyes have ever
seen...I only need look for your name
attached to the title...exquisite Martie~

Marge Tindal
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21 posted 2006-04-30 12:53 PM


MartieSis~

Wanting MORE and MORE and MORE, just like this !!!!

Martiesque Moments~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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