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Saxoness
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0 posted 2000-11-03 04:34 PM


As the world falls down

I saw you sit and cry.
The sound of tears
can be so lonely...

I want to place you
inside the empty space
of my heart.

Step away from
the edge I
will hold you to me
and never let you know.

My arms ache with
needing to touch you
every night and early
morning.

Memories make dust...
blanketing you until...
no one can seem to...
find what you’ve...
lost...

On your hands
and knees
you crawl while I
am suspended above by
my fears.

I feel your fear
too...
it draws you to the
ground.

You do not see me
You never will
until I let go or just
give up
for awhile...

I find my voice
has left me
or perhaps I never
had one to begin
with.

I saw you sit and cry
the sound of tears
can be so lonely...
As the world falls down.






"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

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Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2000-11-03 04:42 PM


Saxoness~

What a feeling you've touched -

'the sound of tears
can be so lonely...'


Amen ... and *hugs*.
~*Marge*~



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Kethry
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2 posted 2000-11-03 05:18 PM


Saxoness,
what a write this is, full of longing and pain.
Be well
Kethry


Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy

Saxoness
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3 posted 2000-11-04 12:48 PM


Thanks for the comments ladies   Much appreciated.  This was actually a sort of response to another poem I read on the site, it touched me, and this is what came after it.  < !signature-->

"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."
                                


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Aimster
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4 posted 2000-11-04 01:51 PM


welcome to passions! i have not had
the pleasure of reading your work before
but i am very glad i got to read this
piece. this is very beautiful even though
it is quite sad. you pen your emotions
very well...i could feel the depth of this.

take care.
amy  

desperado
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5 posted 2000-11-05 09:49 PM


wow.  awesome hun.  really great work.  I especially liked that part about losing your voice.  though how someone like you could lose that is perhaps a mystery.  wonderful work hun.  absolutely wonderful.


"There were times in my life
when I was going insane
tryin to walk through
the pain
when I lost my grip
and I hit the floor
yeah I thought I cou

Nan
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6 posted 2000-11-06 06:38 AM


Nicely done, Saxoness... and it's really great to see that you have time to write again... Keep 'em coming...
Saxoness
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7 posted 2001-02-22 11:53 PM


Desperado, Thanks for your support. Of course, it was ytour poem that started it all.

Nan, you know i can never go very long without writing. I know cause I've tried


"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

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8 posted 2003-01-27 09:37 AM


yes, it is...i know
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