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Dr.Moose1
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0 posted 2000-11-03 06:38 AM


Specks of light in contrast seem
to pierce a curtain held
by concepts anchored 'gainst the stream
as if secured by weld
I stand within this rigid frame
assailed by frequencies
invisible to naked eye
An image yet to be

Sub particles at un-known speeds
that through my surface slam
must surely leave some vaprous trace
upon the film I am
undeveloped , primitive
and oh so very slow
If possessed of sufficient need
can one aquire their glow ?

Tethered to this conciousness
exposed will I absorb
the sub-atomic properties
to reach beyond this orb
and there-by out-ward radiate
my own visible light
in contrast to the dark I feel
alone within this night ?

An image that will shine I hope
with some intensity
A glimmer of an isotope
of what's becoming me


© Copyright 2000 William E.Kleist - All Rights Reserved
Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
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Victoria Australia
1 posted 2000-11-03 06:55 AM


Hey Doc,
there's light at the end of the tunnel in this fabulous piece along with the brilliance of creation.
Kethry.


Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
2 posted 2000-11-03 07:34 AM


This is exceptional writing...as Kethry
said....the light is there at the end...very
much enjoyed~

Rainydays
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3 posted 2000-11-03 09:25 AM


I am trying to construct the most intelligent form of "WOW!" that I know...something properly befitting a bit of writing of this eloquence. Well, WOW! will just have to do, I think. (smiling) This is a prize poem, Dr. Moose, and you are quite the wordsmith.   Thank you ~

Rainydays

Dr.Moose1
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4 posted 2000-11-03 10:59 AM


Kethry,
Thanks .In some way each of the postings I read here represent those particles .
As they are absorbed , I cannot help but think that they are in some way reflected .

Butterflies,
Thank you . I'm glad you enjoyed this.This is as close as I have come to expressing my thoughts on how poetry has changed me .

Rainydays,
My thanks to you for taking the time to reply.It is gratifying to know that some actually seem to enjoy my ramblings .
Doc

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
5 posted 2000-11-03 11:13 AM


Hi Doc,
excellent writing, a touch of Poe a touch of Blake. But mostly you in dark opaque. Sy

serenity blaze
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6 posted 2000-11-03 11:47 AM


y'know, I feel this way about it too...it's a process, yes?  I just hope the shutter was open when my picture was taken!  

Great thought, Doc.  Thanks.

serenity blaze
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7 posted 2000-11-03 11:57 PM


oh.  I almost forgot.  well worth the think.

spin again.

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
8 posted 2000-11-04 12:04 PM


I can't add too much more to what others have said..I just know what I like...and this was special.

~Wynter


"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



Dr.Moose1
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9 posted 2000-11-04 11:48 PM


Sy,
Quite cryptic , but thanks ...

serenity,
Yes for me it has become a process . I am always wondering where it will lead . If I can maintain that sense of wonder , perhaps I may yet write something of true worth .


Nakd,
Well how do I say this , Thanks !
Doc

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