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Fee
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since 2000-08-07
Posts 381
Melbourne, Australia

0 posted 2000-11-03 01:23 AM



So what is it
that keeps you
at bay,
phone calls and messages
going astray

Time is gone
before it even came,
it seems forever
since I have heard
your name.

Messages typed  
and left on the phone,
wondering if they have reached
you, my answer unknown.

I hope that soon
what's kept you at bay
will give you a chance
to call by my way.


Expressions,
are the most important aspects, they create impressions

© Copyright 2000 Fiona Davis (was Hussain) - All Rights Reserved
Ethan Halo
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since 2000-04-28
Posts 793
on the roof again
1 posted 2000-11-03 02:13 AM


at the risk of sounding like a broken record, i know exactly how this feels. i think i'm just giving up.

i like the theme of this one. it's simple, but described on many different fronts. cool stuff. i dig it.

Everyone's got their demons.
We all got somethin' to atone for.

ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
2 posted 2000-11-03 06:06 PM


There's nothing worse than waiting...but don't wait too long because you'll lose and it will hurt..very nice poem!!
Charisma
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since 2000-09-30
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lost in blue pages
3 posted 2000-11-03 07:44 PM


can relate on this one too,
recognize the silence and the pain.
you expressed your feelings from your heart, well done.

(((warm hug))

Charisma

Ron K. Fox
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since 2000-10-24
Posts 925

4 posted 2000-11-03 07:53 PM


the allusive answer...and sometimes it never comes...yep, I can relate to this too. Good write. Ron

Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox


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