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startin_fresh
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0 posted 2000-11-01 01:41 AM


Nocturnal Journey

Dampness fills the air
On Southern Autumn nights
Dew so thick it coats
Everything below.

Suspended in the air
Blankets of pillowy fog
Hover overhead and
Nudge tree limbs lower

Creatures of the night
Stir while day timers rest
Seemingly inching
Along as they go.

As midnight approaches
The pillowy fog descends
Painting the world misty white
As heat and cold collide

Silence becomes deafening
I feel a tap on the shoulder
Turning to look but I see
That no one is there.

Slowly and deliberately
I move through it all
The air becomes thick
With the sticky mist.

As night becomes morn
It’s heavier and thicker yet
Now on the return trip
Back to my home

My arm pierces the veil
Of the curtained world
Over and again repeatedly
Casting out cargo

I've covered thirty miles
And have fourteen left to go
The journey makes me weary
As dawn approaches

Finally, at last I can
Toss the last piece
Casting it out and away
The air tears as it goes

Oh so tired as I turn
To head back home
The mist is heavier now
Droplets form small puddles

I edge into safe harbor
The engine winds down
I emerge into the fog bank
Glad I made it back.

Creatures of the day
Stir while night timers rest
They move like rockets
Along as they go.

As night fall begins its time
Yet again for the nocturnal
To load the cargo for
Another forty-four mile run.


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Sunshine
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1 posted 2000-11-01 08:10 AM


We all reach for different ways of unloading [emotional] cargo...and I found this to be a very interesting approach...

good job!


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ



Ron K. Fox
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since 2000-10-24
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2 posted 2000-11-01 11:22 PM


This is a very well written and interesting piece. I enjoyed it. Thanks

Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox

Sunnyone
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since 2000-07-06
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3 posted 2000-11-02 01:06 AM


Yes....this is wonderful!!  Those warm, sticky Southern autumn nights sound heavenly after living up here in the Great North!! Trade Ya'!!!! Great thoughts in this poem!!


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Tara Simms
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since 1999-08-12
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Honea Path, SC USA
4 posted 2000-11-02 09:40 PM


The never ending journey.  There doesn't seem to be any rest for the weary, does it?  I love the descriptions of the fog.  I could feel it moving in on me as I read.

Take me as I am or watch me as I go

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