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Sven
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0 posted 2000-10-31 12:40 PM


crescent moon in darkened sky
crescent moon in darkened sky
tell us of his coming
tell us of his coming
crescent moon tell us
of his coming in darkened sky

October winds blow cold and chill
October winds blow cold and chill
when days grow shorter
when days grow shorter
shorter October days grow
when cold winds chill and blow

we thank thee ritual moon
we thank thee ritual moon
for bringing him to us
for bringing him to us
thank we him moon ritual
for bringing thee to us

tell us ritual of moon
crescent moon cold to us
we thank thee darkened sky
for bringing in his coming
chill him and blow winds
when October days grow shorter

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl



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SEA
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1 posted 2000-10-31 12:47 PM


Sven~ Bravo!! Love this one!!   -SEA
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2 posted 2000-10-31 01:25 PM


Now...YOU knew I'd like this one!!!  Fantastic job with this Sven...the witching hour draws near, yes?  LOL..and happy Samhein.
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3 posted 2000-10-31 02:33 PM


~~~ Sven ~~~
A truly great offering on this the night of bewitching hour!  Blessed Be, my friend......

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4 posted 2000-10-31 03:17 PM


Great Job Sven! I like it! i like It!

Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox

Irish Rose
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5 posted 2000-10-31 03:38 PM


Yes, yes, I liked this very much.

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses
over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey.""
Laurie Lee

Kathleen


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6 posted 2000-10-31 03:43 PM


Sven,
Congratulations on the brilliant Octberfest Paradelle. Does your head hurt? Some Tylenol perhaps or maybe a beer festival?

loved it
Kethry


Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy

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7 posted 2000-10-31 09:17 PM


Sven,

Well done paradelle.  I knew you'd come up with a good one!  I love the October theme.  Very nice.  

LW


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

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8 posted 2000-10-31 09:37 PM


SEA, thank you  

serenity, I was hoping that you would like it. . . and yes, the hour does draw near, and happy Samhein to you also my friend. . .

Sunny1, thank you for your offering to me my friend. . .blessed be. . .

Ron, thanks, but do you like it?  

Kathleen, thank you my friend. . .  

Kethry, thank you very much. . . beer please, and lots of it!!!  

LW, you know me, no time like the last minute. . . thank you. . .

Can I just say that this was indeed quite difficult to do oh great teacher Nan??     But you know the funny thing?  I have this strange desire to want to do another one!!  LOL

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


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9 posted 2000-10-31 09:54 PM


Sven~
Very nicely done, indeed !

Oh ... like suffering, huh ?
Go for it !
I think it must be the bewitched hour !
~*Marge*~


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10 posted 2000-11-01 12:22 PM


Wow.  This is good.  I don't know that if I could do something like this.  

The way that you used the moon is wonderful.  Happy Samhein to you also my friend.



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11 posted 2000-11-06 06:43 AM


WOW!!!!
Wonderful paradelle Sven  
Excellent work
Tracie~


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It is the harmony of the universe



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12 posted 2000-11-06 07:34 PM


Digging out from under a paradelluge... This one's good, Sven - Nicely, nicely crafted..
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13 posted 2001-04-29 10:34 PM


Great job, Sven!  I have a taste for this format myself, it's great to see what you came up with.  I have a few things to learn yet, and I think I learned one or two from reading this.  
Cheers.  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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