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Swift Wing of Hawk - A Paradelle
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Swift Wing of Hawk - A Paradelle |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Swift Wing of Hawk The light cloud aloft floats like a soft fluffy pillow The light cloud aloft floats like a soft fluffy pillow Swift wing of hawk through a white misty billow Swift wing of hawk through a white misty billow Swift wing of hawk floats aloft through misty light The fluffy cloud billow like a soft pillow white Its feathers now tilting toward new direction Its feathers now tilting toward new direction Eye looking down to the earth with affection Eye looking down to the earth with affection Tilting with the earth to eye new affection Looking down now toward its feathers direction Hawk’s circling wings sing in ruffling hush Hawk’s circling wings sing in ruffling hush And come round to land in a blueberry bush And come round to land in a blueberry bush To land, hawk’s wings come and sing in a hush Circling round in ruffling blueberry bush In a light hush aloft, a hawk floats it’s wing Fluffy new feathers now billow and sing Looking eye to the earth, in tilting direction To land toward the blueberry bush with affection Through a misty white cloud, like soft pillow of down Hawk’s swift ruffling wings come circling round Elizabeth Santos |
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Passions Voice Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 291Michigan |
Wow, this is incredible. I don't think that I could do something like this. Amazing. passion is life. . . |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I don't know how you do it, Elizabeth! No form seems to be beyond your reach! I'm still trying to do one little haiku and can't seem to do even that. Very well done! Denise |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Your talent burns bright. Sy |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Elizabeth - This one is particularly great - The more words you use, the more difficult these things become... You've taken on quite a big'n here.. and done it well...  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I call that repetition for emphasis recurring lines of beauty...wonderful Elizabeth just wonderful ....great use of words ....ethome |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Liz, I am terribly impressed with this one. You've made a Beauty of this Beast, to be sure ... --L Never underestimate the power of stupid people in large numbers. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Liz what a beautiful paradelle, the images produced so amazingly spectacular...very well done Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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