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Butterflies_dont_cry
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0 posted 2000-10-29 10:38 PM




The light once held so precious
Was blown out in the wind of Shame
The storm rolled into heart and soul
Ignited the fiery glow of Blame

Hope  lost leaving open wounds
voices, smells....touch of haunting
Seeping into every wound of old
Call, scream... filled soul of taunting

Fingers strapped with razor touch
Rake skin so close to bone
Erase the scars of healing
Leaving nothing but Alone

Pushed away in hope to forget
Send prayer of forgiveness and love
Release the power...hold the light
Tears rain down...thunder rolls above

Broken dove spilling from heaven
Grip of ice and fear consume
Stepping backwards through jagged glass
Balance broken...tumbled emotion resume


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AniKay83
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1 posted 2000-10-29 10:41 PM


Fingers strapped with razor touch
Rake skin so close to bone
Erase the scars of healing
Leaving nothing but Alone
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Such a lonely, longing piece. Hauntingly beautiful.


Much love all,
Krissie

Ron K. Fox
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2 posted 2000-10-29 10:48 PM


this is so emotionally consuming (that's good). there's more pain here than I've ever felt. Very discriptive.< !signature-->

Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox


[This message has been edited by Ron K. Fox (edited 10-29-2000).]

Janet Marie
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3 posted 2000-10-29 11:03 PM


oh baby.. this poem rakes me to the bone..
I would give my muse to be able to take this
pain from you or anyone who lives with it
you KNOW how I feel about having to carry someone elses shame around...
but I also know how damn strong you are
and how you want to fly free of this and I KNOW you will cause I know your heart
and I know your spirit and they will--in time
heal those dove and butterfly wings ...
and you will rise above and soar ..
and ya know how I know....
yeah... you know...
wanna say it with me....

~BUTTERFLIES ARE MEANT TO BE FREE~
love you my sweet SS ...
me

There are places inside our souls -
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts -
that need to be loved this much.
~jm~


catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
4 posted 2000-10-29 11:04 PM


Wow, this is so full of intense emotion and brilliantly written. This is how I feel, but written much more coherently..   Thanks for the kind thoughts earlier.
Sandra

Butterflies_dont_cry
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5 posted 2000-10-29 11:07 PM


AniKay* Thank you for reading and your kind comments~

Ron* I will take that as a compliment kind sir...I seem to pen pain much more acutely than pleasure...hmmmm I wonder if that is a hint from somewhere!

JM* My sweet SS...I'm learning...it's in here and I've touched on it a few times...Feeling better everyday..sometimes the emotion just needs to be let out to let it go!! Thank you for always being there for me in everyway..I truly don't know what I'd do without your love and friendship~

Sandra* I in fact posted this from the inspiration of yours...you are most definately not alone in your feelings of pain and heartache...and in time I hope you find peace.  Thank you so much~


[This message has been edited by Butterflies_dont_cry (edited 10-29-2000).]

vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...
6 posted 2000-10-29 11:08 PM



Holly-
   wow...this just aches with emotion.
   felt it all the way through.
   no one should have to feel this
   kind of pain and longing...my heart
   goes out to you.
   beautifully written.  

   hugs,
   -vicky




"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



Alle'cram
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7 posted 2000-10-29 11:18 PM


Butterfly,  This is so well written & conveyance of pain so deep...  (unsoliticed advice).. forgive yourself, you are being so hard on yourself.  Hope things soon look bright. Beautifully written.   Love,  Marcy
Toddles
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8 posted 2000-10-29 11:23 PM


Painful, yes...but equally as brilliant and hopeful... powerful emotion here!


"Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind!"...Dr. Seuss

Butterflies_dont_cry
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9 posted 2000-10-29 11:28 PM


Vicky* My thanks to you for your kind reply~

Marcy* Your advice is heard and has been echoed for many years by dear friends...I'm listening finally and you're so very right...time to move on past this pain, Thank you from the bottom of my heart~

Todd* So nice to see you here again...Thank you for reading and your comments...there is hope in there somewhere  

Lone Wolf
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10 posted 2000-10-29 11:34 PM


BDC,

This was scary yet beautiful my friend.  I am glad to see you purge these feelings so that you can make room for the good.  Your words gripped me and took me along for the ride.  Wow . . . powerful emotions here.  You grow stronger every day.  I feel it.  
Wonderful work.  

LW


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

TerryW
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11 posted 2000-10-30 12:35 PM


Butterflies~
     My dear, dear friend, This is beautiful.  Your words touch me deeply.  I can remember feeling something like this myself not so long ago.  But your words bring hope to the well of sadness
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Pushed away in hope to forget
                                           Send prayer of forgiveness and love
                                            Release the power...hold the light
                                          Tears rain down...thunder rolls above
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Remember the rain, the tears from heaven, can wash away all the pain.  And also remember that you have friends who **~~LOVE~~**
you!



~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.

EagleOne
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12 posted 2000-10-30 03:51 AM


My dear sweet friend, your pain in this one cuts deeply and grabs right at my heart. I know your writing will help you to purge the darkness. I know too that the sun will shine for you, take care!

"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest"
~ My Angel.

tracie66
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13 posted 2000-10-30 04:26 AM


Dear Butterflies~
Even though this had such longing and sadness to it, I felt it a beautiful write..well done
winged ~HUGS~
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



Butterflies_dont_cry
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14 posted 2000-10-30 05:08 AM


LW* My friend...thank you so very much...I'm feeling stronger...I just have to remind myself that it's there  

Terry* It's always such a joy to see you here...you know you are missed during your times away...thank you my friend...many **Angel wing hugs** and I'll remember~

Eagle* The sun always shines the brightest after the rain...and tis the only time we see that rainbow is it not   Thank you my dear friend~

Tracie* Thank you so much, your kindness always abounds and is never taken for granted~


nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
15 posted 2000-10-30 06:01 AM


such pain...felt every word.
hugzzz in hopes  you can ease it.

~Wynter


"The worst prison would be a closed heart".

...Pope John Paul II


Charisma
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16 posted 2000-10-30 06:25 AM


*wow*.....you describe your feelings so well......your heartache is shining through every line.....excellent write.

(((warm hugs)))....take care, hope you will feel better soon
Charisma

peppermint35
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17 posted 2000-10-30 08:01 AM


This is so powerful; it must have purged some of that pain....I would simply add my voice to the others....you write it beautifully and I hope you are getting past it; time to spread those lovely wings and fly past the pain out into a new sunlight day.  Hugs, always, Pepper

Pepper
"I honor the place in you, that when you are in that place, and I am in that place in me, we are in the same place"
Ram Dass

Aimster
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18 posted 2000-10-30 09:39 AM


Holly--

this piece was so painfully written,
but that is not a bad thing. i am glad
through your poetry you are able to
express...sometimes we just gotta "let
it all go." your writing always amazes
me and touches the core within. i truly
think that one day you will be free of
all this pain and as janet so beautifully
said "butterflies are meant to be free" one
day your broken wings will mend and you
will fly and soar, and shine. you already
make all of us so proud here...and i just
wanted you to know you make my life a
brighter place. love ya much.

~amy~  

serenity blaze
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19 posted 2000-10-30 09:42 AM


Hey you beautiful butterfly lady!!!  This is quite an awesome piece here!!! I am very impressed here, the depth of emotion, your style and content, everything is right here.

Man.  Love ya lots.  

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
20 posted 2000-10-30 09:46 AM


Oh my friend, you know this one gets to me.  I am sorry it took so long to reply but with the upcoming move and all.  I know that pain you are going through is just that and as you told me, "it is the first step" and I know that you will make shining like a thousand stars in the night.  You are being heard now and that is exactly what the world needed to do so take advantage baby, use it to heal yourself.  Beautifully penned btw.  Yes, it is sad and it says "OWIEEEE" big time but you put it to the blue pages in a grace as only you could.  Take care of you my sweet friend, or I will send a pack of "cowboy pick me ups" your way and trust me, you don't that.  LOL.  Hugs my friend.
Victoria
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21 posted 2000-10-30 10:32 AM


I hope the new year will be a happier one for you BDC....HUGS..

                ~Victoria~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


Butterflies_dont_cry
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22 posted 2000-10-30 09:00 PM


Wynter* I'm better every day...thank you so much~

Charisma* Your comments have touched my heart...thank you so much~

Pepper* Through friends and family my life is the best it's ever been...thank you so very much~

Amy* To know that I've touched your life at all is the highest compliment I could ever receive...thank you my friend~

S'en* To receive a compliment from you on my writing MEANS ALOT...thank you my dear friend from the bottom of my heart~

Mark* One step at a time is the only way to get there...Your thoughts are always cherished...thank you~

Victoria* Thank you, your comments are appreciated~


Sudhir Iyer
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23 posted 2000-10-31 05:51 AM


What can I add that my peers have not done so far...
Intense, haunting, emotive, pain-struck...

all that and more....

butterflies, you are one terrific writer, and you have touched me once again with your poetry as many times before...

take care,
regards,
sudhir

Butterflies_dont_cry
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24 posted 2000-10-31 07:53 AM


Sud* It's a pleasure to see you in here! Thank you so very much for your kind comments and your stunning review my friend~
dgvarner
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25 posted 2000-10-31 10:19 AM


butterflies....this one reeks of anguish...a longing for a better day...

i hope in writing this, it has melted away some of darkness..and i hope the sun grabs hold of you soon..  

hugs, dg


"after a while, you learn the subtle difference between holding a hand and chaining a soul..." -V A Shoffstall

SEA
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with you
26 posted 2000-10-31 11:03 AM


BDC~ this makes me want to cry.....so sad...excellent write. -SEA
Butterflies_dont_cry
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27 posted 2000-10-31 11:23 PM


dg* Thank you very much...I think those happy times are on the horizon and within my grasp....I appreciate the thoughts~

Sea* No sad faces from you missy   Just a dive into the dark to hang onto the light...thank you very much~

Elizabeth Santos
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28 posted 2000-10-31 11:27 PM


An intense poem that grips at the heart
Some razor sharp phrasing steeped in sorrow
Very well done
Liz

CocoBaci
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29 posted 2000-11-01 01:30 PM


Oh Butterfly, this one claws N claws till the tears trickled down cheek!  I compliment you for such powerful expression in this poem you have penned.

Coco...now I smile4ya

Marina
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30 posted 2000-11-01 08:36 PM


This was undoubtley a very painful poem for you to write as it was for me to read.  Sometimes in life we have to take a step back in order to take two forward.  Stay strong Holly.  Time can be a friend.  


Marina


It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen
Marina Crossley


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