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vlraynes
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0 posted 2000-10-28 02:34 PM




paradelle parallel
paradelle parallel
road that leads to poet hell
road that leads to poet hell
that parallel poet road
leads to paradelle hell

twisting turning darkened street
twisting turning darkened street
navigate maze or face defeat
navigate maze or face defeat
navigate twisting turning defeat
or face darkened maze street

endless circular journey it seems
endless circular journey it seems
haunting sound...repeated screams
haunting sound...repeated screams
haunting journey repeated seems
circular sound...it endless screams

endless maze repeated seems
twisting road or darkened face
parallel journey that leads
to circular sound haunting defeat
navigate turning poet street
paradelle hell...it screams


-vlraynes


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"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes




[This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 10-29-2000).]

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Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2000-10-28 02:37 PM


Vicky~

And another case of Tylenol bites the dust !
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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2 posted 2000-10-28 02:39 PM


Wow!   You did a great job with this!! I really like this kind of poetry.  -SEA
Alicat
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3 posted 2000-10-28 02:40 PM


Dayum, Vic....this one ROCKS! I could definately see this one being read in some blackened coffee shop, lone mike your sole companion in a soft circle of light, seeing slight reflections off glasses in the night, hammering out the tempo, tempo, tempo, mucho gusto, whip it, shape it, serve it red raw and steaming.....WHOA...there I go again....

Long and Short: Me likes mucho.  

Denise
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4 posted 2000-10-28 02:42 PM


Excellent, Vicky! Whew! These sure seem hard to do!

Denise

Elizabeth Santos
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5 posted 2000-10-28 04:18 PM


This is a victory in patience and perserverence. I think each of us who wrote a paradelle should get an award, don't you?
Excellemt work, Vicky
Liz

Kit McCallum
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6 posted 2000-10-28 04:27 PM


WOW! Excellent Vicki! What a wonderful style, and you've woven it so perfectly ... really well done indeed!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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7 posted 2000-10-28 04:31 PM


THIS ROCKS...screams to be read aloud....shi--oot!  gotta find the key to this...mutter, murmer, sigh...I'm loving this form....and you did this beautifully...sigh...well done luvie!
Mark Bohannan
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8 posted 2000-10-28 04:33 PM


Well well well, it seems that either you have no problem with these or it is a sign that I should go but stock in tylenol corp.  


Excellent paradelle AGAIN my friend

Romy
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9 posted 2000-10-28 10:37 PM


Paradelle or Poet hell...I know exactly what you're talking about! I've been in it for days now and still screaming!
Very nice job! I'm jealous!

vlraynes
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10 posted 2000-10-28 10:44 PM



Marge-
   LOL...extra strength even...
   i'm actually finding these kind
   of fun...i can't resist a challenge.  
   glad you liked.  

SEA-
   thank you, my friend.  
   really glad you enjoyed.  

Alicat-
   wow!  i'm flattered...such kind
   enthusiastic words from you.  
   thanks so much, my friend.  

Denise-
   well...i can't say they're easy,
   but i do love a challenge.  
   glad you like.  

Liz-
   YES!! i agree...so when is that
   awards ceremony anyway?? lol
   thanks so much, my friend.  

Kit-
   wow...thank you so much for the
   enthusiastic reply...i really
   appreciate it.  
   really glad you enjoyed.  

serenity-
   my frustrated friend...i'll keep my
   eyes open for that key your lookin'
   for...lol.  
   thank you so much for the kind words.
   your replies really mean alot to me.  

Mark-
   hmmmmm...Tylenol stock aye?  maybe not
   a bad idea...lol.  
   actually i'm having a blast with these.  
   glad you like it.  

hugs to all,
   -vicky




"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



Dr.Moose1
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11 posted 2000-10-28 11:42 PM


Viraynes,
Hey , I am really impressed,( not that I thought any different)An interesting , invocative , insight that leads us to believe.
Doc

[This message has been edited by Dr.Moose1 (edited 10-28-2000).]

Charisma
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12 posted 2000-10-28 11:55 PM


Applaud .....*WOW*.....you have done a great job.....love this style and its woven perfect.....great piece from your hand.....

Charisma

Kethry
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13 posted 2000-10-29 12:34 PM


Vicky
A paradelle paradigm. And I haven't begun mine yet
Be well
Kethry


Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy

dgvarner
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14 posted 2000-10-29 08:25 AM


yikes! this is just scary up and stuff!  lol

this "padiddle" stuff has got me baffled...me of simple writes....!  

but you, my poet friend are the master of padiddle!..i dubb you such  

hugs, dg  


"after a while, you learn the subtle difference between holding a hand and chaining a soul..." -V A Shoffstall

dgvarner
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15 posted 2000-10-29 08:37 AM


heehee..just read alicats two cents..LOL  (sshh....i think he likes your padiddle tricks..  )

hugs, me

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16 posted 2000-10-29 08:54 AM


Vicky, I'm with Dee here, I cannot do these things, I have such a simple brain. This is so marvellous, well done, and loud congratulations. I really like this
Take care
               Marsha


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning

Irish Rose
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17 posted 2000-10-29 09:03 AM


This would make a great song!

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses
over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey.""
Laurie Lee

Kathleen


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18 posted 2000-10-29 09:14 AM


Well you make them look easy ... and they are not...
I noticed how perfect they are for Halloween poems tho..
must be why Nan picked them for this months workshop...
shes so smart  
must be why shes the teacher huh?   lol
and Id say your the student at the head of the class on this assignment..
great job Vicky...
jm

vlraynes
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19 posted 2000-10-29 04:16 PM



Doc-
   thanks so much.  
   really glad you enjoyed this.  

Charisma-
   wow...thanks for the enthusiastic
   response.  i really appreciate it.  
   glad you like.  

Kethry-
   well i just read yours, and i must
   say you've done an awesome job.  
   thanks for the kind words.
   glad you enjoyed this one.  
   they are kinda fun aren't they?  

dg-
   ROFL...master of padiddle aye?..
   well...thank you...i think...lol.  
   you should try one of these little
   guys...challenging but fun.  
   you're such a silly little friend.  
   hugs and stuff.  

Marsha-
   thanks so much for the kind words.
   i'm so glad you enjoyed this.  

Irish Rose-
   wow...really?  
   thank you so much for the compliment.  
   glad you like.  

Janet Marie-
   wow...thank you, my friend.  
   your kind words really mean alot to me.
   yes...these haunting little ditties are
   perfect for halloween.  
   i'm having a great time with them.  
   hugs to you.  

thanks again all,
   -vicky




"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



vlraynes
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20 posted 2000-10-29 11:03 PM



Debbie-
   wow...i am so sorry.
   i don't know how i misssed
   you up there...you must have
   snuck in on me during my first
   reply.  
   anyway, thank you so much for the
   kind response...i really do
   appreciate it.
   these paradelles definitely are
   a challenge, but kinda fun at the
   same time.  
   glad you enjoyed this one.  

   hugs,
   -vicky




"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



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