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A Halloween Scream
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A Halloween Scream |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
With a ghostly creak, the door does open No one’s home is what I’m hoping. I had seen the abandoned house from afar, And couldn’t resist the door ajar. So up squeaking steps of wood aged old, I tiptoed across the sagging porch, so brave and bold. To see what’s inside would be a thrill, I hear thump, thump, thump, oh heart be still. “Hello”, I speak in broken voice,"Anyone home?" “The door was open.” I say in an explaining tone. Through cobweb rooms each step I take, A grave mistake, I think this is I make. A candle I find and begin to light, But it’s blown out quickly by a whispered night. The door it slams with a jarring bolt, A breeze fills the room so icy cold, A chain does rattle from a distant room, As a laugh does echo with ghoulish gloom, Footsteps quickly from upstairs depart, Thump, thump, thump, this time not my heart. The window is shut, I can’t get out, “Please help me, Please! I begin to shout. I race across the darkened room, Now for sure I’ve met my doom. A shadow moves across my eyes, Into the corner I fall and hide. Then suddenly a light does appear, I hear my mother’s voice in my ear. “It’s a bad dream my son”, as she pats my head. “Too much candy before you’ve gone to bed.” [This message has been edited by Ron K. Fox (edited 10-28-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Fantastic, Ron! Chilling dream!! Just one tiny suggestion...I'd take dream out of the title so as not to give away the surpise ending...Whatcha think? Denise |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
RonK~ THIS IS FANTASTIC!!!!!! I really liked this! Excellent Halloween poem!  -SEA |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
You had me going Ron!!! Very good write  Peppermint Life is a Wheel |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
What a wonderful, heart-racing read Ron! Great halloween verse, very much enjoyed this scary dream! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
You had me going too Ron, great writing! enjoyed it much. Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Hehehehe Ron, Great poem!!!! Had my heart thumping too..... Bonnie |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
good idea dee. thanks all. everytime I remember that halloween I get a belly ache. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Ron, lol. It had me going Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Halloweeny Bump !! |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
 Great dream!!!! Happy Halloween!!!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
RonFox~ I just put back that third Almond Joy ! Spooky ! ! ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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