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One Heart Blind
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One Heart Blind |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Cut me-- one heart blind... I spill... I understand a simple pill simplicity a paper fill confetti flitter, flutters, -spilled... a sigh to sky... ache of sigh... I wish you were, I wish you my.... I wish... I wish... I wonder why... I whisper. Wish... that you were mine.... and oh...my breeze, to fly aware, I sing, I dream, and you are there. A spark of sudden-- shadow's stare.. Behind the shadow of despair, I think, I dream, I feel your stare... I glimpse, I gleam, I dream you...there... |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
A spark of sudden-- shadow's stare This line is everything to this poem..to me...this says it all. Wow. Well done here hon.  K"He looked across the silky surface of the Severn... it was a famously difficult river with fierce tides..." From Jack Maggs |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I whisper. Wish... that you were mine.... I glimpse, I gleam, I dream you...there. Hey Sista, woohoo love this poem, wonderful stuff m'dear Love the feel of it Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Superb poem! Loved how it just skipped along... enticing you to read right to the very end ~ Tara ~ "A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
a sigh to sky... ache of sigh... I wish you were, I wish you my.... I wish... I wish... I wonder why... I whisper. Wish... that you were mine.... and oh...my breeze, to fly aware, I sing, I dream, and you are there. A spark of sudden-- shadow's stare.. Behind the shadow of despair, I think, I dream, I feel your stare... I glimpse, I gleam, I dream you...there... ========================= oh baby...you just wrote a moths heart here .. my goodness.. the longing in this ... the ache ... "and oh...my breeze, to fly aware" what an AWESOME line that is.. and will ya teach me how to fly aware ... love this poem me twin...LOVE THIS POEM ... love the poet too me does me does *winkiewkinkie* babes me |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I thought I heard the flutter of wings in here  Awesome work S'en...you fly with thegrace of an angel and sing just as well...I'm in awe girlie!!! Love ya my friend! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Serenity, wonderful amazing and I really love this one. Beautiful, and I adore the way it just flows. Really great write. Take care Marsha  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Serenity this is really good. You are writing with such grace very nice. Rich |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Simply beautiful. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautifully done, Serenity! Denise |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you all so much...Love ya lots...I apologize for my haste. You are all so special to me! I'm off now, to a costume party...(gonna be a witch...think I'll pass?) Yee-hee hee hee hee!!! That's gonna annoy some people, I promise you! *wink* |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ This is just so you ! Fluttering about the page ... in that ink-of-think place that splashes me with your colorful phrases. Yah ! You make a good witch ... but, why aren't you wearing a costume ???? ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Marge....I'd say you were mean, but it's SO TRUE!!!! BWAHAHAHA....LOL *wink* Love ya!!! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Serenity- this is just absolutely beautiful. l really love it. hugs, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
powerful poetry.. wonderfully written. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Poetic perfection penned passionately. Superb poem my friend. Now don't go given away all your secrets to your haunting beauty at that costume party. Hugs to ya. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Touched deeply with this, written so exceptionally, and with such emotion. Hope your party is better than mine was.. Sandra |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
vicky, me bud brian, and angelheart...I thank you so much... much love to you all. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
serenity. . .costume? what costume??  this is wonderful my friend. . . just beautiful. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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