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catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone

0 posted 2000-10-27 10:34 PM


To you, this is my last request,
an answer, as final bequest..

You used to burn with passions fire,
of a sudden, no desire?

Melting heated plans and dreams had
how could you turn all of that bad?

Who are you, a man of passion?
Are you Ken, or someone's husband?

The man I knew would never do
something so cold and cruel as you.

He took a hurting woman's heart
Oh so cooly, tore it apart

He'd never let me cry alone
and casually hang up the phone.

But so you did, and now it's gone
passion, friendship, and my hearts song.

I know there's other men around
but none to match the one I'd found.

No one ever reached quite so deep
you broke through walls, awoke my sleep.

So here's my final question then?
      WHO ARE YOU
and what the hell did you do with Ken???



Can I send him this? Honestly? Even though I know I have to let go, even though I am, I just think he should acknowledge his errors here.






[This message has been edited by catalinamoon (edited 10-27-2000).]

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Butterflies_dont_cry
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1 posted 2000-10-27 10:40 PM


My opinion is that in order to heal and move on we need closure..and if this is your closure to this painful situation then yes send it...you are the only one that can truly say what your reasons would be for sending it and you need to ask yourself what you expect when he reads it, and if that is a realistic expectation. Your poems shows your heart and your pain he will most definately see that when and if he reads it.  Best of luck to you in your decision~
Sunshine
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2 posted 2000-10-27 10:40 PM


Ah Cat...I'm a wimp.  Backburner it for a day or so...and you will see the answer...[I know there's going to be a billion answers to the otherwise...]

in the meantime, hold your head up proud...


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ



Beth
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3 posted 2000-10-27 11:04 PM


~This is a powerfull read....I guess if it were me I would give it to him...As BDC said closure is probably needed...But then again you could give it a couple of days...Oh...ive just confused myself...Sorry dont know about this one..!!~

~Cherie~

Poet deVine
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4 posted 2000-10-27 11:21 PM


Send it. It's great. And if you feel it so deeply, you must surely send it. Good luck.
Isis
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5 posted 2000-10-28 12:02 PM


We need closure we do!!!!!  Send it hon.  Just don't expect a response.  But by doing this it WILL help the closure..  Good luck
Isis

*I believe every time you put your words to paper, you change. Each feeling is set free, and you may follow.....*
~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Sp

peppermint35
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6 posted 2000-10-28 12:48 PM


Wow, great write!!!  Hard question, though...
I think, if you want to send it for the closure for yourself, yes, send it now...if you still have that little bit of hope inside...sit on it a day or two and then send it....

Either way, I think you've got to send it eventually...hugs, Pepper

Peppermint
Life is a Wheel

Irie
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since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493
Washington State
7 posted 2000-10-28 01:12 AM


Hmmm...tough question Catalina.
Not knowing anything about hte situation other than what you poem says....
I can't say one way or the other if you should send it or not.

Question:
Are you angry
Venting
Lashing out
Expressing feelings
Searching for closure
etcetcetc

All I can really say is search deep with in yourself and ask your self some questions...
reasons you want to send it and reasons you don't. Weigh it out.
The only thing I can say it do what you feel is right.
Best wishes to you
Yet another man that needs a poke in the eye!
Does it ever cease?


~Sheri

"The things that come to those that wait may be the things
left by those who got there first"



CocoBaci
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8 posted 2000-10-28 01:13 AM


hiya CAT
Firstly, my compliments to you for a powerful write...
Secondly, as for your 'Q', my personal opinion what I would do (granted I know not of circumstances or scenario) but for ME closure would be 2 voice it out to him... TELL him (vocally) versus SEND him a letter or note via email.

As we all know everyone is different so do what you feel would bring you inner-peace.

Coco

tracie66
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9 posted 2000-10-28 01:19 AM


Very emotional piece, I would send it to him but maybe you won't get any responce and if you do it will probably only be lies anyway. So send it so you feel better and get on with your life and hon even though at the moment you think there is noone else like him, rest assured there is someone better.  
Keep smiling
Tracie~
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Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe




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Paula Finn
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10 posted 2000-10-28 02:43 AM


Cat...personally I think you should send it...you may not get any kind of answer...but at least you have let him know how you feel...
Marsha
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11 posted 2000-10-28 06:48 AM


Cat, firstly absolutely wonderful poem, and you have written your heart, which is full of truth.
As for advice, I really couldn't say, it really depends on what you want, and what you want the result to be. My suggestion is that you give this letter to a really close friend, and ask her NOT to allow you to send it. If after a few days and I suggest at least a week, you still want to send it then do so. But it's never really a good idea to do something out of pain and hurt, and all endings are painful, so you must be hurting. Take care of yourself
                   Marsha                  


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning

Severn
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12 posted 2000-10-28 07:26 AM


Sandra....going to be absolutely honest in my thoughts here hon.

I have to agree with Marsha here.
I know that right now you likely want your poem to affect him. This is still so new, this transition in your life. And so hard.   And you want, probably feel like you need him to understand and care about your pain.

Unfortunately, horrid though it is, he probably isn't at a stage right now where he is able to.

The most important person right now is YOU. If you are going to be able to give this to him and not be anymore grief stricken than you are now if he doesn't reply - then perhaps if would be ok. Somehow, though, I think it would hurt very much if you don't recieve a response.

My advice - wait.

Hugs hon - in whatever you decide.

K


"He looked across the
silky surface of the Severn...
it was a famously difficult
river with fierce tides..."


From Jack Maggs


catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
13 posted 2000-10-28 09:14 AM


My goodness. Hugs to everyone who was up last night looking for the right answer for me here. I think I have every right to send this, but will wait, cause it's true, I will hurt myself more if he doesn't either understand, care, or respond in some magical way, and odds are good that he won't. So why hurt myself anymore. It felt good to get it out, anyway, and your support has really helped keep hold of my emotion, (believe it or not, this is under control)
By the way, this poem is exactly what he did, changed completely from the person I have known for 9 years, to this---.
Thanks again, and I'd still like to ask that final question, yell it in his ear, really.
But I think overall, I will shut up now..
Peace, and love to all.
Sandra

Poet's Sister
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14 posted 2000-10-28 09:26 AM


Guess I'm a little late for advice since you've already made your decision, but just let me agree that it is probably the right one.  I have sent a few poems/messages in my time thinking that I didn't want a response, yet was always hurt when I didn't get one.  Anyhow, even if the advice was no longer needed, I always enjoy your writing and this was a well written look inside of you.  

[This message has been edited by Poet's Sister (edited 10-28-2000).]

Rosebud1229
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15 posted 2000-10-28 10:57 AM


Sandra, First of all great piece here, and sometimes poetry helps renew us when nothing else can, I know the easy thing would be to give him the poem, but the thing is I agree with you more than likely you will be the one in tears from him not even understanding, I hope somehow you will be able to start talking to him, but I myself have found I tend to yell so I mean talk, I hope he will begin to understand you in a new light, you see we all change over time and maybe he hasn't seen the change in him so somehow try to bring it out, and tell him. Best of luck Samantha
Sven
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16 posted 2000-10-28 06:17 PM


I would first say that this is a wonderful poem. . . you've gotten out a lot of feeling here. . .

Secondly. . . what does your heart say?

Many hugs to you my friend. . .  

--------------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


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