»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #10
»
an angel to me (attempting a paradelle)
| Open Poetry #10 |
|
an angel to me (attempting a paradelle) |
|
|
vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... 
|
my friend you are to me my friend you are to me an angel by my side an angel by my side by my side you are, my friend to me, an angel a listening ear you lend a listening ear you lend when burdens weigh me down when burdens weigh me down you lend when burdens weigh me down a listening ear you gently dry my tears you gently dry my tears when the rain begins to fall when the rain begins to fall when to fall, my tears gently begin you dry the rain you when burdens weigh me down gently dry the tears by my side, my friend, when a rain begins to fall you lend to me a listening ear you are my angel -vlraynes "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 10-27-2000).] |
||
| © Copyright 2000 Vicky L. Raynes - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Alright, now I'm ticked...why can I not do this? LOL...this is great...sigh...I think I need a new secret decoder ring...geez. enough about me---this is fab---so glad to see everyone getting in on the action! maybe if enough people do, and, I'm quite sure nobody is drowning, I MIGHT stick my little toe in the water...sigh... |
||
|
Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Vicky, this is lovely in both format and in content of message. Wonderful paradelle you have given us to enjoy. |
||
|
Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I suck at writing formula poetry - but you did a great job!!! I'm both envious and impressed.. |
||
|
Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
this is great. when i grow up i want to write like that. oops I am grown up. keep forgetting. |
||
Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Vicky~ By golly ... you did it !  Not bad for a gal that couldn't get into class, huh ?   (and you're a snitch for telling teacher I took your chair !) But, I love ya' anyhow ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
||
|
Rindercella Member
since 1999-11-12
Posts 64La La Land |
A perfectly angelic offering. I enjoyed this form which is very difficult to write. You did it flawlessly. *If the shoe fits ... the castle is yours* |
||
|
vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Serenity- LOL @ you...calm down my friend. i just know you can do this...just hang on to that Tylenol that Marge gave you...lol. as far as drowning goes...not a problem. come on in! the water's fine!! glad you enjoyed this one. Mark- thank you, my friend. glad you liked. Sharon- wow...thank you so much for the kind response. so glad you enjoyed. Ron- LOL...that's ok...i forget all the time...more fun to be a kid. thanks so much for the kind words. Marge- my obnoxious little friend... ROFL...you've got me cracking up again! now...about that chair...lol. ya know, if you hadn't sat there in the first place, i wouldn't have had to snitch...lol. ((((((((((((((((BIG HUGS)))))))))))))))) Rindercella- thank you so much for the kind words. they really mean alot to me. glad you enjoyed. thanks again all, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
||
|
Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Vicky, you did this brilliantly and made it look easy. When I grow up I wanna be just like you. Be well Keth Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
||
|
vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Kethry- wow...thank you so much. i really appreciate your kind words. hugs, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
||
|
dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
padiddle, padiddle at my sanity, widdle..!! LOL..but i love this..and the last line..after getting thru my confusion..(lol) was very cool beans hugs, dg "i could hide out under there...i just made you say 'underwear'...i could leave but i'll just stay--all my stuff's here anyway..." |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
