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Ron K. Fox
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0 posted 2000-10-26 12:28 PM


Whisper me a dream
Soft
Clouds
Wandering
Aimlessly
Whisper me a song
Doves
Cooing
Angelic
Sighs
Whisper me a Love
Roses
Unfurling
Delicate
Prize
Whisper me a dream



[This message has been edited by Ron K. Fox (edited 10-27-2000).]

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Paula Finn
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missouri
1 posted 2000-10-26 01:11 PM


I'll whisper to you
Of soft feather beds
Of roses in moonlight
And rain on the roof

I'll whisper the dream
Of holding you tight
As the sun comes up
And the new day dawns

I'll whisper this love
Thats growing here
Fresh and bright
Just for you


Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
2 posted 2000-10-26 01:14 PM


Sorry, didn't mean to interupt this whisper...    Wonderful write, as I have found yours to be. (tiptoeing out quietly)
Ron K. Fox
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3 posted 2000-10-26 01:17 PM


wow, never expected a response so nice. thank you Paula.
Victoria
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4 posted 2000-10-26 01:18 PM


We can peek in on them Mark.haa..i hope they dont see us..stop it Mark ..i said stop it.haa..GET OUT OF HERE..

btw loved it Ron.. ..STOP IT MARK..


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


Nate Dogg
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Georgia, Fulton
5 posted 2000-10-26 01:20 PM


Ron, this piece is very soft, gentle and well-written...a brilliant piece!

Nathan

Ron K. Fox
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6 posted 2000-10-26 01:20 PM


Thanks Mark, for the comment, lol I'll get a shout from my wife in a sec! (jealous little devil, she is) Ron
Ron K. Fox
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7 posted 2000-10-26 01:22 PM


thank you Victoria, thank you nate. you guys trying to get me in trouble lol
catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
8 posted 2000-10-26 08:32 PM


Ron, this is peaceful and loving. But I caught that little bit on "delicate lies", which can ruin even the sweetest whisper.
Great poem, love your writing.
Sandra

Ron K. Fox
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9 posted 2000-10-26 09:02 PM


love isn't always perfect, sometimes we'll tell the one we love  delicate lies to please them. You'll sometimes do anything for the one you love
Gentle Spirit
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10 posted 2000-10-26 09:32 PM


Ron, your whispers are of beautiful words.  This was sweet.  Well done.  
Tara Simms
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11 posted 2000-10-26 10:38 PM


Ron, beautiful write, but don't mar your love with dishonesty.  The pain it inevitably brings can tear one apart.

Take me as I am or watch me as I go

spiked
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12 posted 2000-10-26 10:47 PM


Ron this is great. It unfolds like a lullabye.
Enjoyed Much,
Rich

peppermint35
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13 posted 2000-10-27 02:29 AM


You whisper dreams with the best of them Ron   I do agree...even white lies sometimes cause pain on down the line...

My motto is total honesty (I've even been told brutal honesty  laughs )

Peppermint
Life is a Wheel

Charisma
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lost in blue pages
14 posted 2000-10-27 05:25 AM


whisper softly in your ear,
wishing that you can hear,
this delicate hum in your dream,
sweet roses is what it mean,
then clouds of love will coming trough,
in this softly sweet dream of you.

And Mark, you've  been heard...not quiet enough.....LOL....Victoria didn't whisper..*LOL*

Charisma



Ron K. Fox
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15 posted 2000-10-27 08:50 AM


Thank you everyone....ok
maybe
Roses
Unfurling
Delicate
Lies
should  be

Roses
Unfurling
Delicate
Prize

Does that work better?


Alle'cram
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16 posted 2000-10-27 08:53 AM


how does the song go, "tell me a lie"! whisper anytime...good 'en!    Marcy
BloomingRose
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17 posted 2000-10-27 08:57 AM


Ron~ You have a very special way with words. Beautiful poem.
Deb

peppermint35
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18 posted 2000-10-27 10:13 AM


It works well!!!  You deserve the prize, Ron   You do have a wonderful way with words

Peppermint
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