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fool
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0 posted 2000-10-26 01:51 AM


Quietly,
with gentle motion,
I begin to flow,
soothing the frozen ground around me,
I cut a shallow path into the earth,
flow to you,
flow for you,
I bleed to your feet.

Softly,
with pure devotion,
I melt the ice around you,
turning cold rejection to water,
I remove the glittering white,
replace it with liquid care,
for you Im there,
I take the hard guardian away.

Gently,
with raw emotion,
I pour myself over you,
smoothing rough edge stone,
soothing pain to the bone,
I cover you in me,
flowing free,
I drown you in my love,
and together,
we are swept away.

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2000-10-26 09:27 AM


a soft...wow...

Karilea
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SEA
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2 posted 2000-10-26 09:49 AM


Fool~ this made me feel SO warm.......this is wonderful!!    -SEA
Irish Rose
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3 posted 2000-10-26 09:58 AM


This is one of the most beautiful poems I've read in awhile. Enjoyed this one very much.

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses
over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey.""
Laurie Lee

Kathleen


Ron K. Fox
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4 posted 2000-10-26 10:06 AM


Fool you ain't. this is a very beautifully written poem. Ron
Marge Tindal
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5 posted 2000-10-26 10:36 AM


Fool~
What a powerfully moving poem.

'I cover you in me,
flowing free'


What a gorgeous thought.
~*Marge*~



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Beth
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6 posted 2000-10-26 10:55 AM


~Brilliant....Absolutely brilliant..I loved this!!~

~Cherie~

fool
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7 posted 2000-10-26 05:44 PM


Sunshine~ *gentle smile*,thankyou for the wow  .
Sea~ Glad you enjoyed it sea.

Irish Rose ~ That is a very big compliment,thank you very much.

Ron~ thanks Ron,mind you,I am a much bigger fool than you might imagine lol.

Marge ~ You say the nicest things Marge *kiss*

Beth~ Thankyou so much Beth  

Kethry
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8 posted 2000-10-28 09:50 PM


Oh Fool,
Nectar to the bee, for me.BTTT
Kethry


Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy

Aimster
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9 posted 2000-10-28 10:11 PM


nope your no fool, thats for
sure...this was breathtakingly
beautiful. your words "poured"
over my soul and made me smile.
thank you. beautiful write.

take care.
amy  

Alle'cram
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10 posted 2000-10-28 11:38 PM


somebody throw water on me, WoW!! Agreeing with Ron, 'fool you aint'. Great poem. Marcy
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