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Wilfred Yeats
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since 2000-08-04
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0 posted 2000-10-25 10:23 AM



Is it sin?
How we whisper?
Like boys smoking
Behind the school

I see the smile
In your words
Feel your flesh
Warm as we speak
Like teens exploring
New feelings

You don't withdraw
But blush
A downward glance
Turns up
To meet my eyes

My imagination
Rampant
Sees your smile
Draws you close
For the hesitant kiss

I don't know
Who
Is more lost
Who -
Feels more found
Who
Feels more desire

I hear your sigh
Humming a tune
For you
We dance
Kisses are sipped
Desire drips

I thirst
For you
I hunger so
For you

No other vintage
Can satiate me


© Copyright 2000 Wilfred Yeats - All Rights Reserved
peppermint35
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1 posted 2000-10-25 10:25 AM


Ummmmm, yes!!!  This stirs the mind

Peppermint
Life is a Wheel

doreen peri
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2 posted 2000-10-25 10:34 AM


great lines here:

"I don't know
Who
Is more lost
Who -
Feels more found"

and love the sounds of these words strung together:

"We dance
Kisses are sipped
Desire drips"

a good display of longing
is it sin? geez... you had to ask, didn't you? lol - major question  

SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

3 posted 2000-10-25 11:03 AM


~This is truly wonderful writing. Wonderful to read. Mmm. Very nice. Thank you sir. *Peace.
Sunshine
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4 posted 2000-10-25 11:08 AM


{~,^}...speechless...again...

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ



Paula Finn
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5 posted 2000-10-25 01:52 PM


May I have a sip?
Gemini
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6 posted 2000-10-25 02:05 PM


Awesome!
Martie
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7 posted 2000-10-25 05:42 PM


Bill--lovely piece of a longing heart you have written...
Charisma
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8 posted 2000-10-25 05:56 PM


*great lines.....and so full with desire...

excellent penned, as always

Charisma


Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
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9 posted 2000-10-25 07:21 PM


Wil,
Kisses are sipped
desire dripped.

Sensual, beautiful and totally awesome
Keth


Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy

Wilfred Yeats
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10 posted 2000-10-25 09:05 PM


Peppermiint-
the 'mind'? - I was aiming elsewhere ~G~
Thanks

Doreen -
"sin" - was just to get you to read LOL - Thanks

Spitfire-
and peace and thanks to you -  

Karilea-
Speechless? - I find that hard to believe ~G~
Thanks  

Paula -
Only if you're not in AA - Thanks

Gemini- Martie- Charisma
Thank You      

Kethry-
I never thought of my writing as awesome - thank you  

Mark Bohannan
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11 posted 2000-10-25 09:14 PM


A sin????  Well is it a sin to give of yourself to one that is able to receive as well as give back totally?  I think not.  The sin would be in turning your back on a gift bestowed upon you in my book.   YES, I will agree with AWESOME and you might as well get used to it being called such and thinking of it that way because it truely is.  {Nice to see you wearing that crown with such a high shine on it}
Alle'cram
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12 posted 2000-10-25 09:22 PM


Wilfred Yeats
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13 posted 2000-10-26 12:25 PM


Mark =
we've got to come up with something new - aside from not entertaining us - we're not entertaining anyone else - I will leave it at thanks for now till I think of something ~G~

Alle'cram-
someday- when you're in the mood - you can explain your 'handle' - I find it intriguing - Thank you

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