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Surely From Hell - Paradelle
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores 
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Surely From Hell - Paradelle ~*Marge Tindal*~ Darkest night of nights Darkest night of nights Deepest ghostly shadows walking Deepest ghostly shadows walking Ghostly night of deepest shadows Walking darkest nights Stirring eye of newt in pot of black Stirring eye of newt in pot of black Bubbling caldron draws the evil Bubbling caldron draws the evil Eye of newt draws the evil stirring In pot of caldron bubbling black No cries of trick or treat choices No cries of trick or treat choices Tiny voices screaming with fear Tiny voices screaming with fear Tiny cries of no trick or treat choices Voices screaming with fear Darkest nights stirring Deepest ghostly shadows walking Bubbling black newt in pot of caldron Draws eye of the evil night No cries of trick or treat choices Fear screaming with tiny voices |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
You've introduced me to something new This is so effective a verse Wonderfully written by the master poetess of intriguing phrases Liz |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lizzie~ Grab a big bottle of Tylenol - and hop down to the Work Shop ... The teacher is missing-in-action, but there's an explanation of the requirements for the form. They do have a special on Tylenol at WalMart this week!  Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Marge~~~~ Spoooooky. Deb |
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jonmcm Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 222England |
Marge, Spooky indeed; I hope this is not written from experience  Best wishes Jon |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Oooooo I like it I like it!!! and I always buy my tylenol by the case...so I never run out |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Marge.....what a wonderful suprise... this is so new for me, and wondering what I could find in this verse....and I found a wonderful poem....intrige by it. loved it.....Charisma |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
So this is the style that has poor sweet serenity raving mad..lol...hhhhhmmmmm... maybe I need to give this one a go as well. We shall see. Twas spooky indeed but the spookiest part is that I didn't know that it was you stirring the pot that night when I was screaming for help. (wink) From hell indeed this night was. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BloomingRose~ Yah ! It spooks me too ! JonMc~ Heh - Heh ! Could be ! ButterfliesDC~ It takes a case to get through one of these. Thanks, gal. Charisma~ So glad to intrigue you. MarkB~ Yah ! For sure ! I can fully understand Serenity's rant and rave ! But ... she shares her Tylenol ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Marge, this piece is very creative, fresh, and innovative as only a poet of your caliber could come up with this fabulous piece. Nathan |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Grrr....guess I better head to Walmart then...and sigh...back to the workshop!!! This is great, Marge, and it just makes me realize how much I hate the one I wrote. Grrr....ack, ack, banging head on monitor... |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Marge, so this is what a paradelle is supposed to be! I'll have to get to the workshop to see if I can write within the rules. Scary and brilliant at the same time. Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Marge--the choice of this form with this particular subject matter was so effective...the repetition pulled more depth from the darkness of it...great poem, loved it! |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
WWWWhhhhoooo!!! WWWWhhhhooooo!!! BBHHOO!! I'm scared!!!!! Anybody got a good used riding boom for sale? Somebody borrowed mine and broke it.... OOOOOOOoooooooOOOOOOOooooooooooooooooOOOOOOOO |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
this is great! It'd make a great halloween verse to read to kids at...Midnight of course! Ron |
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LoriJaye Junior Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 34Massachusetts USA |
*cowering under my desk* Great mood you've set! I LOVE form poetry - I will have to check out the Workshop and see what kind of trouble I can get myself into! hehe =) LJ (PS - This really IS a great place - so much talent here - I'm in awe!) "A smile is when your inner beauty comes outside." |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Nate, my friend~ Thank you always for your views. You are greatly appreciated. Serenity~ Shucks ... I'm not crazy about the form, but I do enjoy a grueling challenge. Knowing you, you'll crank out a beaut ! Kethry~ It almost became an agony of defeat moment, but I swallowed another handful of Tylenol and forged ahead. Thanks ... check out the stuff in Poetry Workshop. Martie~ There are some good ones by DrMoose1 in workshop ... check 'em out ! Thank you. Marcy~ LOL ! I think Auntie Em has one left after the tornado ! RonFox~ I wouldn't do that to any kid ! LOL ! LoriJaye~ I'm so glad you are enjoying the talent here - you add to our poet gene pool ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
climbing into bed climbing into bed covering up my head covering up my head very imaginative Marge! Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
Hey Marge, I took one look at the paradelle class and skedaddled quick smart. I can see that you have the knack, but how long did it take?... you have done a wonderful job of it.. wonderful. Maybe when I've got a few spare weeks, I'll give this format a try. Linda Munday. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Marge- this is great, my friend. i found the thread with the guidelines for this style, and i think i may have to give it a shot. you've certainly done a wonderful job with yours. btw...about that workshop...you're still sittin' in my chair!!! lol hugs, -vicky < !signature--> "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 10-26-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Prometheus~ Tee-Hee ! It takes determination to get through one of these. Linda~ Yeah ... I saw you scat ! Me ? A glutton for punishment ! It took about 40 minutes - HARD LABOR ! Come on back and give it a try ! Vicky~ And you done good ! Shucks ... the teacher still hasn't shown up !  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Poet's Sister Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 80North Carolina |
Marge - I don't think I ever even heard the word paradelle before but if this is an example I think I really like it! This format really suits the poem...or maybe this poem really fits the format...anyhow, I think I'll read this to my class for Halloween!  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
PoetsSister~ I'd never heard of it before either, until a friend bet me a few months back that I couldn't write one ... I did and swore it'd be the last one. I was wrong ... If you go to the Poetry Workshop Forum the teacher (who has been missing in action) has the proper instructions listed. Glad to have you share it with your students. Thanks for the read. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very spooky! Well done, Marge! Denise |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
ooohhhh,...bubble, bubble... GREAT! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Dear Marge, You have woven a wonderful tale here ( I didn't for a moment doubt that you would )! Very eerie , dearie . Doc |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Marge~ I don't think there is anything you can't write and do it awesome!! This is so good.Now I think I'll go to the workshop in a bit and give it a go  -SEA |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
This form isnt my favorite, but for this particular time of year *Halloween* I think it is perfect..great job Marge! ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Denise~ It must be the form ... cause it's spooky ! Karilea~ Thanks. Does it matter that it gave me Tylenol headache #9 ? Dr.Moose~ Thank you. You should post yours here in Open ! SEA~ Oh, dear ! Get your Tylenol FIRST ! Victoria~ I don't think it could possibly be anyone's favorite. But, yes it's apt for the season. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Halloween BUMP for teacher ! ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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BSC
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Shaking, cringing, sweating, eyes buggin' out of my head.....Don't know what scares me more, the great poem ~ or the style it's written in...  ...I can't even say that paradelle word, much less think of writing that way.....But you, dear lady, have done it boooooootifully! Bonnie |
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