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Tara Simms
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0 posted 2000-10-25 07:17 AM


Hanging up

“I love you”
you breathed the words softly
and time stood still
For an instant
we were as before
Your voice reached out to me—
A lover’s caress in the dark
I felt the familiar warmth
envelop me once again
As my pulse raced
I asked what you said
Your reply was short—
“Nothing”—
and my pain returned



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Elizabeth Santos
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1 posted 2000-10-25 07:33 AM


"Nothing" is worse than nothing at all
And silence is devastating
I got caught up in your well written little poem
Liz

Alan
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2 posted 2000-10-25 07:43 AM


Silence is loud sometimes. But "nothing" cuts like a knife. I loved your poem even though it is sad.
Butterflies_dont_cry
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3 posted 2000-10-25 08:37 AM


Tara* This was woven with tears instead of ink...excellent writing~
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4 posted 2000-10-25 08:47 AM


butterflies have found the right words.....woven with tears instead of ink...
"nothing" said it all....

(((hugs)))~~~~take care~~~~~Charisma

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5 posted 2000-10-25 09:08 AM


Tara, hold on to the whisper, rather than the nothing. It might feel better.
Take care. I understand.
Sandra

peppermint35
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6 posted 2000-10-25 09:18 AM


I felt the flow through hope and back into pain.  Emotions such as this are sometimes hard to express, but you have done it so very well... hold onto the joy and release the pain ... keep on writing it out

Peppermint
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7 posted 2000-10-25 12:38 PM


There are always those moments aren't there Tara?  If only we could string them together. . .

This is beautiful. . . sad, but beautiful. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


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8 posted 2000-10-25 01:02 PM


Such a shame he can not express his feelings..very heartfelt..

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


Tara Simms
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9 posted 2000-10-25 08:22 PM


Elizabeth and Alan, I agree with you both.  "nothing" hurts more than anything.  

Sandra, it's hard to hold on to the "I love you" when it hurts almost as much.

BDC and Charisma, that was beautifully put.  "woven with tears instead of ink". Even in reaching out to comfort me, you are poetic.

peppermint35, how do you hold onto the joy when pain has been apliqued over it?

Sven, the loving moments WERE strung together into a beautiful necklace, like pearls.  When we parted, the string broke and sent those memories scattering across the floor.  That's all I have left.  Unstrung pearls.

Victoria, he can express his emotions, although I'm sure it's just as hard for him as it is for me.  He's a poet, I'm willing to bet he's got several poems lying around, unposted.


Take me as I am or watch me as I go

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