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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2000-10-24 10:12 PM



I want
to mesmerize
your mind...
I want
to dazzle
ear with song,
I want
your hand
in search of mine...
I want you
right where
you belong...
I want
your breath
so rich~~
combined~

I need.
I feel
the pierce of prong...
I weep.
I think
the fault is mine.

I ache.

and somehow,
that's sublime...



© Copyright 2000 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
doreen peri
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1 posted 2000-10-24 10:25 PM


"I ache.

and somehow,
that's sublime."

now that's some kinda passion, girl!! that's what I'M talkin' about! love it

SEA
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2 posted 2000-10-24 10:26 PM


Serenity~ Wow........this is amazing..... -SEA
Balladeer
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3 posted 2000-10-24 10:27 PM


So THAT'S  where the phrase "hurts so good" came from?

As always, weighty words from the serene one  


spiked
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since 2000-01-13
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4 posted 2000-10-24 10:34 PM


Beautifully Written think I am feeling sleepy verrry sleepy. Your not trying hypnotism are you?
Rich

Butterflies_dont_cry
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5 posted 2000-10-24 11:33 PM


OOOOOOOOOOOOOOO I love this one!!
It sings a song of serenity...and
is woven like only you can do my
dear friend...yeppers I love it yes
yes I do...love you too  

StarGlow
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6 posted 2000-10-25 12:31 PM


senerity,  girl, I'm taking notes, this is good.    enjoyed.    Star
Toddles
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7 posted 2000-10-25 12:34 PM


Very well said... BRAVO!


[This message has been edited by Toddles (edited 10-25-2000).]

Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
8 posted 2000-10-25 12:51 PM


Somehow...YOU are sublime, my friend. Your words move me.....magnificent..
serenity blaze
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9 posted 2000-10-25 09:08 AM


doreen---thanks lady, but it's some kind of ache too...sigh, and hugs.

SEA------thank you for the amazing..

'deer----It's a little known fact, that I invented that term...I know...should've sold t shirts or something...hugs and grins.

Rich-----whatever it takes.

Holly----it just slipped..smiles and hugs...

Star-----love your name.  Thank you.

PdV------Thanks.  Just knitting some "booties"---maybe a bib---hmmm...maybe just a string to tie around my finger to remind me....

and just for today...I think I'm going back to bed.  Thank you, kind forum people!!!

peppermint35
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10 posted 2000-10-25 09:21 AM


This is truly sublime...beautifully written

Peppermint
Life is a Wheel

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
11 posted 2000-10-25 10:09 AM


You do dazzle me my dear friend, each and everyday with just the thoughts of how special you are.  Your song is heard as well and it is as sweet as the lips that sing them.
SpitFire
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12 posted 2000-10-25 11:32 AM


~Serenity,...I always enjoy the way your words speak. And YOU dazzle my ear (eye) with song,...each time I open you ya know. Take care you. *Peace.
serenity blaze
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13 posted 2000-10-25 03:37 PM


peppermint---(I always think schnapps after thinking that) thank you much for reading...I do appreciate it.

Mark m'angelheart--thanks luvie...it doesn't get any sweeter than that!

Spitfire---thank you lady...your opinion means a lot to me...I'll have to e ya some giggles later....

and Toddles--sorry for the oversight, of course, I thank you for reading.

Okay, I'm awake.  Be afraid world. Be very afraid....lol...and thank you all kindly.

peppermint35
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14 posted 2000-10-27 09:56 AM


Peppermint schnapps???  Oh!!!  I get it, I get it (little slow, long, long night  laughs:   It was supposed to be peppermint patty after the charlie brown character, but that was taken.....

actually, I really like just Pepper or Pep...if you wish

BTW, this is still simply marvelous, dahling!!!

Peppermint
Life is a Wheel

Alle'cram
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since 2000-02-28
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Texas
15 posted 2000-10-27 10:01 AM


i love your thinker, love how you think and when I grown up, I wanna write just like you. Marcy
serenity blaze
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16 posted 2000-10-27 11:44 AM


Just a quick thank you to Marcy--ya made me smile...see, I'm still not sure what I want to be when I grow up---and I'm 39!!!!!

Thanks for the compliment and the giggle.

Wilfred Yeats
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17 posted 2000-10-27 02:07 PM


yes - it is -   - 'nuff said!
catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
18 posted 2000-10-27 02:09 PM


S, I want all that too, why can't we have it???
This is a flawless, perfect poem.
Sandra

Martie
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19 posted 2000-10-27 02:12 PM


Serenity--Your poetry just gets better and better...I really like this!
serenity blaze
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20 posted 2000-10-27 02:19 PM


Thank you, Wilfred.

Sandra, Hugs to you.

Martie, from you, that is a hand over heart thank you...you are an awesome writer!

now...off to house drudgery...

PEACE, good forum people.  Love to all.

redheart angrybraids
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honolulu, hawaii
21 posted 2000-10-27 02:42 PM


my heartis  throbbing, how beautiful yor words always are a resinate in my mind.

Kindly,
Redheart Angrybraids

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