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catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone

0 posted 2000-10-24 02:57 PM


Days of wine and candles
days of fantasy
nights of deepest passion
nights when you loved me..

So abruptly gone now
faded into mist
memories torment me
still feel your last kiss..

I paid for them with tears
special times with you
cost was far too heavy
left me black and blue..

Still my time machine calls
longing to come home
back to when your loving
pushed back the alone...

© Copyright 2000 Sandra - All Rights Reserved
Butterflies_dont_cry
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1 posted 2000-10-24 04:56 PM


After reading this it shows that you paid a
very high price to not be alone...excellent
work and all my best to you~

Marsha
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2 posted 2000-10-24 05:03 PM


Oh this is great, and have I been there, Mmm remember it well. Not fun, not good and not what I wanted, it takes a long time for this hurt to disappear. In the meantime, you are still writing so magnificently, and I applaud your spirit.
Take care
                  Marsha
                            


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning

CocoBaci
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3 posted 2000-10-24 05:06 PM


Catalina...A splendid write from your pen and I must say the expression tuggz at my heart
Thanks for sharing once again
Coco

SEA
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with you
4 posted 2000-10-24 05:08 PM


Catalinamoon~ this is heartbreaking........so very sad to me...but I thought the way you penned it was excellent.   -SEA
BirdeeB
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since 2000-09-16
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5 posted 2000-10-24 11:28 PM


God that was so pretty.
Thank you for your response also, I appreciate it very much
Write on!
BirdeeB

"So don't judge me by my failures, only by my dreams" SR71



Jamie
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Blue Heaven
6 posted 2000-10-24 11:29 PM


your words express the pain and remorse all too well...well written



Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".



Ron K. Fox
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7 posted 2000-10-24 11:47 PM


beautifully done...my heart is feeling it. Ron
peppermint35
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8 posted 2000-10-25 12:25 PM


Since you express this so well that my heart breaks for the pain....I can only say, wonderfully written and I hope the writing excorcised some of the demon!!!

Peppermint
Life is a Wheel

snowpants
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9 posted 2000-10-25 12:39 PM


Another sad, but wonderful write, Sandra.  I know it doesn't seem like it now, but time does bring relief.  I know that.  Take care, my friend.

sp  


Of all sad words of tongue or pen, the saddest are these: 'it might have been.' -John Greenleaf Whittier

Tara Simms
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10 posted 2000-10-25 07:11 AM


"back when your loving
pushed back the alone"--excellent lines! I'm glad I have such great poetry to read while I wallow in this feeling.


Take me as I am or watch me as I go

Charisma
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lost in blue pages
11 posted 2000-10-25 08:26 AM


this sounds so familiar for me,
you have penned your feelings so open and clear, feeling the price you paid.

Charisma

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