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LoriJaye
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since 2000-10-23
Posts 34
Massachusetts USA

0 posted 2000-10-23 11:23 PM


Tomorrow’s Train

sleep eluded her
as dreams ran astray;
tomorrow he’d leave
though she wished he’d stay.

as night crept silent,
she quietly rose,
floated towards window
wearing forlorn pose.

she watched as full moon
smiled sadly at her
aware haunted thoughts
possessed with no cure.

when she heard him shift,
she turned ‘round to gaze
upon his still form
through bereft tear’s haze.

draped in moonlight’s shawl,
she reached out to touch,
stroke hair from the face
she loved too damn much.

withdrew with choked cry,
afraid to give in;
his hand caught her wrist,
he pulled her to him.

his arms circled her,
he kissed away tears,
murmured assurance,
released those old fears.

soothed by his strength,
she allowed eyes to meet,
saw love shining there
beside passion’s heat.

with delighted cry,
she kissed him madly,
full heart and soul, she
surrendered gladly.

and though he did leave
on tomorrow’s train,
she finally believed
they’d make love again.




"A smile is when your inner beauty comes outside."

© Copyright 2000 LoriJaye - All Rights Reserved
snowpants
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since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061
KS
1 posted 2000-10-23 11:27 PM


'draped in moonlight’s shawl,
she reached out to touch,
stroke hair from the face
she loved too damn much.'

Wow!  Got me with those lines!  This is absolutely beautiful!  Great first post!  Welcome to Passions.  Looking forward to reading more of your work!

sp  


Of all sad words of tongue or pen, the saddest are these: 'it might have been.' -John Greenleaf Whittier

Temptress
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2 posted 2000-10-23 11:30 PM


Wow! Very good work. My favorite was the grabbing of the wrist! I melted from there on!   Beautiful!

Dee
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since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia
3 posted 2000-10-23 11:30 PM


Sometimes I read and don't post because you can only say something is beautiful so many ways.
This touched me as I can understand the pain of wondering, and the release of finding out the answers.
You have made a grand entrance, welcome.
Dee

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
4 posted 2000-10-23 11:33 PM


I was so much looking forward to your first
post...I must admit I already visited your
web page and your work is awesome!  A
perfect entrance to Passions and I do hope
that you will enjoy your stay.  Thank you
for joining us...you and your talent are a
most welcome addition~


Daniel J D
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since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471
Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia
5 posted 2000-10-23 11:42 PM


LoriJaye,
What an entrance into Passions, Welcome to this poets lair. Look forward to reading more.

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

6 posted 2000-10-24 12:04 PM


You've got quite a knack for description!

Welcome to passions!

Enjoyed this very much!

Marge Tindal
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Florida's Foreverly Shores
7 posted 2000-10-24 12:20 PM


LoriJaye~
Welcome to the posting side of Passions.
You will enjoy the friendship circle we share.

I visited your web site and found it lovley.

This post is very charismatic ...
pulling the reader along.
Lovely.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
8 posted 2000-10-24 06:42 AM


   Welcome to Passions LJ    

What a wonderful and lyrical poem you've chosen for your entrance! The flow is lovely, and the sentiments paint such beautiful and vivid visuals ... I very much enjoyed this piece, and look forward to more!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

*PS ... very nice website!

Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA
9 posted 2000-10-24 07:40 AM


Welcome aboard the Passions train, Lori... This is indeed a wonderful place - You'll love it here - I'm looking forward to reading more of your work... Check your email for a special greeting..
BSC
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10 posted 2000-10-24 07:46 AM


Simply beautiful, such imagery!  Bonnie
Lorelei54
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11 posted 2000-10-24 09:30 AM


beautiful..just beautiful

welcome to passions

Charisma
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lost in blue pages
12 posted 2000-10-24 09:54 AM


welcome to passions.....
and you have made a great entrance.

I will look out for more.

Charisma

Wilfred Yeats
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since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704
Wilmington, Delaware
13 posted 2000-10-24 11:21 AM


your posting here is long overdue -~G~ - but your entrance - is no less spectacular than I would have expected  WELCOME  
LoriJaye
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since 2000-10-23
Posts 34
Massachusetts USA
14 posted 2000-10-24 07:56 PM


Oh, MY!  I don't know where to begin...I am thoroughly overwhelmed by the response and warm welcome I've received here...y'all have left me speechless! Now what am I to do? *laughing*

Thank you! Each one individually and all as a truly wonderful passel of passionate poets...

snowpants and Temptress and Dee and Butterflies don't cry and Daniel J D and Serenity and Marge and Kit and Nan and Bonnie and Lorelei and Charisma and Wil...

Thank you for reading and responding. I look forward to enjoying the talent I've found here and sharing my words with y'all.

(((((hugs))))) LJ =*)

Jamie
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since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168
Blue Heaven
15 posted 2000-10-24 08:00 PM


A most wonderful first post. Welcome to the passions family, with poems like this I look forward to reading more.



Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".



Sven
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East Lansing, MI USA
16 posted 2000-10-24 08:04 PM


Welcome LoriJaye!!!

This is an excellent first poem. . . got any extra tickets for that train????

Wonderful. . .  

---------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
17 posted 2000-10-24 09:54 PM


LoriJaye,

Beautiful and heart felt writing for your first post.  I am betting you fit right in here!!  

Welcome to Passions!!!  Looking forward to reading more of your work.  

Lone Wolf


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

LoriJaye
Junior Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 34
Massachusetts USA
18 posted 2000-10-25 07:46 AM


Prometheus, Sven, and Lone Wolf - thank you!! Thank you so much! Such a wonderful welcome I've received...I will definitely be posting more. =)

And Sven, as for those tickets...why don't I just dump out the contents of this sack of a purse and see what I've got for ya, 'kay? hehe

*giggling*  LJ

Alan
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since 2000-09-12
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right next door
19 posted 2000-10-25 07:54 AM


Wonderful poem.....great feelings showing.....welcome to passions....
ma miller
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 806

20 posted 2000-10-25 11:21 AM


awesome ... a great read ... welcome

My calling before me, let quill be my offering;
For to be called poet, no greater gift to receive.

M.A.



LoriJaye
Junior Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 34
Massachusetts USA
21 posted 2000-10-25 06:38 PM


Alan and M.A. - Thank you both so much! =)
Paula Finn
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Posts 5546
missouri
22 posted 2000-10-26 02:17 AM


WOW welcome to our world...and such a great entrance you have made
Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

23 posted 2000-10-26 02:45 AM


Welcome to Passions, this is very good. I'm impressed and look forward to reading more.

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses
over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey.""
Laurie Lee

Kathleen


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