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Have You Seen My Love Tonight?
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Have You Seen My Love Tonight? |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Have You Seen My Love Tonight? Have you seen my love tonight? He left our fragrant bed He’s heading toward horizon’s edge Aglow in sunset red He left aboard a dreamer’s craft With billowing sails full blown Translucent veils of confidence That shroud the sea’s unknown To seek that starlit fantasy That urge for golden bliss Sailing past the isle of splendor Blind to what he missed Have you seen my love tonight Adrift on ocean swells Looking for a treasure dream His youthful heart compels He left the gift of love behind So unaware the loss Still drifting on the open sea Beneath the Southern Cross I now have sought a different dream And all my dreams came true But still his memory lingers here In shades of midnight blue The days and nights of life pass by And yearning turns to dread Have you seen my love sail by Aglow in sunset red? Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 10-23-2000).] |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Elizabeth... I can only say that this poem is perfect, in every way. I love the way it flows so smooth, and paints such pictures as I read. It's beautiful.......  Follow your dream! |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
Elizabeth, you have such a glorious talent!Your perfect rhymes and rhythms spurring exquisite mental pictures, wringing out emotions one by one… again and again such gorgeous verses. A languid, engaging read as well. (Oh, and I like the repetitive of the first stanza as the last… lovely touch) ~ (another) Beth  I hate quotations. Tell me what you know. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Oh Liz Lovely tender thoughts I hope you see your love tonight Shining in all thats bright tonight I hope you sail upon a thousand sea's Riding waves of ecstasy I hope you see your love tonight Shining brightly As your love TONIGHT Love ya Liz Winged ~HUGs~ Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Absolutely beautiful Elizabeth..a joy to read..  ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Elizabeth, this is so soft and beautiful. I think this is one for my library. Dee |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Such a soulful, beautiful poem Elizabeth...The way your poetry flows across the page is utterly amazing...and always a joy to read. |
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Poet's Sister Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 80North Carolina |
Elizabeth - I'm glad all your dreams came true. Still, there is nothing quite like a lost love and you tell the story of this one so beautifully. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
EXCELLENT writing.... love it.... Charisma |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"He left aboard a dreamer’s craft With billowing sails full blown Translucent veils of confidence That shroud the sea’s unknown" Oh Liz ... your poems continue to touch my heart both with the depth of their meaning and messages, and for the lyrical flow which so sweetly sings to me. Just loved this! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elizabeth~ Such a wistful and lovely write. You've got the poetic flair working this morning - beautiful, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, C'est Magnifique, I'm not sure of the spelling so I checked it on the spell check and it came up with magnifico. Either one is good. Very proud of you and he's not gone. Love Sy |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
So this is how a poem is supposed to flow. I can only wish mine would flow half that well. Wonderful poem. I really enjoyed it |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz--You write with such perfect rhythm and rhyme...the beauty of your words are always touching to the heart. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I liken this to the beautiful songs of Norway in honor of Valhalla...and this should be kept among your finest treasures... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thank you all for your comments on this poem. it slipped back so fast, I didn't have a chance to read your remarks until now, and they are very much appreciated liz |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Liz-Beautiful thoughts, beautiful words. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Liz- I cannot but echo my predecessors - you flow, rhythm and rhyme - have made this perfect - and a copy goes in my treasure box |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"and yearning turns to dread." intersting how we desperately want to hold onto every part of love that touches our heart...James |
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