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Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
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Victoria Australia

0 posted 2000-10-23 03:54 AM


But soft…
the ache begins,
wanting,
waiting,
yearning,
learning to love
is hard,
there is promise
in your smile
on your swollen lips
flushed
blushing

I bluff
and smile
a small sad smile
hoping
you see me
the naked soul
not
the immaculate woman
the ice maiden
the pedestal image

for a night only
I pray
love me
fill me
take away my sorrow
just once
only once
touch me.



Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy

© Copyright 2000 Lynne Dale - All Rights Reserved
Sunnyone
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since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
1 posted 2000-10-23 04:00 AM


Oh, Kethry.....after reading this, I hope that all your wishes come true.  This is full of yearning, and longing. What a wonderful poem it is!!  


Follow your dream!


Elizabeth Cor
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since 2000-10-13
Posts 879
Over the river and through the woods
2 posted 2000-10-23 04:40 AM


I bluff
and smile
a small sad smile
hoping
you see me
the naked soul
not
the immaculate woman
the ice maiden
the pedestal image

WOW.


~ Beth

tracie66
Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713
Australia
3 posted 2000-10-23 05:04 AM


Hey Keth
Blown away by this most excellent write...you've done well  
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



Kethry
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Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
4 posted 2000-10-23 06:32 AM


Sunny1, thanks, it's been so long I don't know if I would recognise my wishes coming true *Laughs*

Beth,
thank you for the kind wow and the repeat of my words.

Tracie66,
thanks for stopping by and reading
Be well
Keth


Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
5 posted 2000-10-23 06:38 AM


Wow Kethry....this is excellent!  
for a night only
I pray
love me
fill me
take away my sorrow
just once
only once
touch me.


This part says it all....and so powerfully,
excellent work!!

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

6 posted 2000-10-23 09:40 AM


Kethry, standing in line to applaud.  This is a tender, poignant shadow of a soul's longing.  Fantastic!
Kethry
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Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
7 posted 2000-10-23 04:20 PM


BDC,
thanks for the comment and the repeat of my words.

serenity,
thanks for the applause and the assumption of a queue.

Be well
Kethry


Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy

SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

8 posted 2000-10-23 04:25 PM


~Ahh, Keth,...such an apt title....what a breath of want. Your work still gets me,...everytime K. *Peace you.
Charisma
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lost in blue pages
9 posted 2000-10-23 04:56 PM


sweet desire, wishes...hope they come true...
and hope that he captured your naked soul..
...superb

Charisma

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
10 posted 2000-10-24 03:10 AM


Fire,
thanks I was a little pensive in this write, so I'm glad it came through.

Charisma,
what a beautiful name you have. Thanks for the high praise. I don't get many superbs  

Be well
Kethry


Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
11 posted 2000-10-24 07:54 AM


Kethry I believe people get what they yearn for...just sometimes it isn't exactly the one they yearn for...or the timing is way off...yet sooner or later love is gonna getcha...thats what I believe...James
Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
12 posted 2000-10-24 08:10 AM


James,
its good that you believe that. Thanks for responding.
Be well
Kethry


Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy

catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
13 posted 2000-10-24 02:01 PM


Oh K, me too, I am yearning. Wonderful poem here, flows perfectly.
Sandra

Wilfred Yeats
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since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704
Wilmington, Delaware
14 posted 2000-10-24 02:29 PM


If someone asked for a definition of poignancy I would refer them to this poem. you've expressed it so beautifully.

Snow
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desert flower looking for rain
15 posted 2000-10-24 02:43 PM


OUTSTANDING POETRY!!!
I could say more, but it looks like whatever else I would say would be but an echo of everyone else!!!!  clapping

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
16 posted 2000-10-24 03:53 PM


Sandra,
thanks for the response *HuGS*

Wil,
Thanks for dropping by and commenting. Such a nice man you are.

Snow,
I heard that outstanding, thank you so much.

Be well
Kethry


Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy

CocoBaci
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043

17 posted 2000-10-24 04:27 PM



Very nice poem Kethry
A pleasure to read...
Coco


Kethry
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Victoria Australia
18 posted 2000-10-25 06:52 AM


Thanks Coco,
I appreciate you stopping by.
Be well
Kethry


Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy

peppermint35
Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106
Texas, USA
19 posted 2000-10-25 09:42 AM


May I just add my sincere compliments on a piece that is so well written; it makes me yearn too

Absolutely beautiful!!!

Peppermint
Life is a Wheel

Nate Dogg
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since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658
Georgia, Fulton
20 posted 2000-10-25 03:58 PM


This piece is very definitive of it's title and it the rhythm was very beautiful Kethry....great job!

Nathan

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
21 posted 2000-10-25 05:04 PM


Peppermint25,
thank you so much, I haven't seen your name here before, where do you post?

Nate Dog,
always a pleasure to please your constuctive mind.
Be well
Kethry


Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy

Balladeer
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Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA
22 posted 2000-10-27 01:07 AM


Kethry, whoever this poem is for is one lucky guy,,,or bloke  
snowpants
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Posts 2061
KS
23 posted 2000-10-27 01:41 AM


'hoping
you see me
the naked soul
not
the immaculate woman
the ice maiden
the pedestal image'

Excellent lines here, kethry!!  I love it!!

sp  


Of all sad words of tongue or pen, the saddest are these: 'it might have been.' -John Greenleaf Whittier

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

24 posted 2000-10-28 03:39 AM


I loved it!

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses
over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey.""
Laurie Lee

Kathleen


Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
25 posted 2000-10-28 07:37 AM


Beautiful writing, Kethry
Liz

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
26 posted 2000-10-28 09:10 PM


'Deer I didn't write this for anyone, it just needed to be be written.  

Snowpants thanks for repeating my words and the "excellent"

Irish Rose. Glad you liked it, thanks.

Liz Thanks for the response.

Be well
Kethry


Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy

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