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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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I prop up this life with crutches; still slip in oil, still spill tears. wah wah wah wah wah I reached the mountain's summit, realized i still have my fears. blah blah blah blah blah I stand triumphant looking out; on the trumpet and bugle i sound. rah rah rah rah rah It's not what I lost, nor what I found. ha ha ha ha ha |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
You've touched on several emotions Mike, from sadness through triumphant joy in this piece ... I really liked your opening line: "I prop up this life with crutches;". You got me thinking on this one (and smiling with the la la la's)  Best wishes, /Kit |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Mike~ I was coming to read this and Kit just beat me to it....... I loved this...... "Still slip in oil, still spill tears" -SEA |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
i like this alot..very creative.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Now, this is cool...inventive...that always gets me... K"He looked across the silky surface of the Severn... it was a famously difficult river with fierce tides..." From Jack Maggs |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
excellent!!! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BSquirrel~ You do play with your thoughts ! Kind of a fun read of emotions. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks all for replying and glad you enjoyed. Mike |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Mike...I'm sick of my moods too. and I'm cracking up over here, and I hope you know why...maybe your poetry should have a "warning" or something...oh goodness. wah wah wah wah wah. I think you're terrific, you know that? |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
I enjoyed it too with its subtle, sardonic voice. All your different kinds of la la's were an interesting touch! Rainydays |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Interesting poem of emotions. A "tune" most can relate to. Deb |
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