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Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2000-10-22 07:19 PM


I linger within my thoughts,
Much too long,
I ponder being myself,
And why no happiness brought,
Much too long.
Alone to ponder myself.

Then moments
Stretch out away from being,
Then being,
Not being,
Will stretch backward to being,
Then moments

The flower has dried complete,
Ends its time of smelling sweet,
Captures a shade of beauty,
Of all it became to be;
The letter has yellow corners,
From sunlight on the counter,
Creased from often refolding
The words in my mind holding.
The corner behind the chair,
And an active spider there,
Spinning a web up so high
In hopes of a careless fly;
Which lands light on the counter,
Near flower that dried complete.

Then moments
Will stretch backward to being,
Not being,
Then being,
Stretch out away from being,
Then moments.

The flicker of candlelight,
Then darkness,
And pondering has ended,
The candle burned half the night,
Through darkness,
Will the spirit be mended?

Gloom2000


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GreyMouser
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since 2000-10-20
Posts 17

1 posted 2000-10-22 08:51 PM


well done PG
have felt some of those lines many times
*s*
Mike

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989

2 posted 2000-10-22 08:54 PM


The spirit, can always be mended I think Gloom.  Your ponderings make for some very insightful thinking.  ~Quietly thinking....~
Gemini
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since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203
Wisconsin, USA
3 posted 2000-10-22 09:04 PM


Professor Gloom-These mixed feelings, so hard to deal with, you've captured them well, nice read.
Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082
of Depression
4 posted 2000-10-23 07:24 AM



Thank you, GreyMouser,
Glad my words could touch you.

Thank you, Gentle Spirit,
I am pleased my words could cause thought;
I tend to ponder my many mistakes.

Thank you, Gemini,
A poet can attempt to capture
An emotion or a moment, glad I was successful

Gloom

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
5 posted 2000-10-23 07:41 AM


This piece gave me much to think about...I
think if we are honest most of us have had
moments such as this and can relate in our
own way...powerful writing!

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
6 posted 2000-10-23 10:34 AM


The flower has dried complete,
Ends its time of smelling sweet,
Captures a shade of beauty,
Of all it became to be;
The letter has yellow corners,
From sunlight on the counter,
"Creased from often refolding
The words in my mind holding.
The corner behind the chair,
And an active spider there,
Spinning a web up so high
In hopes of a careless fly;
Which lands light on the counter,
Near flower that dried complete."

Powerful poem! You give us all much to
ponder. And I agree with Holly--we ALL
can relate to these type of moments from
time to time in our lives. Thanks for
posting this little jewel. Take care.
Amy  


Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082
of Depression
7 posted 2000-10-24 05:35 AM


Thank you, Butterflies_dont_cry,
To cause thought is an accomplishment for a simple poem,
Gland you liked my words.

Thank you, Aimster,
I am pleased you can glean a bit of my words
To please you.

Gloom

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