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Feeling Unjust |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Feeling Unjust Has there ever been harvest without toil, ever a climb made without the air thinning as each step drew closer to the crown. Have limbs never grown weary -- their strength tested while carrying the seeds of tomorrow's sustenance, as today's hunger burns in the belly. Is there a sacrifice known that hasn't caused any bleeding, or the shedding of doleful tears as it was laid down. Has incense ever burned in the temple, that its smoke and ash haven't served as a mark of consecration -- no, not that I've ever known. So when you say you're sorry -- feeling unjust -- wondering if you should let me go, remember -- I was born in heaven, and since walked through barren fields. Patience is the prize I've won, and for you I wear it well. Robert Joseph ~enb~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Robert this was absolutely "AWESOME"....loved the read and I will be back to it I am sure. Beautifully penned |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
wonderful piece from your hand Robert, can't find the right words to tell you how I liked it.... Charisma. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This makes me realize that even in being satisfied, we are always hungry again, for more food, poetry, life and love. It's a wonderful message and the words become more meaningful each time I read it. "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
A very enjoyable piece Robert..i too read more then once..and could read it again and again..  ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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jonmcm Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 222England |
Nice one Robert Thanks Jon |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Robert--Wisdom packed and a killer ending..a great read..thank you. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Fantastic piece of writing, Robert! Very nice! Denise |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
RJ~ 'remember -- I was born in heaven, and since walked through barren fields.' Outstanding ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Robert, So when you say you're sorry -- feeling unjust -- wondering if you should let me go, remember -- I was born in heaven, and since walked through barren fields. Patience is the prize I've won, and for you I wear it well. This was stunning. Wonderful writing!! Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
RJ~ I REALLY liked this...... -SEA |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Mark, Charisma, Kathleen, Victoria, Jon, Martie, Denise, Marge, Lone(Jennifer)Wolf, SEA.. Thank you all so much, I'm extremely grateful for the warm and thoughtful way you each respond...a pleasure to share with you! Robert Joseph |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Everytime I read one of your poems I am awed and amazed by the depths you reach...this is exceptional writing my friend |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Robert~ A harvest without toil is usually taken for granted... loved your poem. Deb |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Paula, and Deb... Thank you both so much. Your generous responses are greatly appreciated. Robert Joseph |
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