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I've Tried..... |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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I tried to hold a rainbow in my hands once just for fun. I tried to hold a comet by its tail - it can't be done. I tried to stop the sun's evaporation of the dew. I tried to love another but I couldn't.. She's not you. I tried to banish storm clouds with the movement of my hand. I tried to learn the answers to what I don't understand. I tried to find the Golden Fleece - the Holy Grail, too... I tried to love another but I couldn't.. She's not you. It seems my life is filled with quests that I cannot attain Like stopping leaves from falling or abolishment of pain.. Trying to find Nirvana where dreams really can come true... Trying to find a woman I can love as I loved you. So I'll keep chasing rainbows with my arms held open wide. Perhaps I'll find a comet that will take me for a ride. Perhaps I'll banish storm clouds - paint the sky in shades of blue But there won't be another I will love as I loved you. Have you ever imagined a world with no hypothetical situations? |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Sir Balladeer, this one is simply beautiful: the style, message, content, scansion, rhyme scheme....this one really needs to be submitted to the main site. So...what are ya waiting for? |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
'Deer, s'wonderful. Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
A very special love indeed..beautifully written balladeer..  ~Victoria~< !signature--> A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) [This message has been edited by Victoria (edited 10-21-2000).] |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
No matter how hard we try, we can never replace a love that's true or the memories that go with it, it seems. This is a very touching poem, Balladeer, and one that is written from a tender heart........  Follow your dream! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"It seems my life is filled with quests that I cannot attain Like stopping leaves from falling or abolishment of pain.." Absolutely beautiful Michael! Do you get tired of me telling you how wonderful you are?  Everything from the rhythm and flow ... through rhyme and sentiments. I love the positive feel you've wrapped into the end. I too try to catch that rainbow, but why must it be so elusive at times? Best wishes, /Kit |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Beautiful, "butterbean".... |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
WOW!!! well, i've tried to write responses to poetry and read people's hearts but it never hit me like this before...i'm glad i read this one because life is short and i identified with these lines but that's just me.. it's a really fine reflecton on it all... and i could say, in my own life "i tried", too.. and if i wrote that statement, there would be no truer words which were ever written or spoken.. you wrote it well, Michael! oh, what a Ballad-dear you are! i enjoyed this completely....truly...thank you... < !signature--> - all you can ever really ask out of life is a sincere apology and some decent poetry - [This message has been edited by doreen peri (edited 10-21-2000).] |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Balladeer~ Stunning....... -SEA |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Put me down will ya...on the other hand, fun is good...*g* Wish I could have written this, oh well, life is full of wishing, hey?.. HUSG |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
it's breathtakingly beautiful, shining with immortal love and yes, I would submit it on the main site, I think this is an amazing dedication of love. The last line is a poetic seal of excellence.< !signature--> "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen [This message has been edited by Irish Rose (edited 10-22-2000).] |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Ohhhh WoW....This is simply breathtaking 'Deer, rainbows, comets, ahhhh, so tender and beautiful. Bonnie |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Once you have tasted the one real love, there just is no replacing it at all. Wonderful verse from you my friend. I look forward each day to see the name "Balladeer" somewhere on the page. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer~ My how I love your romanticism - You could talk the stars from the sky with sweet enticing rhyme Walk across the Milky Way with phrases for all time Though it may go without saying I really feel I should Tell you just how you make me feel and that's oh, so good ! So lay these romantic notions on my heart of want and need Continue to write the verses and I'll be sure to read. *You deserve more than a *Sigh* but ... it will just have to do.  You rock my heart, sweet poet ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Damn deer, so sentimental! I bow to the master of POETRY! (guess that should be a curtsey eh?)  I'm in AWE deer, AWE! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
You DO write so well, deer...and always manage to touch the heart...love this one! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
yesterday I gave Mark two romantic crowns today I must give you at least three. - you outshine us both - by a wide margin - this one goes in my treasure box!! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is a real 'heart' piece! Very touching, Balladeer! Lovely sentiments! I love the repetition too. It adds drama to it, I think! Denise |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Sometimes all you can do is *sigh* when you read poetry this good..... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer, Tisk, tisk, didn't I tell you to stop chasing rainbows and shooting stars, you can really get burnt with them. Now this is really a long journey into nowhere. Wonderful poem. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I tried to tell you how good you are but you were off catching shooting stars you needn't have walked off so far O wait...you found Toe and John there at the bar! {~,^} I can't be the only one not drooling over this, so had to add some levity! 'Deer...thanks! I say, submit! [to the main site, that is!] Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Ive tried to tell you how I love when you write like this Ive tried to tell you that your poems bring me bliss Ive tried to tell you that you are a poet of grace SO by now you should know ... you put a smile upon my face *** later me-ohhowilovewhenyouwritelikethis-gator jm |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I'd like to apologize to all of you...it's just that sometimes by the time I get back to the computer my poem is on the back pages and I feel funny bouncing it back up to acknowledge replies but please know that I read and smile, laugh, chuckle, admire and appreciate every one.....I appreciate you all very much |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Even me??? My Deer romantic friend???.. This is a good'n, Sweets.. |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
Kind sir, I see now why they call you "Balladeer"...surely devotion cannot ever have been spoken more gallantly. Thank you. Rainydays |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Bal-- sigh...tis beautiful what you have penned here. this sweet declaration of your heart sings softly to my heart. you write such different styles--making me laugh out loud one moment and wipe a tear away the next. thanks so much! take care. amy |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
This is so sweetly sung...there will never be another you...I know this feeling well... |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
my sentiments exactly... nice job Deer.. the human heart has huge capicity for love -- I'm always amazed when I discover I've grown a whole new heart to love someone with in a unique way... |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
How did I miss this one? It is too beautiful to let fall into the oblivion of Open 10. Lovely work. I'm impressed as usual. *Jenn* |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
'Deer this is beautiful. So sweet and sad. I'm glad you answered so I could see it. Dee |
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Toddles Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 396New Orleans, Louisiana |
Balladeer, I REALLY like this one & I could relate! It's good to be back!!! |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
this is remarkable Balladeer, wow your a romantic aren't you? awesome masterpiece of art! |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
*SIGH* this is so beautiful and romantic..... yes one more inhere that *bow for the master poet * superb as always.....Charisma |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
If you find that comet that will take you for a ride (This is of course assuming that the comet's VERY wide) Could I hitch a ride with you upon that shooting star? I won't be a bother; I'm not going very far. I promise I won't talk too much and I'll try not to nag... I just need a satellite to help me find Toerag! *G* I enjoyed this much, Deer one! |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
I've tried to find the words to convey my thoughts to you. They never come so easy, they fail me at times...'tis true. For yet again you've touched a place where rare few have ever been. And only you can pen those words which bring a sigh, my friend. So as I try to find the words, have patience as I do... And never forget the times we've shared...for I'll never forget my time with you. Lovely, Michael...as always. Miss ya! Take care. Sally |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
Wonderful, beautiful and everything else nice that goes with it lol Great job, touching to say the least.Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
BRAVO! Nothing but perfection and a tender message to go with it LIz |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Again, I thank all of you wonderful people. THANK YOU!Suthern, you can always catch a ride on the comet with me...but, if you're looking for Toe, you must be comet-ose!  Sally S...How wonderful to see your name appear again! Yep, those were the days, my friend...I hope all is well for you and thank you for the kind words.... |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
Yet again another wonderful post by Balladeer. You never stop amazing me. Poetry must be like breathing to you. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Outstanding Balladeer... I enjoyed this tremendously Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Back to the top again. I've stopped trying to decide which of your's I like the best. They're all the best in my book. fh |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
This is beautiful work, deer one. Corinne |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
'deery 'deer... wunneful... Hey - drop me a line hey? (yeah - YOU get to do all the work in this relationship!!!) Hehe...hugs my friend - and congrats on a work well done. K "He looked across the silky surface of the Severn... it was a famously difficult river with fierce tides..." From Jack Maggs |
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Kelly Member
since 1999-07-03
Posts 145 |
I love it. I can really relate to this one. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
O Sir Balladeer... I have tried hard to be here at PiP just to read gems like these.... and I am so glad that I could make it this day... This is a classic... Regards, Sudhir. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Rainbows kiss the heavens with the colors of life...I love to view them and have even chased a few to see where they ended this was beautiful.~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Balladeer, This was so wonderful, I know this one is true, but I know some day I will find another that will give me reason to not want any more. Loved this poem. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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