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If You Could Thread the Stars
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If You Could Thread the Stars |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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If You Could Thread the Stars If you could reap the petals of every rose on earth If you could fill a tresure chest with jewels of golden worth If you could thread the stars into a necklace twinkling bright I’d trade them all for just one kiss in shadows of the night Whatever promise fills your mind, no matter what you do There’s nothing that can near compare the love I have for you Even if you churned the sea into a wishing well Even if winged angels were entranced within your spell If you could write a song for me that echos in the breeze And silences the mocking bird, and calms the mighty seas If you could fill these promises from out your whispering lips The splendors couldn’t match the gift of just one tender kiss Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 10-21-2000).] |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Elizabeth, oh how beautiful this is, utterly beautiful. I'm speachless, this is so lovely and I could never pick a favourite line because it's all wonderful. Take care Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elizabeth~ Just how lovely the thought of threading the stars ! You're twinkling this morning ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Only you could find a way to actually describe love in it's purest form. Exquisite writing from you my friend. You are indeed shining brightly among the stars with this piece as "YOU" have found a way to thread the stars yourself. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
What a wonderful flow Liz! You've not only threaded the stars, but woven a beautiful vision of love within these words. Excellent piece!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
If You Could Thread the Stars If you could reap the petals of every rose on earth If you could fill a tresure chest with jewels of golden worth If you could thread the stars into a necklace twinkling bright I’d trade them all for just one kiss in shadows of the night ================= OH LIZ..this is DIVINE ...EXQUISITE ...EXCEPTIONAL this is indeed breathtaking ... and the whole premise of it...its conception ... simply poetic perfection ... poetic grace in every single perfectly chosen word ... and the imagery.... poetry in motion ... "Even if you churned the sea into a wishing well" now thats one of the coolest images I've ever read... this is poerty at its finest and it comes as no surprise that I find it next to your name. another one for my long list of Liz favs this one was written in the heavens and fell thru the stars... love you poet lady jm |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Magnificent - you bent a beautiful idea around a marvellous phrase! I like this VERY much! So right, so true! HUGS C Read my Words. Read my Face. Don't just look at either. -C |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Ah, Liz, You've done it again. This is a breathtaking poem of a lovers heart that knows a love so great and so pure. Love to you my friend.......Ellie Summers haunting melody that awakens the butterflies, calling them to join the dance in their silent song of praise to God. eL |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I say it seldom - so its impact (for me) retains its value: I can pay you no higher compliment than to say I wish I'd written it myself. I love every single word. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Before I go to work, I'm just going to quickly say that I like this! More later! Elizabeth Something sweet, something sort of grandish, sweeps my soul when thou art near... hedeservesbetter@hotmail.com |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
"thread the stars" is magnificent phrasing, oh Elizabeth, we appreciate you! "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Wow Liz this is remarkable. The phrasing in this is superb. It all gels together all so well... Thanks for the read hon. K |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Liz, do you know this work is superb, and superlatives would be inane. Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Sooooo beautiful, Elizabeth! Enchanting! Denise |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
what a beautiful love song....*sigh* superb....and a pleasure to read this one, you are so talented..I admire your work. Charisma |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz--You are just amazing...and I must agree with Bill...only I could never have done it like this..with such perfection. |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Liz-This was lovingly expressed and beautifully done. |
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Elizabeth
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Well here I am again. Liz, your work is always so beautiful. I loved this--stunning imagery and metaphors. Very touching. Elizabeth Something sweet, something sort of grandish, sweeps my soul when thou art near... hedeservesbetter@hotmail.com |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Evening Elizabeth, A very touching love poem you have written. Your heart must be as tender, as the pen that you used to write this. Bill |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
threading stars is a lovely image all unto itself... magic, Elizabeth...magic... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thank you all so very much for reading and for your lovely comments.I wish I could thank each individually, but I am now a full time nurse and my time is so short. I am very warmed by your responses Liz |
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