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Fantasy Poet ... (moth to the flame)
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Fantasy Poet ... (moth to the flame) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
His words dance and rise with grace upon the page, beckoning to my heart ... his invitation for desires to engage. His rhymes enchant me ... their promises to entice and linger, his verses slide golden rings of love gently 'round my fingers. I long to see love ... through his poetic, gifted, eyes, to share his vision, his dreams, to then see where my future lies. To know his secrets ... to touch the core of his soul's essence, to be consumed and contented by the grace of his poetic presence. Just to know the gifts of his passion's pleasures, to touch, to taste ... to discover his many sensual treasures. Should fate grant this chance ... his every fantasy I wish to fulfill, would my dreams come true as this desire overtakes my will. By his every word conceived ... I am captivated, Transfixed on his offerings ... I am fascinated. Baptize me in the sweet depths of his poetic cascade, I surrender to the temptations as all my resistance fades. Drawn to his poetic promise ... this offering on bended knee. An invitation to taste contentment ... a chance to dance with ecstasy. Temptation and fascination ... born of desperation and desire. To just once ... be touched like this ... to just once be taken higher. Do I look to the stars for the answers ... does the moon know where my heart lies. Will there be anything left of me ... once I drown in the depths of his eyes. Does the sun know the secrets ... will the mist of morn whisper what I should do. Will I be able to find my way back to me ... once I fall any deeper into you. Janet Marie I have a project that may take me from here for a little while ... a new job of sorts ... I will still be stopping into read ... but may not have time to reply as much I love to do. please understand E-mail replies may be slow in returning. please forgive my silence ... and know I'd rather be here. my love to all in poetry land jm [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 10-20-2000).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Do I look to the stars for the answers ... does the moon know where my heart lies. Will there be anything left of me ... once I drown in the depths of his eyes. Does the sun know the secrets ... will the mist of morn whisper what I should do. Will I be able to find my way back to me ... once I fall any deeper into you. Janet--this is wonderful writing...perfect Janet Marie...and yes, trust me you will be there...only bigger and better. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Jm - you are going to have a lot of responses to this - i've no doubt - i can hear the wolves howling - Fantastic write - |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Awwww *blush* Janet - it was SOOOO sweet of you to write this for me!  Hugs lady - good readin'! C Read my Words. Read my Face. Don't just look at either. -C |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
"Do I look to the stars for the answers ... does the moon know where my heart lies. Will there be anything left of me ... once I drown in the depths of his eyes. Does the sun know the secrets ... will the mist of morn whisper what I should do. Will I be able to find my way back to me ... once I fall any deeper into you." --Phenomenal ending to a superb piece of work my friend! I miss seeing you around, but it's great to have you stop in when you can!  *Krista Knutson* "One can never consent to creep when one feels an impulse to soar." Helen Keller |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
JM moth to the flame...you're not to blame... rise to the skies...where fantasy lies... come quick, come quiver...he's the one, who's the giver... rapidly lost can be...the lover of fantasy... do what you must, quick, to trust... and long shall you be, in the romantic fantasy... JM...see you soon |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
awesome poem JM you've penned the emotions so beautifully here. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
wonderful JM |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
"I surrender to temptations as all my resistance fades" Hope you return soon enough, great write, love it. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
"Will there be anything left of me ... once I drown in the depths of his eyes"? therein lies the question, huh? (((hug))) great writing MIA-poet-gator i don't know the answer but i'll tell you this... you sure posed all the questions absolutely perfectly.. Ms. JM POET.. your words dance my screen |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Janet, love it.... must be some good inspiration to get you to write this.  So if I wave a torch in front of you, will you fly into my fire... Parker..... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"Hey lovie..." still recuperating from a kidnapping myself...but it was...well, not so great, but not so bad either. And "they liked me!!! they really liked me!!!" e ya later. *wink* |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
My Sweet SS you have penned the draw to that consuming flame with that wing tipped pen of yours sooooooo well...you KNOW ya di ya di ya yeppers...(ya know I tried the losing the "..." just isn't the same!) So this is about Christopher??  ....nah this flame you are referring to is much much to big ...sorry I owe him a few..LOL Girlie you penned a fantastic weave and I love it when you write about that flame...the fire dance!!! Love ya! **BF's and AW's** |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
You just knew the title would draw me in didn't you. Exquisite is a word that has come up a few times of late, and it certainly applies to this masterful work. Take care!"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Martie ...thank you my sweet friend ...and I do trust you...I ve seen your heart... I read your poetry Wil... LOL...thanks for stopping by to howl and for the fantastic. Christopher ...so who told ya .. man, its so hard to keep a secret in here LOLthank you for the read and for blushing. Krista ... thank you sweets ... I will still be around reading .. cant stay away from poetry. Sunshine ... thank you for the verse and the read.. you pen the moth flame dance well. Rose ... thank you for the awesome dear. Jamie & Daniel .. thank you both kind poets sirs. Dor ... YES.. that is indeed the question.. when i turn into a butterfly and know the answer I will let ya know and this reply by you DANCED on MY screen THANK YOU. P-man ... now you should know about inspiring the lady poets... my sweet swoon gator and you know you dont need no torch ... all ya gotta do is smile...that will be more than enough draw. latersweetteasegator SEN ... you know me baby... got my singe proof mascara on and flying low yea ..you know ... later lovie me Holly ... and ... and .... and then .... YOU KNOW LOL ... me thinks me wings are starting to smoke yes we know...flick thy bick LOL Eagle... hello fellow moth and b-day boy .. and THANK you for the exquisite!!! ...now i feel like its my b-day thanks all for reading ... ya make this moth smile jm [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 10-21-2000).] |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
JM- oh you big sweetheart! what a lovie-dovie one. this was very sweet and so full of compliment, tribute... and desire...  and i know you'll be back. this was a nice note to have an absence on. ------- "his verses slide golden rings of love gently 'round my fingers." "to share his vision, his dreams, to then see where my future lies" ------- and the whole last stanza was great. the golden rings line...great line. the flow and image *brrr!* i got a chill, it's so good! come back soon! < !signature--> I am reminded of the immortal words of Socrates who said, "I drank what?" [This message has been edited by Ethan_Halo (edited 10-21-2000).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
First solid step...followed by another and all out of the attraction to a burning flame. Hhmmmm, sounds like it is going to get nothing but hotter and more intense. So, could this be a bad thing? I think not. Wonderful write my sweet friend and if you lift those wings up off the ground, they wouldn't be smokin so much. You might need them to fly down south again ya know. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"By his every word conceived ... I am captivated, Transfixed on his offerings ... I am fascinated. Baptize me in the sweet depths of his poetic cascade, I surrender to the temptations as all my resistance fades." Dear Janet Marie ... I think this may possibly become a favorite of yours, for me! Wonderful wording, loved the flow, and the sentiments ... aaaahhhh, such beautiful thoughts. Superb writing JM ... I loved this! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
JM, great writing...you are one of the best! Marcy "Will I be able to find my way back to me ... once I fall any deeper into you" |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Ethan ... thank you baby ...for always reading me ...and I love giving ya the chills Mark ... yes my cowboy ...you know me well ...and me thinks its time to let me wings cool and rest a bit .. ya know...yeah you know...and ya know how I love the south TY my sweet friend.Kit ... Thank you SO much... its an honor to be on your fav list...  Marcy... hey you....so good to see you here girlie and TY and yes ... that was my fav line of all too THANK YOU ALL for the reads and kind words. JM |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Janny~ Your words always leave me breathless, this is a most pleasurable read...thanks for sharing and hope to see you back here soon Take care out there and I'm sending a winged ~HUG~ your way Love ya Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Thank you sweet Tracy for the hugs and kind words... also for being a faithful reader of my work... and I hope to not be kept away from my repling for too long ... as I said I will still stop into read as time allows while I do this work .. but I may not be able to reply as much as I love to do... you take care too sweet poet jm |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, This poem is an epopee. And its net will capture many a sun. Now it is up to you to pick the right one. *L* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Sweet Sy...YOU are the epopee ... and me thinks me net has too many holes ... sometimes the sun burns ... Being a moth aint all its cracked up to be... thats why I wear singe proof mascara *winkiewinkie* THANK YOU for the "epic" reply *S* later-wise-poet-gator me |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Janet-- and to think I ALMOST missed this one. gosh I must be starting to slack quite terribly LOL. You KNOW I love it when you write like this. Seems from time to time dear friend...you and I share the same thoughts/feelings. The only difference is that you pen them so much better than me! Just take that compliment and smile. Do what you must, write when you can. I know I along with everyone else here totally understands the duties of real life. None of us can be here as much as we like, and some of us spend wayyyyy to much time here as it is. I know I'm guilty! LOL. Take care. Love ya, Amy P.S. I wrote ya a letter (snail-mail) yeee hawww today. Will send it to ya in tomorrow's mail. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Janet~ I hope you don't stay away too long, as I love reading what your heart creates....... "To know his secrets ... to touch the core of his soul's essence, to be consumed and contented by the grace of his poetic presence" So beautiful. -SEA |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
*exhale* DAMN!!!! I am almost in tears here that was soooooo beautiful. Even my poetic heart is stunned and speechless. I am printing it out and taping it to my wall, so I can read it everyday. Awww man, I think I'm crying now.... but I'm gonna read it again!!! You just became my hero. It's so hard to find the right words to express emotion, but every now and then, someone gets it right. And I don't think there is anything more right than feeling like that! Don't ever stop writing, you'd break my heart. Krissie P.S. Hurry back! I'm sorry for telling u love was unnecessary... making you lose ur way I'm sure I'll be as sad as u feel ~Touch and Go |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Fantasy poet??? JanetMarie, that describes YOU!!! You are definitely worth your weight in Spam...and that's no small compliment, as I'm sure you know Beautiful writing, great creator gator |
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Eskendale Junior Member
since 2000-06-16
Posts 17 |
Yes, I like poets too. Fantastic and well written! |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
almost missed this one.... you have done a great job....mmmm....thought that you were the great poet...really a lovely piece......and hope that we will hear soon from you.....take care. Charisma |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
back to the top you go- I am so very happy that my sonnets did not keep people from reading and appreciating the original - Clearly the unadulterated JM with the totally heartfelt quality is what they wanted and deserved - -Let me applaude you once again |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Janet Marie, this is, well actually I'm speachless, it's so totally breathtaking. Damm where are all my superlatives now when I need them, what can I say, but this moved me to tears. Love this, it's, ........ I have no words, not a one. Take care Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I didn't see this before and now that I have I wonder if I ever felt that at all? I doubt it. Drawn into the eyes of someone and staying there for me are two different things. |
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