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Two Grains of Sand |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869
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We dance in the fragrance of jasmine sands of time dance quickly by two grains of sand..you and I pretending, a sandcastle in the sky A king and a queen..you.. i adore cheek to cheek, across hourglass floor.. only reflection of you in my eyes In mirror of time..we hypnotize We Softly kiss ..as time goes by before tides wash away our love we grasp each grain of sand cherishing before coming to an end Incence of jasmine burns to ashes you my king disappears from my arms walls of the sandcastle fall down and time disappears without a sound Reflection of love forever in our eyes bound by the memory of our kiss upon the tides our love will forever dance under the spotlight of a jasmine moon < !signature--> A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) [This message has been edited by Victoria (edited 10-20-2000).] |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Beautiful piece, Victoria! Corinne |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Oh Agreed. Totally agreed. Exceptionally nice. What a feeling this leaves in ya,... Take care V. *Peace. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
beautifully written, tender and delicate. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Thank you Corinne..Spitfire..and Brian..i really do appreciate you taking time to read..  ..nice to hear from you all..~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Victoria, a romantic, yet somewhat haunting read. Haunting in its loss of love, yet magical in its image. Very nice. Robert Joseph |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Victoria, may I please babble on about how much I love this. It is beautiful, and so entirely perfect I am missing the words to explain.. Sandra |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Robert..thank you for your caring comments..It is nice to hear from you.. Sandra...So glad you like it..thank you for reading all my poems..so nice of you.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Victoria~ Just lovely, as usual ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Thank you Marge...I almost missed your response here ...nice to hear from you. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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BSC
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Ooooohhh "under the spotlight of a jasmine moon" - This is a beautiful piece Victoria, sandcastles, incense, jasmine.....love it. Bonnie |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Thank you Bonnie..nice to hear from you..so glad you enjoyed.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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