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Sunshine
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0 posted 2000-10-20 12:25 PM



From The First

You beckon me,
I willingly follow,
over rocky barrier,
‘cross sleepy hollow,
along the river’s stream,
by the water’s fall,
through the sun’s shine,
just to heed the call…

and were you then, or are you now, a piped piper of this dream, this most intangible stretch of gossamer’s thread and melodious sound with which so tightly you bind ‘round my heart, keeping me close, and I snuggle into your heart, safe, warm, home…

ah comfort, come
thus it is found then
here, right here
in this, the spirit
of you, your essence
encircling me
in garland of gold
as if from the
first day the earth
saw light
and amazed,
when
the light saw
us

and were you then, or are you now, a piped piper of this dream, this most intangible stretch of gossamer’s thread and melodious sound with which so tightly you bind ‘round my heart, keeping me close, and I snuggle into your heart, safe, warm, home…

I shan’t ask
the question
for the truth
lies here, in
your eyes, in
this kiss
in this bliss
on this plane
to which I shall
come
again, and again

and were you then, or are you now, a piped piper of this dream, this most intangible stretch of gossamer’s thread and melodious sound with which so tightly you bind ‘round my heart, keeping me close, and I snuggle into your heart, safe, warm, home…

Yes…




Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ



© Copyright 2000 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Marsha
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1 posted 2000-10-20 12:41 PM


Karilea, come over here, I can't reach to throw the flowers to you. This is so beautiful, so warm and, I just love it. So love, I'll send the truck round with the bouquets then, okay. Just don't you go smiling at the driver, because he's a bit of a lad.   (or so I'm told!)
            
Take care
                    Marsha
                

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2 posted 2000-10-20 12:54 PM


can you hear the song Sunshine?



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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


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3 posted 2000-10-20 02:02 PM


Ah, the love in this, the beauty, the exquisite passion, the dreams.
(can you tell I like it?   )
catalinamoon

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4 posted 2000-10-20 02:11 PM


Karelia--this is equisite in form and content...I am warmed by it!
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5 posted 2000-10-20 02:33 PM


martie said it - exquisite in form AND content - i must agree and like Catalina - I really liked it. btw - 'Karelia' there's a pretty variation~S~
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6 posted 2000-10-20 03:32 PM


Marsha, packing bags...sure you have the room?

Sven, yes, I do...

Cat, yes, I believe I can...

Martie, how warm?...

Mr. Yeats, ditto...

thank you, everyone!
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Karilea
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Mark Bohannan
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7 posted 2000-10-21 03:14 AM


Ahhhh....."there is no place like home"

Beuatiful write from you.

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8 posted 2000-10-21 09:01 AM


Karilea~

Too, too lovely !

'a piped piper of this dream'
I LIKE it !
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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9 posted 2000-10-21 11:39 AM


Mark, thank you...

Marge...you liked, hey?...thanks!


Karilea
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Mark Bohannan
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10 posted 2000-10-21 08:05 PM


as we all know, home is where your heart is and from your beautiful poem, home in your case must be a most wonderous place.  Superb writing.
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11 posted 2000-10-21 08:27 PM


Oh Karilea, I feel wrapped in warm fuzzies, this is just wonderful!  Bonnie
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12 posted 2000-10-21 08:44 PM


This is breathtaking, Karilea! Very beautiful!

Denise

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13 posted 2000-10-21 11:37 PM


Mark, a second read...thank you VERY much...and yes, I know where my heart resides...

Bonnie, thank you...warm fuzzies are good...

denise, 'tis always a pleasure to see you here!


Karilea
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14 posted 2000-10-22 12:58 PM


How tender the words. It draws the heart to seek a warm embrace. Really beautiful.
This one I will save to read many times over.
Deb

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15 posted 2000-10-22 01:22 PM


sunshine,

     i think this was a very deep and meaningful poem.  it sounds like you have a lot of talent and beatuy in your poems.  keep writing, i enjoy reading them.

                      Sincerly,
                       Holly

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16 posted 2000-10-24 09:08 AM


Deb, Holly, thank you both very much for taking time to read this...
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17 posted 2000-10-24 11:48 AM


liked this much!!!!!!!!
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18 posted 2000-10-24 11:50 AM


Dear Sunshine, (I wanted to paste-lost it)
  This is beautiful. Everyone needs a place of which you speak..a plane to... drink and find peace. Our lives are so hetic today that sometimes we must stop, find that place and drink of the living water.  Loved this, so well written and left for the readers mind to gather in. You do this better than anyone I know.     Marcy

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19 posted 2000-11-08 01:41 PM


Vandana...thank you much...

Marcy...you are a breath of fresh air, always! Thank you for believing in what I pen...even on days that I don't have anything to say, reading your responses always fills me with hope...


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ



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20 posted 2000-11-08 01:50 PM


I really liked the way this was done.
I love to read something that is original and this is.

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses
over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey.""
Laurie Lee

Kathleen



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