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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2000-10-20 12:24 PM


A Poem

Everything speaks to me
High tension fingers
Whispering breath
Feelings that yearn
Like molten lead.

Words that echo
Whirling round
Circling head, heart
And rebound.

Aches quakes
Nauseate
No aphrodisiac.

Ecstasy has flown
I am alone.

Please come back.


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Sunshine
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1 posted 2000-10-20 12:27 PM




5, 4, 3, 2, 1...a countdown to a most enticing request...

yes...

most enticing...


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ



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2 posted 2000-10-20 02:22 PM


~Oh WoW ST! Wording, feeling, tone, awesome. *Peace.
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3 posted 2000-10-20 03:42 PM


Incredible poetry! S T A N D I N G   O V A T I O N !!!!
Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2000-10-20 05:37 PM


Karilea,
YES-------*L*

SpitFire,
Thank you for the WOW

Snow,
Wonderful comment, where did you find it?

SEA
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5 posted 2000-10-20 08:12 PM


Seymour~ this is a great poem, I really liked the ending.   -SEA
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6 posted 2000-10-20 08:45 PM


I confess, Sy, the title drew me in....quite a plea from thee  
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7 posted 2000-10-20 09:39 PM


Great job, Seymour! (I'm sighing those last few lines tonight. *S*)
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8 posted 2000-10-20 09:42 PM


Sy~
Fantastic piece of poetry!!!!

Everything speaks to me
High tension fingers
Whispering breath
Feelings that yearn
Like molten lead.

Words that echo
Whirling round
Circling head, heart
And rebound.

Aches quakes
Nauseate
No aphrodisiac.

Ecstasy has flown
I am alone.

Please come back.

take care
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



Denise
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9 posted 2000-10-21 09:33 PM


This is fantastic, Sy! I love this style!

Denise

Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 2000-10-21 09:45 PM


Sea,
Thank you so much.

Balladeer,
I knew the title would catch you. Thanks

Suthern,
Thanks for the great job.

Tracie,
Thanks I'll try to take care.

Denise,
Thank you sweet. *L*

Daniel J D
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11 posted 2000-10-21 09:55 PM


Well! A very worth write, well done and very enticing thoughts.

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

Wilfred Yeats
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12 posted 2000-10-21 10:00 PM


Exceptional ! loved it~S~
Martie
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13 posted 2000-10-21 10:27 PM


Sy--very well done...heart wrenching ending.

[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 10-21-2000).]

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14 posted 2000-10-23 11:34 PM


Simply beautiful! I can see this with two different meanings. I'm glad I found it!

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