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Cuddlez
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since 1999-11-27
Posts 422
Walla Walla, WA 99362

0 posted 2000-10-20 01:57 AM


You told me you were leaving
"I dont know how long
But I will surely keep in touch"

As you know,
how long doesnt count
and promises don't meant that much

"I can make a deal
That ll bring in some money
Its just a little drugs
Just a little funny"

I cried and cajoled
Somehow I managed to make you
Stay

The next day you heard
The drug deal went sour
The cops came and shots rang out

The friend who took your place
Dead- shot six times
Now tell me, are you glad
That you werent there
When the shots rang out

© Copyright 2000 Cuddlez - All Rights Reserved
dgvarner
Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida
1 posted 2000-10-20 04:06 AM


hmm..this is a thinker..

very good msg...i hope others will read this one  

hugs, dg


my soul is painted like the wings of butterflies...fairytales of yesterday will grow but never die...i can fly--my friends -Queen

angelswing
Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705
United Kingdom
2 posted 2000-10-20 06:34 AM


Ummm...Definately a thinker . There is a lot of meaning in this poem, It is very strong and took me some time and reading atleast twice to even start to get the whole picture, you've done a great job, I think the subject is very deep and the emotions that it brings forward are different to what most poems do . I enjoyed it, the subject was so tragic . I'll probably read it again to see if I can work out some more of the feelings that it displays .
L.of.L. Tom .


Don't try, do or do not, there is no try .
- Master Yoda -

Cuddlez
Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 422
Walla Walla, WA 99362
3 posted 2000-10-24 12:26 PM


Thank you- actually a true story...
Thanks again, Cuddlez

Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go.

snowpants
Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061
KS
4 posted 2000-10-25 12:56 PM


Great poem, Cuddlez.  I hope the events made your friend think twice about what he was doing.  Excellent write!

sp  


Of all sad words of tongue or pen, the saddest are these: 'it might have been.' -John Greenleaf Whittier

StarGlow
Junior Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 40

5 posted 2000-10-25 01:17 AM


Somebody's gotta write about it! A fact of life-hope this wasn't factual-given a second chance, needs to realize;  good write. Star
Cuddlez
Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 422
Walla Walla, WA 99362
6 posted 2000-10-29 10:05 PM


Um, Actually it WAS a true story- However the shock factor made me realize my true feelings for the guy involved. Weird how fate is all twisted and bunched, eh?

Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go.

Butterflies_dont_cry
Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
7 posted 2000-10-29 10:10 PM


This guy is very lucky to have you in his
life...a twist of fate...yes I believe it
was~

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