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Au Revoir |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone 
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You promised me a passion of legendary fame, instead you brought disinterest and ever growing pain. You offered me some magic, some happiness again. You only brought me bitter crumbs, the smallest time to lend. You made me think you wanted our time as much as I, and now I see you didn't and I feel like I could die. Another moment lost to us, a time we can't recover. I see the truth, but close my eyes, my heart begins to shudder. I have to be much stronger than I really feel inside. I must perfect the happy face and later on I'll cry. Goodbye my prince of many hopes my man of thousand dreams. I know I have to move on now, although the pain's extreme. So just for now, I say au revoir but not for all of time. A day will come when things will change, I'll see your special sign. And on that day, you'll open up your arms to me again. And I will fall back into them, to never leave again. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
rofl!! i'm laughing at myself... i clicked on your title and i thought yet ANOTHER member of passions was bidding the site goodbye with another story of sorrow... i'm happy that wasn't it... lol but if this song is based on your life, i'm sorry to hear you are going through a goodbye... it's not easy... i know... and this is a well written piece with a lot of emotion... very well done!!! oh, but if you decide to leave, you can always come back under a different name and nobody will know it's you!!! rofl... i'm just messin' with ya, girl!!! great writing.. thanks for the read!  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
CatalinaMoon~ Such a lovely, lovely write. Touching the tenderest reasons for loving to begin with. I'm quite moved at your grace in this piece. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
The grace of the lovliest of hearts in the most deserving way of the true meaning of a "lady" in love. Wonderful write. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Doreen, glad I fooled you LOL I am not going anywhere.. Marge, thank you, what a lovely compliment and Mark, as always, you are very supportive. I feel you have been there in some way. Thanks Sandra |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Sandra,...I don't know what to say,...wonderful for the writing, beautiful for the courage. Truly. *Peace sweetie, always. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
The strength within your heart and soul shined brightly in this piece...excellent writing~ |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'You made me think you wanted our time as much as I, and now I see you didn't' Great writing, Sandra!! Loved it! sp Of all sad words of tongue or pen, the saddest are these: 'it might have been.' -John Greenleaf Whittier |
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Poet's Sister Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 80North Carolina |
catalinamoon, Still sad but it sounds like you might be ready to move on. Your sadness makes for beautiful, emotional pieces. Hope the happiness I pray for you to find does the same. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Saying goodbye yet still holding onto some hope...I know this feeling...I know that I will find love with another but I am still thinking to myself why couldn't it be this one...why must it always be the next one...James |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
"I see the truth, but close my eyes"--I think that's where most of us go wrong. I have to wonder, if I'd left my eyes open to all that was going on, would I still have fallen this hard? Sadly, I think the answer is yes. Take me as I am or watch me as I go |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
Moving on is hard to do when there is still love left.....this is wonderfully written and conveys just the right mix of sadness, resignation and hope!!! Have courage!!! Tomorrow is yet another day Peppermint Life is a Wheel |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Cat, this is lovely, and sad...and yet full of hope...how you wove this all together is wonderful... don't ever put your pen down... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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ParisGrl Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 610 |
Sandra, This is a beautiful and sad poem, all in one. I once went through a relationship like this, where my eyes were closed to the truth. Sadly, it didn't work out. I wish you alot of happiness and luck in your life. Great poem! ~Laura~ |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
Must have missed this poem earlier...you sure do sad poems justice... I have to be much stronger than I really feel inside. I must perfect the happy face and later on I'll cry. hang on...it'll all work out. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Cat- I've known such feelings - as they say: "been there, done that" - but never espressed them with such heartfelt emotion - I shall pray your long term hopes are realized - but not necessarily with this lover - you deserve so much better one that will never leave even once. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
even I must agree....been there, done that... can feel the comfort when people write about the same ache......with deeply emotions. you have expressed your feelings so well. (((warm hug)) Take care ....Charisma |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Sandra, I see faith and desire in your words...a resolve to hope and believe in the magic of love. Charming read. Robert Joseph |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Just beautiful Sandra. . . We say "Au Revoir". . .but we still long to hear that "Bonjour" again in our hearts. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Just beautiful Sandra. . . We say "Au Revoir". . .but we still long to hear that "Bonjour" again in our hearts. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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