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Martie
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0 posted 2000-10-19 08:44 PM



          Melting Time

Remember when the icy wind
caught my scarf and shoes were frozen
and the wooden plank of sidewalk
was chucked with ice that slid to treacherous
and your breath blew soft cool mist
onto my cheek of reddened flower?

That night we cushioned our love touches
in the drapes of locked-in darkness
for it had been lightly raining
and the sound of peace was airing
as the ticking drops drowned day
and dreamed me tender in its minutes.

Some time during that nesting comfort
time quieted and all shapes hearkened
for its return to blowing dripping
but peaceful was the voice that whispered
and the words felt just like cotton
and woke me to a room of darkling.

I left your comfort for the window
to see if day had come and gone
if earth had twirled us into space
for this unsound was filled with wonder
then the drapes of magenta whistled
as I looked between their folding.

A perfect feathering drift of sky
sliced the room and lit your face
and light exploded without shadow
around the pirocantha’s berries
for all around the auburn mountains
crystal layered the morning landscape.

And I was filled with such delight
that bare foot took me to the door
to reach my hand into the flight
of something that so seemed like magic
that to this day the memory catches
across the years of sun’s bright glisten

to the snow that caught my palm
and melted time in Sunday reverence.


In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)

© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
1 posted 2000-10-19 08:48 PM


Okay, so now you have me melting...just beautiful my friend...too beautiful not to reply right away but rest assured I will be back before bedtime even if you don't see me...I will be here..promise you that.
Wilfred Yeats
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2 posted 2000-10-19 08:59 PM


"ticking drops drowned day
and dreamed me tender in its minutes."
and
"A perfect feathering drift of sky
sliced the room and lit your face"
and
"to this day the memory catches
across the years of sun’s bright glisten
to the snow that caught my palm
and melted time in Sunday reverence."

(just a sampling of lines that caught me, held me and added to my admiration of your writing skill ~S~)

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3 posted 2000-10-19 09:39 PM


Martie~

'bare foot took me to the door
to reach my hand into the flight
of something that so seemed like magic
that to this day the memory catches
across the years of sun’s bright glisten

to the snow that caught my palm
and melted time in Sunday reverence.'


Just exquisite memories on display.
Each one wrapped in the poetic paper of your telling.

You are precious !
~*Marge*~





~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Martie
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4 posted 2000-10-19 10:21 PM


Mark--You always make my day with your replies and promises!

Bill--You know the song, "we belong to a mu-tu-al, ad-mir-a-tion society"  Thanks!

Marge--You are a precious sis, you know...Hugs to you!

Butterflies_dont_cry
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5 posted 2000-10-19 10:33 PM


The beauty of this brought a tear to my eyes
Martie...you write so perfectly..a gift that
you continue to use to it's fullest~

Denise
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6 posted 2000-10-19 10:40 PM


Soft and beautiful, Martie!  

Denise

Martie
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7 posted 2000-10-20 12:14 PM


Butterflies--Thank you so much for such lovely words.

Denise--you are such a good friend.

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
8 posted 2000-10-20 01:47 AM


good nite my frined
Janet Marie
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9 posted 2000-10-20 05:46 PM


Some time during that nesting comfort
time quieted and all shapes hearkened
for its return to blowing dripping
but peaceful was the voice that whispered
and the words felt just like cotton
and woke me to a room of darkling.

I left your comfort for the window
to see if day had come and gone
if earth had twirled us into space
for this unsound was filled with wonder
then the drapes of magenta whistled
as I looked between their folding.

A perfect feathering drift of sky
sliced the room and lit your face
and light exploded without shadow
around the pirocantha’s berries
for all around the auburn mountains
crystal layered the morning landscape.

====================
ok...it MUST be something in the water there where you live...
and Im looking out my window RIGHT NOW ...
I dont see these things...
HELL my drapes arent even whistling OR FOLDING!!!!!
where do ya buy those drapes...
does Martha Stewart teach em how to whistle?    

HMMMM ... maybe its those pirocantha’s berries... yeah I'll bet thats it...
ya brew them in tea and they make ya write
AWESOME FREE VERSE...
make your eyes see imagery of magical grace ...
see that was the problem..
all this time...
I been drinking the raspberry tea ...
now if i only knew what pirocantha’s berries looked like LOL J/K ...
oh and BTW....I LOVED THIS ONE!!!!!
later-smoke-those-magic-berrys-gator (hehe)
( now that will make me drapes whistle)    
love ya poetic queen
me




[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 10-20-2000).]

Poertree
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10 posted 2000-10-20 05:48 PM


martie

just behind janet again and i must say i really did like this ...one day i shall get you to post in CA where i can have a good long ramble...lol

thanks

philip

Martie
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11 posted 2000-10-20 09:45 PM


Mark--thanks for stopping buy a second time.

Janet--You just got me to laughing and I haven't laughed all day...I really needed that...Thanks, thanks and thanks..and those berries, they're toxic!

Philip--I was looking forward to a ramble from you...what happened?  Thanks for saying you liked this poem...but I know there is more lurking in that head of yours.

tracie66
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12 posted 2000-10-20 09:53 PM


Martie~
Wonderful melting feeling...thanks
This is such a beautiful piece with such lovely images...great work
Take care
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



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13 posted 2000-10-20 10:01 PM


How I would love to remember those days. How I would love to have lived them!! Thanks to you....I have. Thank you, MArtie  
Dark Angel
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14 posted 2000-10-21 02:20 AM


sighhh, it is beautiful Martie. I love it  

"If my words could blanket the skies
and fill every corner and crevice of
this earth, still this won't be enough"
"Maree Russo"

Martie
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15 posted 2000-10-21 11:38 AM


Tracy--thanks so much for letting me know you liked this!

Balladeer--I know you have other memories..just as sweet.

Maree--thanks for the beauitful.

Sunshine
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16 posted 2003-08-15 08:05 PM


Two things come to mind when I read this, Martie...

that I hadn't seen it before,

and I get to see some who did...

Thank you!

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17 posted 2004-04-18 07:15 PM


"I left your comfort for the window
to see if day had come and gone
if earth had twirled us into space
for this unsound was filled with wonder
then the drapes of magenta whistled
as I looked between their folding."

beautiful!

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