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The Fall Dance
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The Fall Dance |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Ballerina’s dance cascading leaves pirouette golden showers shine crisp air lifts gold leaf ‘round my head like a giggle gently lays it down dance ballerina little ballerina leaf and usher Fall in Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Sunshine-What a cute way of looking at a leaf, I like how you wrote this. |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
stunning simplicity ... |
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BSC
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Perfect autumn dance Karilea....Just beautiful. Bonnie |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
And a beautiful ballet it is..i loved this  ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ Love it ... just love it ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I'm with MA Miller: - "stunning simplicity" says it for me~S~ |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
The ballerina leaf ushers in Fall...what a perfect thought. Nicely done, fallshine  |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Beautiful! A very nice image, and I liked the ballerina comparison. Elizabeth Something sweet, something sort of grandish, sweeps my soul when thou art near... hedeservesbetter@hotmail.com |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I feel as if I am sitting on the ground under this ballerina leaf and waiting to catch her before she lands on the ground. Wonderful write my friend. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea--this is charming...love this line.. 'round my head like a giggle...wonderful! |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Pretty...simple and pretty... I like it. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Wow...look at everyone "fall"ing for this one...love it! And I like my new psuedonym, too!!! Thanks, everyone! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
So many images wrapped into such a brief piece....that feat alone is amazing but to do it in such beautiful style...excellent work~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
wonderful my friend. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
BDC, that fascination of Haiku likes me because of the brevity, thank you for you kind words. Sven, thanks for reading! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
sunshine, wonderful poem, lovely piece. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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