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Getting Back to You.... |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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(feeling a little country and westernish this morning  )Missed the plane - missed the boat There's no train - that's all she wrote Now I don't know what I'm gonna do... Broke my thumb - can't hitch a ride Feel so glum - my donkey died.. Got no way of getting back to you. Don't know where my surfboard's at Roller skate has got a flat.. Got a great big hole in my right shoe... Propeller's broken on my cap Some smart feller stole my map... Got no way of getting back to you. I told you I'd be coming back to get you Told you I'd be coming back to stay.. I don't want you to think that I'd forget you But it's no joke - my compass broke And I can't find my way!!  Pogo stick has lost its spring Got no stick to roll my ring Red wagon fell apart when I was two. Stagecoach wouldn't let me on.. Well, that's it...my hopes are gone Got no way of getting back to you  |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
This was really good..as i sit listening to country music here in Texas.. sounds like somebody is about to be stood up haa...  ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
So Toe's got you writing excuses for him now? LOL. Too bad... you can't stay lost with a forum full of women telling you where to go! LOL Great poem... er... song! *G* [This message has been edited by suthern (edited 10-19-2000).] |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Balladeer~ Everything you write is awesome.......this is so funny...I really enjoyed it. -SEA |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Yeah!! I like this song!! I can hear a melody coming right up.....think I'll try singing it, and then my band can play it, and then we'll record it, and then we'll all be RICH!!!! Yeah......this is a great CW cut!  Follow your dream! |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Made me smile! Elizabeth Something sweet, something sort of grandish, sweeps my soul when thou art near... hedeservesbetter@hotmail.com |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
There's only one thing to do, sprout wings and fly! Before the first heavy snow "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
sending horse... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You charmer, you!!! Come to think of it...a pogo stick would work for me...boing! boing! Yep. Now, that's romance! |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Balladeer-This is so-o cute!, I enjoy your lighthearted way of shining through on this one! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Baby~ If I had to do it I'd gladly jump right to it Man, I'm really not so dumb, give me a highway ... and my thumb ! I'd use whatever mode it takes to get to you make no mistake. If you were too far from me I'd grab a vine and swing the trees ! Me Jane ... me learn from you ... pleaaaaase ! You're just WONDERFUL ! I like this feeling of yours ... Hope it bites again ! Love ya'! ~*Marge*` ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
YEAH 'deer...very country...you forgot one thing tho...all them farm boys have a DEERE in the barn...us'ns in missouri know nothing runs like a 'deer...ooops I mean DEERE. |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Hehehe....Can hear ol' Willie singing this one....Bonnie |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Victoria...I'm shocked! You don't believe this poor man's story? Suthern girl...Toe's probably copying this down as we speak...remember the lines! SEA...your enjoyment is my pleasure. Thank you! Sunny1...sounds like a plan to me! I'd love to hear it and you would be the one to do it! Go, girl!!! Elizabeth...that's the best I can hope for. Thank you very much!!! Rose...my sprouter has been broken for a while but, yes, one must avoid snow at all costs!!! Sunshine.....nag, nag, nag serenity...I had you pegged for a pogo stick woman!!!! I can picture you on one now Gemini...thank you! Sometimes light-hearted is right-hearted Marge...you don't have to worry about how to get here...I'll send a limo!!!! Paula....I didn't forget. I AM a farmboy and I AM from Missouri! I know all about them running Deeres! Good to see you, fellow show-me poet. Bonnie....He would certainly be my first choice, for sure!! Thank you.... Have you ever imagined a world with no hypothetical situations? |
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Lorelei54 Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 458 |
too bad passions can't strum a guitar along with your words...we'd all be a humming the tune, ...as always, another great from the 'deer |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
nice one deer...but there's always a way, nothing's impossible |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
All that's missing is that your dog got killed Just kidding my friend, I happen to love country music and can picture you strumming the banjo to this one |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
well, they always say... whoever "they" are anyway... you can never go back... and often they are right... but, there's always SOME kind of perfect transportation to go forward and i wouldn't recommend a pogo stick or thumbing a ride or a propeller on your hat anyway -- and the thing about it is, there is no map that's really right because the cartographers more than likely screwed up somewhere and everything changes every day.... so unless you have a map that's updated on an hourly basis, if you follow one, you could get lost, so maybe that map thief really was a smart feller... 'cause you wouldn't have wanted to end up at the wrong place... or something... your poem was a Balladeer gem... humorous, yet poignant... and very touching... i LOVE it! it's the type of poem you print out, carry with you forever in a very special place where you keep important treasures so you can read it and know that even though you can't go back, you never know what's up ahead and if you keep your eye out for just the right transportation, you might just get to some really cool perfect place and who knows? maybe the 5:07 train passes by again... y'know? or something... rofl... obviously, i thought this poem was on a deeper level than some of the others who have responded, and i know this isn't the CA forum or anything, so please excuse my desire to express my feelings about it... now that i've rambled, maybe i need some critical analysis... geez luvya! |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
All you missed was something about your mom and a train. Very good, fore long we all can see you on the Grand Ole Oprey.  |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Has the same sweet country flavor as that old chestnut: "I've got tears in my ears from lying on my back in my bed while I cry over you"... - brought the same smile to my face [This message has been edited by Wilfred Yeats (edited 10-20-2000).] |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Cute..wonderful...brought a smile to my face..I'd expect nothing less from you!  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Balladeer--you are a deer...now that means fleet as a......I loved this poem. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
 Come on pardner...saddle up and we can roam the range t'gether in search of some of dem thar wasted days and wasted nights. Hope ya got the gear but if'n ya don't then just holler at me and I will scurry around and get ya some |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
excuses, excuses.....hehehe Delightful Country Western song, Balladeer! Denise |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
finally, someone who "pegged" me... |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
Well pardner, you shore got a ways with them thar words, why didnt ya tell her about the horse ya tried to ride but the horse forgot its dang shoes. Well I shore done enjoyed that thar one. Gonna heat up some beans, on second thought better not, got a fire going, anyways I best be gettin down this here trail a bits, see ya in a spell. well cant spell. so i'll just see ya...unless it's too dark...well til the sun rises agin on the glorious country of Texas(and don't be a tellin' me Texas aint no country...It'dang big enough!). thanks for the story. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
What was I thinking? Forget the wings, there's a stagecoach going every day and Miss Kitty must be waiting anxiously. "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
'Deer I heard you're feeling blue I could loan you my kangaroo the course of true love should not impede if you want, I have a mountain steed The only problem's transport out but don't you worry it my shout anything for love so true anything else I can do for you? Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer, You can always put a postage stamp on your forehead and mail yourself. Wonderful write. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
They say if you play a country and western song backwards, you get the dog back, the girl back, and so on ... soooooo if I read this wonderful poem backwards ... does that mean I'll discover you found a way to get back to me? LOL! Loved this Michael! Best wishes, /Kit |
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