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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Distant Time They met on a night of rhyming delight The weather was warm and the stars were bright. I believe the poem launching the air Was something about a home comings prayer. Where cherry blossoms filled the trees That cast a scent of lovers breeze. And where the lover could not wait The coming of that fate full date. To take her in his loving arms And feel for real her loving charms. To touch her with finger tips To kiss the real of her lips. Pressing to him her open soul The other part to make him whole. They cried a tear it would appear And fantasied the ache of near. Now these friends of poets rhyme Suffer they in distant time. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I'm keeping this one, Sy, keeping it very close... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Very lovely Seymour..and heartfelt..  ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
I'm not going to say much to you regarding this write... Other than it's exquisiteness of heartfelt expression thru rhyme... Leaves a reader delighted they didn't miss reading your poem  Coco |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Ooopsie... I forgot to thread in2 library [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 10-19-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ This is just the prettiest thing. I'm saving it for special late-night meanderings through favorites. Very special it speaks. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Seymour-This is heartfelt and beautiful, I've also marked it to come back to, I liked very much. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Karilea, Your welcome and thanks. Victoria, Thank you for the lovely. CocoBaci, Lovely comment, thank you. Marge, Well I don't mind meandering with you. Gemini, Enjoy and thank you. |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
Pressing to him her open soul The other part to make him whole. They cried a tear it would appear And fantasied the ache of near. Now these friends of poets rhyme Suffer they in distant time. although the entire piece was a wonderful read, I have to say...that when I finished reading the above lines, I had a lump in my throat. Those words closed this piece up perfectly! I loved this and will read it again. Well done. Snow< !signature--> "...I am a river in winter, quiet in the eyes of most but deep, swift and full of life to one, lucky enough to fall through the ice (Watercourse 3/00) [This message has been edited by Snow (edited 10-19-2000).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Seymore...this is about as perfect as they get...lovely words. I've got to agree, the closing...perfect |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
To take her in his loving arms And feel for real her loving charms. To touch her with finger tips To kiss the real of her lips. Pressing to him her open soul The other part to make him whole. They cried a tear it would appear And fantasied the ache of near. Now these friends of poets rhyme Suffer they in distant time. ==================== yes.. this is a VERY special poem SY guy ... you have written many a heart in here ... know the ache well .. got it down to a fine art... an exact science. you captured it in a poem of grace..kissed in rhyme ... yet another keeper from your pen... later-my library is full of you gator  me |
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Temptress
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
BEAUTIFUL..BEAUTIFUL..BEAUTIFUL... Did I say this was beautiful? |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Sy, this could be the longest poem I've ever read. It speaks volumes..... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Snow, Thank you for a beautiful comment. Hoot, Thank you and *L* JM, And my heart is full of your comments. Temptress, Thank you for the beautiful. Balladeer, This is the nicest compliment and it speaks volumes. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sy, This is very romantic and very beautiful Liz |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, So glad you read and liked this poem. Sy |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Oh... this is really beautiful. Deb |
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