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Time That Mystifies
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Time That Mystifies |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Time That Mystifies These are days of desolation Moments of dismay Watching castles in the sand Erode in misty spray These are days of introspection Time that mystifies Watching tip of hawk’s wing Write your name on blackening skies These are days of tearful grief Dark shrouds of agony Hours on end to watch the end Of dreams that used to be This is soul’s enlightenment To know the depths of strife And seek a place of comfort To endure the pains of life Tomorrow will be different All the grief will be undone And feather tips will write my name In gold across the sun And night will not seem dark to me The night that once was ours And God will mirror all our joys In glistening crystal stars Elizabeth Santos |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elizabeth, my friend~ This cries the tears of a loving heart - 'These are days of introspection Time that mystifies Watching tip of hawk’s wing Write your name on blackening skies' 'And God will mirror all our joys In glistening crystal stars' Loving you and sending hugs. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
Thank you Liz, for a bright and beautiful future. Melton |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Your golden days are on their way Watch for old grey beards merry sleigh. Wonderful poem. Love Sy |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Your mind - at least in this one respect - is apparently like mine - able to Janus-like look ahead as well as back - Know that new good days are still to come - what can I offer - other than hugs, prayers and kudos - and the wish that the trials do not scar too deeply, are as brief as you'd have them be, and that the future will ultimately be at least as bright as the best of the past. |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
very nice work Elizabeth ... bringing light to the dark ... well said |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Elizabeth, this is a wonderful poem, so full of hearts tears, and soul wrenching darkness. I applaude your talent, truly beautifully written, your work is always good, and this is no exception. take care Marsha |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Watching tip of hawk’s wing Write your name on blackening skies Love it Elizabeth..The whole poem was just beautiful...as beautiful as a poem can get.  ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
quote: and in that line alone, we are blessed. Prayers are with you and your family, Elizabeth Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Elizabeth, I'm holding tight onto my heart for this one... Oh my, how your words just bring tears 2 my eyes... Once again, a splendid write for all us to read! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I would like to thank all of you for your beautiful remarks to this poem. I hate the fact that my poetry is so sad these days, but I am writing what I feel and I appreciate your understanding and your warm support. Love Liz |
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Elizabeth
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Elizabeth, don't worry about writing sad poetry. Things happen to us that we have no control over, and poetry is our means of expressing our feelings. Just keep on writing. Elizabeth Something sweet, something sort of grandish, sweeps my soul when thou art near... hedeservesbetter@hotmail.com |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz--You have the most beautiful spirit...and it sees past the sadness to the joy...for life is always both....Hugs, my friend. |
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Temptress
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Elizabeth.. This is absolutely powerful work. Don't worry if your work is sad. If that is what you need to sort things out, then so be it. You deserve it. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Elizabeth, when I practice my putting in golf, I can make 20 3-foot putts in a row. When I have a three foot putt to win a tournament, I may succeed or may fail. You, on the other hand with your poetry, never miss. It may be the last shot, the bottom of the ninth, 4th and ten with 5 seconds remaining....and you always come through with excellence regardless of the surrounding curcumstances. You are terrific... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Tomorrow will be different All the grief will be undone And feather tips will write my name In gold across the sun And night will not seem dark to me The night that once was ours And God will mirror all our joys In glistening crystal stars ======================================== Liz my friend, I am in awe more so with this piece than any of your others....and we both know that for that to happen...the heavens themselves would have had to kiss this one and I believe they did. Most amazing in it's message, format, flow, beauty, and beauty and beauty...did I say "Beauty" yet? |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
My heart aches for what you, Tony and the entire family are going through. If I could take it from you, I would. If it were in my power to ease the pain, I would. I'm sure writing is helping you deal with all the sadness and pain. So keep writing. HUGS Denise |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Your warm responses have meant so much to me. Thank you all for that support. Yesterday was one of the worst. having suffered through all the chemo and radiation that he did, they discoved it has now spread to his brain. And the other cancer in the chest and abdomen have grown. It is very difficust to watch "castles in the sand eroding in the misty spray". You can't imagine how nice it was when I opened this post and found your warm remarks Thank you Liz |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
Liz, I want to reprint every line and sing it back to you.. this absolutely bewitches beauty upon the reader. God, I can't stop reading it. It is inspirational, uplifting, and one of the most elegantly written pieces I have ever read. Beautiful... so so beauitful. Thank you for this. ~ Beth |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Elizabeth, this is so beautifully inspiring, I am in awe. I especially love the se two stanzas: "This is soul’s enlightenment To know the depths of strife And seek a place of comfort To endure the pains of life Tomorrow will be different All the grief will be undone And feather tips will write my name In gold across the sun" thank you for sharing this amazing glimpse of your heart |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Beth, Such comments from you is an honor. Thank you so very much Becki, Thank you for your lovely comments. It means so much Liz |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
"These are days of tearful grief Dark shrouds of agony Hours on end to watch the end Of dreams that used to be" This is just awesome.. This stanza really hit me hard...then the ones after that left me feeling hopeful..  |
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