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The Play at the Bay |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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The Play at the Bay There is an island out my way it’s nestled sweet in Newport bay The pavilion opens to water view of pelicans and sea lions too Can you see the color blue tinged with green of sun lit hue the sound of seagulls everywhere and smell of fish-tinged salty air? The fishers on board the ship of dreams their poles lined up and taped it seemed the hole filled up with hope filled cast the bounty swirling gold tinged class I watched the pelicans circle there old sea bums hand out needed share there pushing, shoving, butting in line wishing on free fish to dine The sea lion wallowed in water mall the most graceful beggar of them all he danced around those beaks of hope with nonchalance his spirit soaked I’m sure the scene is viewed again each night as dark is closing in and lovers watch the moon at play holding hands by Newport Bay < !signature--> In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 10-19-2000).] |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
" lovers watch the moon at play holding hands by Newport Bay " was all I needed to complete a beautiful picture in words - wonderful Martie  < !signature-->~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning. ~ Billy Wilder [This message has been edited by Wilfred Yeats (edited 10-19-2000).] |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Martie-Very lovely piece, nicely done, beautiful imagery here. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ What a delightful render of rhyme ! 'The sea lion wallowed in water mall the most graceful beggar of them all he danced around those beaks of hope with nonchalance his spirit soaked' Just grinning at the very picture ! ! Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Martie, what a nice picture. Newport bay is so lovely, and I would wish to be one of those lovers walking hand in hand. They are so happy, and how hard it seems to emulate them. And besides all that, this is a great poem, too! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I can actually say that yep I've been there YAY!!!! to Newport Bay woohooo and I saw those sea lios playing around in the surf. We actually thought they were dolphins til we had a closer look You captured it well Martie, you always do Damn which brings me back to..... I could've met you!! Humph! I will always regret not telling you. Loved your poem Martie Maree |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Wonderful! I can almost smell the salty air. "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bill--Thank you for always being there with such lovely replies. Gemini--Thanks so much for letting me know you enjoyed this poem. Marge--thanks for the grin. catalinamoon--yes, everything looks so beautiful through lovers eyes...thanks for the sweet reply. Maree--I'm so glad you saw this while you were in California...even though we didn't get to meet. Eagle One--what about the fish? Thanks so much for your reply> |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Lovely Martie..I drove thru Newport once and you are very lucky to live in California..at least I would love to live there.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
martie this is fun and flows well and conveys a convincing picture of what sounds to be a lovely place and something more as well ... little tiny typo hew = hue?different to others i've seen of yours but you handle rhyme and meter well ...as i might have guessed ~smile~ thanks P |
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