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The Last time
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The Last time |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
I knocked upon your door You said come-in I found you in the floor Life had put you down With just one blow Oh…how the tears flowed I picked you up, We found common ground I hung around Until the smiles were all around You said we were friends forever more Well baby, Seem that “forever” has come and gone You are never around anymore I am starting to see the score You don’t need me anymore Am I just a piece of trash to be swept out the door You don’t want me around Is that why you can never be found Well Princess I can take a hint I will pick up the pieces of my heart And head for the door When you hear the slamming Of the door You will have to find Someone new to play with For this heart will never more Pick anyone up off the floor You have made me smile You have thrilled me And now, You have put me in denial Now you have chilled me My heart has turned to ice My blood flows cold The game you played so well Has taken its toll You have been the inspiration For more than one But baby this is the last one |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Alan~ this is really strong but so sad to me....I'm glad you're past her now.....very sad.....great writing.  -SEA |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I know these feelings well...but feelings do change and forever does not always mean forever...it is just a simple word meaning so much in time but if the proper action is not taken time takes away our forevers..James |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Well, i dont think you left anything out haa...i think the point was made.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
Sea....does one ever really get over it...I just moved on...glad you liked it Thank you James for your kind words Thank you Victoria...I think I missed one or two things... |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Doors can really be our enemy can't they? Lots of great venting in this one!!!! "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Alan...she wasnt worth your pain...any woman who would let you go...well I cant say what I think here...write me ok? |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
Alan your feelings really poured out in this, don't let it close the door to someone that can share a true rainbow |
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