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Poetic Fire ... Serenity's Candle Dance

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Janet Marie
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0 posted 10-18-2000 02:29 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Janet Marie

Spark to wick
flicker to flame
light the night
once again it came
shadows fall
flame's glow to entrance
watch her flow
Sen's candle dance

In a secret garden
summers humid mist
poet and  verse
engage in poetic tryst
gifted pen
gifted eyes
poetic pleas
poetic reprise
hear her song
hear her cries
sing her harmony
sing softly a lullaby

Wish on the stars
Kiss the moon
dance this dance
for the night ends too soon
Inspiration born
her sweet poetic curse
taste her rhyme
inhale her verse
by candle  glow
her muse on high
read her words ...
witness her fly

Match to wick
Spark to flame
poetry is thy creed
Serenity is thy name


Janet Marie
*winkiewinkie* me twin
me loves ya
****************

~3 A.M.~
matchbox twenty
from the cd: Yourself or Someone Like You

She says it's cold outside, and she hands me my raincoat
She's always worried about things like that.
She says it's all gonna end, and it might as well be my fault
And she only sleeps when it's raining,
And she screams, and her voice is straining,
She says baby,
It's 3AM I must be lonely,
When she says baby,
Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes,
Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it.

She's got a little bit of something, God it's better than nothing
And in her color portrait world she believes that she's got it all
She swears the moon don't hang as quite as high as it used to.
And she only sleeps when it's raining,
And she screams, and her voice is straining,

She says baby,
It's 3AM I must be lonely,
When she says baby,
Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes,
Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it.

She believes that life is made up of all that you're used to
And the clock on the wall, has been stuck at three for days
She thinks that happiness is a mat that sits on her doorway
And outside, it's stopped raining.

Then she says baby,
It's 3AM I must be lonely,
When she says baby,
Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes,
Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it.

It's 3AM I must be lonely,
Oh When she says baby,
Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes,
Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it.





[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 10-18-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Janet Marie - All Rights Reserved
Irie
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1 posted 10-18-2000 02:33 AM       View Profile for Irie   Email Irie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irie

This is fantastic JM!
Made me smile from ear to ear!  


~Sheri

"The things that come to those that wait may be the things
left by those who got there first"


tracie66
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2 posted 10-18-2000 02:45 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Wish on the stars
Kiss the moon
dance this dance
for the night ends too soon
Inspiration born
her sweet poetic curse
taste her rhyme
inhale her verse
by candle  glow
her muse on high
read her words ...
then see her fly

Sweet Janny  
All is beautiful but this my fav
wonderful writing
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


Daniel J D
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3 posted 10-18-2000 03:55 AM       View Profile for Daniel J D   Email Daniel J D   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Daniel J D

Janet Marie,
Beautifully put together, impacting on each other. Well thought of.

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)
Broken_Winged_Angel
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4 posted 10-18-2000 04:20 AM       View Profile for Broken_Winged_Angel   Email Broken_Winged_Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Broken_Winged_Angel's Home Page   View IP for Broken_Winged_Angel

Sweet...This was enjoyable to read...and I loved the way the first ran so smoothly...  

With a little piece of tomorrow,
You'll have to kiss yesterday goodbye.
Because today won't last forever,
And the past will only make you cry.
Elizabeth Cor
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5 posted 10-18-2000 05:48 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Cor   Email Elizabeth Cor   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Cor

Janet, this is gorgeous.

Spark to wick
flicker to flame
light the night                               once again it came
shadows fall

Perhaps the simplest lines, but I love the rhythm.

~ Beth
Mark Bohannan
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Beautiful tribute to a friend that you love and of course she is worth every word anyway.  Your muse writes within your heart and finds the pen so easily and so masterfully these days.  See rehab does help!!!!
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7 posted 10-18-2000 07:10 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

JanetMarie~
Such a sweet intricate verse for our Serenity.

You've captured her well.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Kethry
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8 posted 10-18-2000 07:16 AM       View Profile for Kethry   Email Kethry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kethry

JM,
you could bottle this is so good!
And a lovely tribute as well.
Keth


Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy
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9 posted 10-18-2000 09:11 AM       View Profile for BloomingRose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BloomingRose

This is awesome! No other word will do.
Great flow, simply awesome work.
deb
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I don't know what to say...I woke up feeling so blue...(not black and blue either...) This is a beautiful poem...it touches me so...I love you much m'twin...and of course, you know I've got the printer rolling...thank you Janet.  Meeting you has been like a miracle.  Hugs.  (and I'm OKAY although, HE's looking a  bit skittish this morn...)  Love to you.
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11 posted 10-18-2000 09:38 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Janet~ This is incredible, I love how you do what you do. -SEA
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12 posted 10-18-2000 09:42 AM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

Jan~

this is beautiful! but then again all your work is LOL. I agree w/ ya too...Serenity does pen some lovely poems...hmmmm you two must be related  

love ya,
~amy~  
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13 posted 10-18-2000 11:49 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

I don't know who this "Serenity" person is, but JM - you've done it with this one. A fine tribute to a (I guess... ) fine lady (man?)  

OK - Teasing aside - Knowing Ms. S'en as I do - I can definitely see the pertinance of that particular song. I know it's rare for me to come on in the middle of the night (the song fits me too...) and not find her there, ready to harass ... errr... talk to me.  

Hugs to both o' you!

C
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Janet--This is very touching and so beautifully done...You are such a poet!!!! Serenity is lucky to have you as a friend...me too.
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15 posted 10-18-2000 01:34 PM       View Profile for Jannel   Email Jannel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jannel

this is very nice. i now have the urge to dance in the moonlight.

jann elizabeth

Don't take any wooden nickels
When you sell your soul
-the eels
Janet Marie
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16 posted 10-18-2000 04:54 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

thank you all for coming and dancing  
these replies are very sweet...
and say hey even got a line from the elusive Christopher. thanks ...
yeah.. that song is so her ...


and to me sweet Sen ...
your welcome baby and may I say "DITTO"..
cause you already just know ...
and if this made ya smile then that is all the thanks I need ...
*blowing kisses to the south me twin*
love ya too ...muchly  
me
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17 posted 10-18-2000 05:27 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

WOW!!! Where was my invitation??? I wanted to be there! GEESH! Nobody ever invites me for the good stuff  
    Serenity, can I come to  your next candle dance? Tell them I'm an old flame  

Jan....this is a terrific piece. SPAM RULES!
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SS*
Oooooo I love it!!!! When you are inspired
like this you absolutely GLOW!!! None finer
or more deserving in this than S'en...Me
loves ya both..((hugs girlies))~

Wilfred Yeats
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loved them both - but strangly I preferred the second  - (I must be the weird one ~S~ )
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JM-
oooooo...this one's pur-dee.  
i like the second stanza a lot, for the images and the parallel couplets. they're so cool!
i've never been candle dancing, but it sounds very...magickal...  
the MB20 was also a nice touch. i am not sure of what meaning it holds for you two, but for me it was a song for me and my best friend and i still think of her when i hear it.
a wonderful verse, as always.
a flight of fancy and candle dancing.
the words are magically prancy,
and while Jan's dream
is tribute to serenty's poetic entrancing
i just can't seem
to shake this vision a candle really dancing.

I am reminded of the immortal words of Socrates who said, "I drank what?"
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21 posted 10-19-2000 03:18 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Baby?  It's 3 am I must be lonely...

Glad this was here...grin...love ya babes...

(okay, close enough anyway...my computer clock is "off" a bit too...)  
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22 posted 10-19-2000 03:28 AM       View Profile for EagleOne   Email EagleOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleOne

Simply sensational!

"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest"
~ My Angel.
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23 posted 09-26-2004 02:18 AM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Fantastic capture of the serene one.  This caught my eye as this evening she has me blowing the flames of candles south to send a hurricane back to sea
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24 posted 09-26-2004 05:48 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

*chuckle*

It's true.

I tried to teach her how to blow...



(she's gonna kill me now!)

But really shar, it is a subtle thang...

 
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